Renegade (A Teen Titans fic please post feadback)

[Vivace]

Hey everybody. This is my first post/fanfic so i'd like for my fragle self esteem to stay high (just kidding) anyway, I hope you like it. There will problely be a large number of typoes due to MS Word screwing up with me so I had to use Notepad. It's an idea i had a couple of days back so sorry if it is too confusing. Also it's really long so just bare with me.

"Renegade"

Ch.1

It was a calm peaceful night in Jump City. It was a strong contrast to the peril they were in earlier that day of which the Titan's narrowly rescued them from. But as the evening of cities go, the shops were closing, and workers were returning to their families. In the matter of a few hours a bright city was reduced to a collection of dark buildings, and soon there were only two things that illuminated Jump City. One was the gentle glow of the Moon, and the other was a single room on top of Titan's Tower.




Within the tower Cyborg and Beast Boy were playing a game of X Race 3000, they were playing the best twenty-four out of twenty-five upon Beast Boy's request. The rest of the tower was dark as a cemetery, especially (expessily) Raven's room. Starfire and Raven were fast alseep within their respective rooms, and Robin, was recollecting on the day's events.




"Let's see, that's Cinderblock's attack on the construction site, Mumbo's seige on the magic shop, and Dr. Light's rampage on the electronics store, looking for components for some "machine" he was building. Luckily, we stopped him in time. Hmm...busy day, it's nice to finally get some rest." Then suddenly, like a rush of wind, something returned to him. Something...a little out of place. "That man I saw when we were fighting Dr. Light; he didn't run like the others. He..just stood there. He's either really brave, really stupid, or he's up to something."


Once one cog moved within Robin's brain it was nigh-impossible to stop. As every bit of training returned to him, the ward of the Dark Knight was beginning to put things together.


"Something is just not right about him. Now, what can I remember about that guy?” Hmmmm,Trenchcoat, Dark hair, and a cold emotionless face. He was mumbling something to himself. Now what was it?

"You thought you'd be safe here with the Titans didn't you, Renegade? But even now you are being hunted just like the rest of your kind. You cost us quite a lot,
but don't worry; I'll have my revenge on you. I'll take care of y-"


"Hey Robin, something up?" Cyborg inquired. He and Beast Boy finished their game, and you really don't need a narrator to tell you who was the victor. "I was just walking to my room when I heard you talking to yourself. Is everything okay?"

Robin was surprised; he didn't realize that he was thinking out loud. "I'm fine Cy, sorry to have bothered you."

"It's okay man. I was just checkin' with you." Cyborg exited out of Robin's room and walked sleepily in the direction of his own.

Robin stayed up for a little while longer trying to unravel the secret to this latest and incredibly cryptic enigma.

"It's nothing," Robin finally convinced himself. "I just need to get some sleep."
The rest of the night at the tower was fairly peaceful. But peace, was not with all of Jump City's inhabitants

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"I got careless," remarked a young man. "They shouldn't have found me here. I thought they would leave me alone since I was so close to Titans Tower; I guess I was wrong. These guys are getting bolder."

He was standing in a dark forbidding alley over three thugs, apparently unconscious; each had a pistol clasped within their hand. The Teen himself looked about fifteen/sixteen and had messy brown hair. He wore a gray T-shirt and faded jeans.

"They were easy enough, but these are Vincent's men. And if they're here, he can't be far behind."

The young teenager lifted up his hand, and suddenly, a red jacket that was laying on the pavement to his left, began practically floating in the air making it's way to the one who beckoned it. With the jacket still floating he put both his arms trough and made his way out of the alley.

He began running. He didn't know where to run but he knew it had to be far. And as he ran, He eventually saw a man in the middle of the sidewalk; he was the dark figure that haunted Robin's mind.

"Hello, Ark." Said the dark figure

"Vincent, I knew someday you'd catch up with me. So what are you here to do? Kill me, or take me in to the others."

"I'm surprised, Ark," remarked the dark figure revealed as Vincent. "I expected more...resistance"

"I won't disappoint you; I will fight. But I know that your power is ahead of mine so it would be no use. But like I said, I will fight. So, what's it going to be?”

"Neither, I had orders to watch you, nothing more. And I dare not go against orders, unlike some others I know. But do not get me wrong, if I could, I would snap your worthless neck right here and now."

"That's comforting, so if you aren’t going to kill me why did you reveal yourself."

"Another time, another place, Renegade. For now I must apologize for the behavior of my men; they were far out of line for attacking you, and will be punished."

"Thank you, I guess. Will you be sending anymore?"

"You misunderstand; their actions have nothing to do with me, Renegade. They were acting on their own rebellious accord."

"I'll take your word on that…for now."

"I believe we have said enough now, Ark, and I really must be leaving. You know there are more important Renegade's to attend to. So I bid you goodbye."

Suddenly, and without warning, the dark figure disappeared without a trace. In under a second, what one could easily make out as a figure of a man became nothing; he just...disappeared.

Ark knew full well what had happened, but he was slightly surprised all the same. He began to breathe in sighs of relief and put some of his troubles to rest when a thought entered his mind. This thought was not of his own and echoed Vincent’s dark unforgiving voice. "I'll be watching you," the thought echoed. He knew what he was trying to do. He was trying to scare him, frighten him. Well, it won't happen.
It did happen. As he meditated on this one simple thought, sheer terror was released upon his mind.

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"Nagga, Sura, Vaggen, Horton." Mumbled a tired and disgruntled Beast Boy as he slowly made his way to where a great force beckoned him. That force was hunger, and that place was the kitchen. He walked in a swaggering manner that made it look like every step he took, he might fall down. When in actuality, it was every three. But even through the bumps and bruises he suffered; he was determined. He was focused. He was extremely hungry. He was-

"Wait. What's that sound coming from Raven's room? Is she still up?" wondered Beast Boy. He put his head close to her door and quickly made out her mantra," Azarath. Metrion. Zinthos."

"Strange, why is she up meditating this late at night?" Beast Boy decided to find out.

"Hey uh, Rae? It's late. Why are you up? Is something wrong?
"Go. Away." Raven said, it was evident to a fool that she didn't want to be bothered. Unfortunately, Beast Boy was apparently, at least at the time, less than a fool.

"But-" He tried again.

"GO! AWAY!" Just at that moment, a bolt of black energy hit the changeling right in the head, forcing him from Raven's door to the hallway wall.

"Fine! Be like that!" Beast Boy quipped, and then added under his breath, "Not like I have enough bruises."

Raven didn't answer and continued her meditation. She was extremely focused, and seemed nervous and shocked.

"Okay now, where was I? Find my center, ready and focus..." She sat there, hovering in the air and searching for answers.
"I'll be watching you..."
"What could he mean by that?" Vincent's psyonic message apparently made it's way to a sleeping Raven disturbing and prompting her to find what was happening in Jump City.

"Now what do I have so far? Two energies, strangely natural, not at all like my own. One stronger than the other. Wait...I'm getting something.

"A young man is running, strange, an energy is around his legs, making them move...faster than normal. He is being chased by three men with pistols. Running. Running. Into an alley. Things are getting clearer now, yes."

************************************************** **********

"Finally! You put up quite a run, but it ends here," boasted one of the thugs.

"Ark, come now why don't you come back with us? You know you were one of the more gifted students at the 'Organization'," remarked another.

"I'm not coming back! And I'll kill you if I have to!" shouted the mysterious young man.

The young man threw off his red jacket and formed a defensive formation.

"NOW!"

The thugs each fired their weapons once, and, almost like a reflex, the mysterious teen put his left arm up with spread out fingers. The same energy that was moving his legs now made a wall in front of him sending the bullets every which way. The thugs put their hands over their heads for fear that the bullet's ricochet might hit them. The young man, knowing they would not, summoned more energy around his arm and thrust it forward, sending a wave of this strange energy toward the frightened thugs. It sent them flying backward onto their backs and upon the pavement, each of them knocked out cold. He said something; she couldn't really hear it. He then used the 'natural' energy to lift his jacket and put it on.

************************************************** *********

"That's it," Raven admitted. "That's all I can see. I wonder what it means, or who he is. Whatever's happening, I fear it will not leave Jump City for some time..."

[Aquagirl15]

this is very descripitve and well put. i'm a little confused though, is Renegade the guy in the cloak? i think the proble was that Renegade was speaking in third person and that just threw me off like HUN? just a little warning: if you don't post often enough you will be spamed and death threatened by angry readers! me among them. i am evil!!!!!!

[Vivace]

Ark is the renegade. The Young man in the faded jeans and the red jacket. It's the first chapter so I thought I'd be a little cryptic and stuff. But no confusing. That's always a bad thing. Any way Ark left accourding to the thugs an 'Orginization' and is now being hunted. According to Vincent there are other Renegades out there he is hunting Nobody was talking in the third person and I guess it was a little too confusing. Don't worry about my next chapter It's already on the way.

[Vivace]

Renegade

Chapter 2:

The following morning was a repeat of the last night for the city. At 10 a.m., nobody was in peril, and there was no immediate threat that the Titans needed to handle. The Super-hero teen team was assembled around the kitchen eating their breakfasts. Robin was eating scrambled eggs with bacon, Cyborg was having chicken and waffles, Raven was having a simple drink of herbal tea, Beast boy was eating tofu with some toast, and Starfire...was eating... something, the Titans weren't sure. It looked like some sort of jelly chicken or buttered weasel they weren't sure. All they really knew was that if she offered some, they would definitely turn it down.

"Do you guys remember when we fought Dr. Light last night?" asked Robin; he was going to try to see if the others knew the dark figure.

"DO I?! I'm still googly eyed because of the blinding thingy!" shouted Beast Boy.

"Actually," added Raven, "that was when I hit you last night."

"Oh yea- HEY! What was with you last night? I was just trying to help!" said the green Titan.

"Well, I see I wasn't the only one who didn't get enough sleep last night," Raven retorted.

"That's not nice! I-"

"Beast Boy, Raven stop it! Now, as I was saying..." Robin took a bite of his eggs and then started again "Did any of you notice anything strange?"

"Not really, I was kinda too focused on the battle. Speaking of which, Beast Boy you do remember the butt whooping I gave you last night, don't you?"

"Yes, I do okay! First Raven, now you, what is this National Annoy Beast Boy Day!?"

"Actually," said Cy with a smart voice, "National Annoy Beast Boy Day is on the fourth; today is National Bug Beast Boy Day."

"GUYS!" Robin said again. He was getting really annoyed that every time he tried to solve something an argument arose. "Now, to the point. I noticed a mysterious looking man, someone who didn't run. He seemed preoccupied, and he was way too suspicious to not be up to something."

"Now that you mention it, Yeah I know who you're talking about. He had a trench coat on right?" said Cyborg.

"Yeah, that's the one!" said Robin.

Starfire however didn't share the sentiments of Cyborg. "I am distressed to admit, but I know not of this man. Is he a friend or a foe?"

"That's what I'm trying to figure out, but I'm kinda leaning toward foe." replied Robin.

"I didn't see him, but last night I felt the presence of two energies. It was strange though, the energy seemed to emit from the people themselves, not from another source, such as magic." Raven said.

"Maybe they were carrying a cellular generator," suggested Cyborg.

"A what?" asked a confused Beast Boy.

The others either didn't listen or didn't care.

"I doubt it," said Robin. "Something like that would carry enough radiation to send your sensors into a frenzy whether you were asleep or not. Anyway, could you tell me more about these ‘energies’? I'm curious on whether or not there's a connection."

"The first one I felt was the strongest I discovered it when I intercepted a message he was sending. The more I think about it the more I believe it was directed toward the second. It was less powerful. Both had their guard up to any kind of probing, but the second did put his guard down for a moment. Apparently, he is a teenager about our age and has 'someone' chasing after him for leaving some type of 'organization'. He seems to be able to use his energy to accelerate his physical power as well as make it cardinal to make force fields and waves. That's all I can gather so far," said Raven.

"How powerful is the second?" asked Robin.

"It's hard to tell, but if I could say…they echo my own," admitted Raven.

"Okay, so we got a really powerful cryptic, scary energy dude who can talk to people’s minds and another dude who is as powerful as Raven and being chased by some other dudes. THIS CANNOT BE GOOD!"

"Perhaps this second power can become our friend?" asked Starfire.

"Maybe, Star, but we still don't know what they're doing here, much less if they're friendly. But I'd be willing to bet that the dark figure me and Cy saw might have something to do with this first energy. He was saying something about finding a renegade or something, and if I could guess, I'd say that this dark figure is looking for the young man," said Robin

"So what are we going to do about it?" asked Cyborg.

"We can't do anything now; just wait. We don't even have enough information to have a lead," said Robin.

"Well, I hope our wait's not long," said Cyborg.

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Ark didn't get any sleep that night; he was too worried that someone (Vincent) might find him. He was used to sleepless nights spent looking out for himself. It was, after all, what he had been doing for the last 2 years. What a roll irony gave him. He left this mysterious organization to avoid becoming a killer. In return, he led a new life of killing in self-defense. He was also used to the terms Vagabond, Deserter and Renegade. He preferred them to what he would have been: a butcher, murderer, killer. His thoughts were all over that night, deliberating whether to run or stay. Jump City was the safest place he could have gone, and they still found him. There was only one better place, Titans Tower. Should he risk others lives just to make him safe? Sure the Titans were competent, but his adversaries were more so and much more numerous than the Titans. His conversation with himself soon turned from what would be safe to…would they be safe. He looked through his mind. Two professors of differing philosophies could not debate as he. After a long time, he made a decision; he would go to the Titans.

[Matt A]

I'm impressed. This looks to very dark indeed...

The two philosophers line was one of the coolest that I've seen during my time here, so congrats. on that.

Oh, and on a more depressing note, I have a sinking feeling that a lot of people (mentioning no names for reasons of self-defence) are going to try and shred you over the spelling and grammar. I'd just like to say right now that I, for one, don't care about that. It's not entirely your fault.

Either way, keep going with this.

[Vivace]

Well Word is broken so I've only had Notepad to make the story and it will NEVER catch any misteaks. Any bolding or italics etc. has to be done when i post it. i.e. notepad can't handle it unless of corse I do stuff like [ bold ] all the time. Which I'm not really a big fan on doing. on I'll edit the grammer later once it's back up. But thank you for your great vote of confidence. And the Two professor thing, I made it up on the spot as I was writing it.

P.S. My avatar Is Ark. He has an alias that I refer to him by but he'll tell that to the Titans. I'd like to say one thing about my avatar. I made him from skatch on MS Paint and I'm as proud of him as I am my story.

[Aquagirl15]

that was a lot less confusing and i think this is going to turn out kinda dark. just remember angry readers!!!!

[oneeyemonkeypie]

If you want your self esteem to stay high, you should have found some way to hide this from me.

Contrary to what most would expect-I don't have an entire litany of complaints. Most of your bases are covered-adequate chapter size, pretty good spelling, nice descriptions.

One thing bothers me tho-some of the grammer just doesn't "flow". Sometimes it's missing commas, other times the word order is slightly off. It's like your story is about *makes small measurement with fingers* that much beyond your composition ability. Thats fine, I totally know what your trying to say. It just comes out a wee bit strange.

Don't get me wrong, I love this fic. And it's definately waaay above the average start to a fic here. My suggestion-have a competent writer (after a week or so you'll know is) take a look at your storys and just put things in order.

Very well done tho. (I don't say that often)

[Raven37]

Ooh! I think I will really like this story. It is very descriptive and has a good plot. Please post more soon!

-Raven37

[Vivace]

Yeah grammer was my greatest fear For now on i'll send my finished chapters to Teen Titans Go! I know him and I'm sure he won't mind proofing Thanks for the critism now I know just "what" I did wrong.


EDIT: Saturday's free for me so I can start Chapter 3 then. I can't garentee that Teen Titans Go! will have proofed it by then though.

[TeenTitansGO!]

Hey, Viv. Thanks for the sig props. (Did I just say props?) And WM, I think you might be talking about me and Kregor8. Don't worry, though. Viv's my best friend in the entire world, AND HE GETS AWAY WITH NO BAD GRAMMAR! Haven't read the fic yet, but I will.

TTG-cya

[Sproxie]

Wow, this story is great! i really like this!

Originally Posted by Welshi's Mate (or so he says....)

Oh, and on a more depressing note, I have a sinking feeling that a lot of people (mentioning no names for reasons of self-defence) are going to try and shred you over the spelling and grammar. I'd just like to say right now that I, for one, don't care about that. It's not entirely your fault.

well, i'm not in the mood... but work on it anyway!
ok, please post another chapter soon!

[Vivace]

this one is kina dull in the action area but don't worry action scences will come eventually.

Renegade: Chapter 3

It was now midday and still there was nothing major going on in Jump City. Apparently the infrastructure of villains was greatly hurt the last day. Three super-villains taken down in one day, there was no way anyone was going to try anything, not when the Titans were at the top of their game.


Ark stood now on Titans Isle; it was one of the hardest journeys he had to make, and although there were no cardinal enemies to speak of, on the inside of the Renegade teen, a great battle was being waged. His inner demons fought his inner angels, and Ark didn't know who was who much less what side to take. Right and wrong, Black and White, merged to form a bleak gray blotch within his mind. Going to the Titans became as equally wrong and equally right as staying alone. With every slow steady step he took the battle only got louder and louder; he wondered how someone who has been alone for so long could argue with himself. He was alone, and he couldn't even agree with himself.



There must be some outside force at work. Someone must be planting these thoughts in his head. But there wasn't; the only person who had that type of power was Vincent. And he was busying enough watching him, watching him suffer. He was having too much fun to interfere. Besides, either choice fits perfectly into his master's plan. So there would be no use to influence him either way.



And so, he walked, making his way slowly to the ominous figure that was Titans Tower.



The Titans were busy. Too busy to take a look through their window infested tower to see a lone boy walking ever so slowly to their tower. Beast Boy challenged Cyborg to yet another game. Cyborg proceeded to destroy him once again. Robin and Raven were still discussing the dark figure and the two energies; Starfire was with them making ignorant comments on the subject. Robin explained those simple misunderstandings, he never minds doing so, but Raven simply ignored her. They walked over to the window to get a good view. Robin noticed an interesting figure walking towards the tower. It looked like a young man, with messy brown hair, faded jeans, and a jacket worn over a gray shirt. Robin nudged Raven and pointed in the direction of Ark. Raven recognized him as from the vision she had. Her eyes widened she looked directly at him and said, "It's Him."



Ark was at the front door at this time. It was tall, very tall. It looked as if it was built to let in a giant or something bigger. He opened the door and let himself in. Inside was a big room with stairs that led to a security door. There were benches along the sides of the wall. He supposed by the overall look of the place that it was a orientation room or a place to hold press conferences. He made his way up the stairs and towards the security door. It had a sign on it that said "No Tours Today." There was a speaker to the sign. There was a button next to it, supposedly to contact them. He reached his figure over to the button, but before he could the door opened. There stood the Titans all waiting for him. Instead of sending him away like some fan who wanted to catch a glimpse of his heroes, they greeted him, suspiciously, but they still greeted him.



"Hello," Robin stretched out his hand. "Robin."



"Hello," Ark took his hand, "I don't suppose you have a room?"



"This isn't a hotel. If you need one we can direct-" Robin was cut off by Raven who whispered in his ear, "Let him stay, trust me he's not hostile, and he'll properly give us a lead."



Robin complied with her but still didn't let off easy. "What are you doing here?"



"That. That is a long story, but for now all you need to know for now is that I am in danger." replied Ark.



"Dude! You're the dude aren't you? The dude with the moving and, the force field and the WHOOSH!" shouted an excited Beast Boy.



"Yeah you do match the description," Said Cyborg, he stared at him for a few moments. "I don't detect any cellular radiation, so I guess Raven was right."



"You are! You are the second energy that friend Raven talked about! Come, tell us of who perils you, and of this organization so that we might help you!" exclaimed a very happy Starfire.



"How did you." Ark started but Robin cut him off.



"Another long story, we'll explain later. So, it looks like you can stay for a while" Robin said looking at Raven. " At least, for now.



"So, got a name, kid?" asked Cyborg.



"Yeah. Force"



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Vincent was there, watching them the entire time. Hiding in the shadow-less shadows he observed all that there was to see. He left the island knowing all he needed, and made his report to his master. He flipped open his cell-phone began his conversation.



"Is it as we expected?" asked a voice.



"Yes sir, he has gone to the Titans," replied Vincent.



"Excellent, now we have a legitimate reason for exterminating the Titans. They are, after all harboring one of my Renegades."



"Yes sir, the organization will have its revenge, and eliminate any potential threat."



"With the Titan's added to my predicted complications I will need to call our contact."



"Are you sure he can do the job?"



"He's done it before he can do it again."



"When do I strike?"



"Bide your time, give him enough time to become comfortable, lazy; all the while building your strength. When we are ready we will contact you."



"Yes sir, I hear and obey. Vincent, out."



Vincent turned off his cell phone and flipped it down. He had his orders. And he will obey them.

[Aquagirl15]

that was a little strange and i would kinda be freaked out if some total strangers knew so much about me but oh well... even though this wasn't the most exciting part, things like this give a lot of information that we might need to know later on in the story. so i think you did good. (as usual) [so ur ego can swell]

[Raven37]

Ooh, that was pretty good. I can tell I will probably like this story a lot. It has a very interesting plot and characters. Also it is very well-written.Please post more soon.


-Raven37

P.S. Sorry about the fluff earlier.

[Ephidel500]

Yay fluff!!! Let me tell you that if my demands for more story chapters are not met soon I shall find you, locate a HOME DEPOT, buy several cans of lurid pink evil, and make sure that you and all of your belongings are colored pink!!!

If that doesn't work I shall call a designer and have him/her imbroider everything in lacy pink fashion barbies!!! Die, pink, DIE!!!


R U afraid yet???

[TeenTitansGO!]

Hey Man. That was awesome. Don't pound on me about my writing when I talk to you, but that was better than anything I could ever do. I wish you could write sappy stuff. That would completely, amazingly rock! I LOVE TO CRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

[Crowgirl]

Originally Posted by Ephidel500

Yay fluff!!!

No, fluff is bad. You hear? BAD.

This is extremely dark. Even though I'm afriad of the dark, I love this. Spelling and grammar problems? I don't see any, so that's alright with me. Also, love Ark (or Force, I'm not sure exactly which), your new character. He seems a lot like Raven, and that's not bad at all.

Also, no actions scenes in a chapter are fine with me. As long as they are juicy and resemble steak, I'm good.

Crowgirl (WHO IS BACK!!)

[Sproxie]

Cool, I really like this story, and you character is awesome.
Man, there are so many things I have to say about this story and I can't seem to find the words to express how I feel.

[Vivace]

Originally Posted by Crowgirl

No, fluff is bad. You hear? BAD.

This is extremely dark. Even though I'm afriad of the dark, I love this. Spelling and grammar problems? I don't see any, so that's alright with me. Also, love Ark (or Force, I'm not sure exactly which), your new character. He seems a lot like Raven, and that's not bad at all.

Also, no actions scenes in a chapter are fine with me. As long as they are juicy and resemble steak, I'm good.

Crowgirl (WHO IS BACK!!)

Thanks for the good review. Personally, I like dark stories; they tend to be more surious, more mysteryous. They keep the reader on edge. Force his both his feild name in the organization before he went Renegade and his new superhero name he didn't want them knowing exactly who he is. His personallity is smiliar to Raven but different in one big thing, Raven is surrourded by people and perfers to be alone; Force (Ark) is alone, but wants to be close to someone. I'll eventually go more into their parrellells and their differences during the story.