A Day In The Life Of A Dream Of A Teen Titan

[starfire0639]

For all of you that dont know me my name is ash and as i see all new writers write i will say sorry now for the kinda bad in my thought writing that im going to post i know i need some help and if there are any suggestions i want to hear them ok everyone here is my firstchapter or epilouge thingy so dont get MAD at me if it well kinda sucks ok well here it goes!oh um yeah....HERES THE FIC!




A DAY IN THE LIFE OF A DREAM OF A TEEN TITAN



Starfire awoke with the sudden glimpse of robin by her side.She giggled slightly kissing him on the cheek.She flew out of bed only to be tackled inward once more...by Robin.

"Where do you think your going"said robin smiling gingerly

"It is of nowhere that i am going Robin"smiles also and turns on her side to face him

"Are you shure of that or were you up to some evil plan of mischeif star?"winking just kidding around

Star stood struck by Robins dibelief"I am of telling the truth Robin!"believing Robins misguidence"i was only planning on making the breakfast for the team!"

"Was that all star or do i have to force the truth out of you",and with that he grabs onto her and tickles her renevously

"Hahahahahaha i shall stay robin i shall stay!"Much longer if you wish Robin!"laughs still being tickled

"I wish"Robin pulls the covers over their heads

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After an hour more of their half slumber Robin recalls the past night.Robin then sneaks out of Starfires room as not to be seen by the other team mates.

"DUDE! What the hell are you doing in stars room!?!"

Startled Robin looks towards Beast Boy blushing but it quickly resides

"Oh....hey Beast Boy.I was um teaching Star some um...........tackeling techniques!"big smile trying to to blurt out the truth,rubbing his neck.

"YA!im sure it was some type of technique"-starts laughing histerically and nudged Robin in the arm and winks as he passes by

"PHEW that was close"Robin continued his venture the kitchen slowly only to be greeted by a grip of two hands around his chest

"Why had you not waited for me Robin"smiling

Im sorry Star,I didnt think bout it,turns aorund kissing her on the cheek quickly so noone sees and walsk quickly now to the dining table where CY,BB,Rae and now he and Starfire sat.

Raven had a glimpse in her eye kinda like i know soemthing and im sure you do to but im not telling you but maybe a hint will subfise

Raven-"hmph"

Cyborge-"Whats up Raven,You dont look to happy"

"As if she ever does!"

Raven-shoots a red glare over to BB"Its nothing".looks down at her book once again then at Robin

Cyborg-"Ya there is .....spill"

Raven-"I was only thinking that maybe we need stronger walls"

Cyborg-"Whys that?"

Beastboy for some unknown reason could be heard snickering in the background

Raven-"The titanium alloy of these walls is way to dense.You can hear almost anything thru them.I think its only at night tho."smiles evily at Robin and Starfire.

Beast boy couldnt hold it in any longer............"BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH HEHE HE HAHAHAHAHAA!!!"-he then turned into a cyote to finish his laughfest while rolling on the ground

Starfire was blushing deeply and Robin just shook his head

Cy-I guess Terra wasnt the only one that could make the tower shake!"

Star smiles a bit forcing it out at Robin only to hear the alarm startled

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Robin awoke form his distant nightmare only to be brung back to reality as the tt alarm was set of by yet another bad guy seemingly thinking he was unoticed by the vigilent teen titans.-he runs downstairs to meet the others only looking at the others but not Star.

"Another night my young foe.Another weakness i will find within your hiding secrets buried in your mind"a black ora lifted off the pillow and with an evil cackle it vanished.
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WELL HOW I DO DID I DO GOOD!?!
Any feedback would be cool i dont really know where im goin with this but i know itll be great so ok post your comments soon so i can start working on the next chapter!

[Sproxie]

Well, it's pretty good!
but you seem to be switching from past tense to present tense...

Starfire awoke with the sudden glimpse of robin by her side

She giggles slightly kissing him on the cheek

and so on.. if you were to do it in past tense you should change giggles (along with a few other words) to giggled. otherwise it seems promising! oh, and please change the font
^ Whats wrong with my writing???

[The_NewCatwoman]

You've chosen a very difficult--no, actually painful font for your story. This would be a "prologue" not and epilogue. An epilogue would come at the end. I would also follow Sprox advice.

tNC

[Matt A]

I have to agree about the font and tense things. But that's just presentation.

Well, in terms of content, that was pretty stunning. You seem to have taken the idea in the latest chapter of TT: The Musical and just ran with it...those two getting flirtatious is always guaranteed to be funny. Also, if the "thicker walls" bit was referring to what I think it was referring to, then that was just inspired.

Oh, and exactly what was the "guy with the evil cackle" bit referring to?

[decka]

You started a fic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I'm so proud!!! It's soo good too! YAY!!!!! Just change text and it will be all good. So is it on what you wanted to do before or something different??

[starfire0639]

sniffles*WELL I DIDNT THINK THE FONT WOULD BE A BIG DEAL!

but thanks mate thank you very much and i cant give away anything if i have leanred anything form the aswomse writers here its never give away anything!and sorry bout the past tense and stuff ill work on it
but what i wanna know is should i keep working on it or just leave it in the dust

[decka]

Keep writing silly!! I love your fic and hope to see more of it! GO ASH GO!!!!!

[Aquagirl15]

i agree w/ what everyone has said. the font actually has a lot to do w/ it cause it makes your fic harder to read. just use the standard font, it's a lot easiest to read!

[Raven37]

That was very good. I can't wait to see what this story will turn into. My gripes: 1. Yes, please work on the 'tense' thing. 2. Yes, please use regular font. It makes it a lot easier to read. 3. Last, spelling and grammer. Otherwise, Great Job! Write more!!!

-Raven37

[starfire0639]

oh hahahahaha i get it you guys dont undertsand the first part of the story is a dream sequence its happening as its going on thats why its in present tense and thats why when starfire smiles at him he wakes up because hes waking from the night mare i hope that will help you guys a bit

[Starrysky]

I read this story... but I forgot to post! But I'm posting now...Sorry!

Anyways...nice beginning! I hope you have a great time writing this. And do not become prey to the fearsome writer's block. It is a terrible thing. Everyone else said just about anything there was to be critisized. Be warned though, that when I do critisize, that it it not gentle. I just say things like they are.

Keep the font easy to read, Maybe more description, for some reason, when you do speaking quotations, it seems a bit off.

Great so far! Keep on going!

[Raven37]

Originally Posted by starfire0639

oh hahahahaha i get it you guys dont undertsand the first part of the story is a dream sequence its happening as its going on thats why its in present tense and thats why when starfire smiles at him he wakes up because hes waking from the night mare i hope that will help you guys a bit

Umm... sorta. I'm still a little confused...

-Raven37

[decka]

Hey again! I like this font better it is easier to read! I got the whole dream thing it wasn't too hard to understand. Then again I am magical so maybe that is why I got it....Anyways I luv it write more!

[Aquagirl15]

i realized that it was Robin's nightmare after reading the last sentence. then i was like 'OH!' but it was a little confusing! try to write more!!

[rrarbecy]

If that was Robin's NIGHTMARE, I'd love to be him in one of his good dreams. In bed with a beautiful girl? Come on.

[Matt A]

Hey, all will make sense in time...I hope.

[oneeyemonkeypie]

That relationship sounds a bit intense for 15-17 year olds, don't you think? They are just kids, remember.

Did you run this through a language translator? Cause the grammer is ridiculous. I'm somewhat of a perfectionist when it comes to internet stories. (Hell, the computer fixes it for you, how hard can it be?) And I gotta say, this story made my eyes bleed. It hurt so much! My brain was screaming ABORT! ABORT!

Is english your first language? If not then bravo, an excellent fic. If it is, then you really need to check the grammer in word or something.

However, in spite of all that negativity, I will still read this fic.

[T.T.Raven4]

Grammar, Like oneeyemonkeypie said.

The font didn't bug me at all...unless she changed it since I read it...

My G rated senses are buring. They are no older than 16, and I dont think they'd be....doing that. But the flirty thing is always funny! Thicker walls, oh that was good!

Write more, cause I'll read it.

[Crowgirl]

Originally Posted by The_NewCatwoman

You've chosen a very difficult--no, actually painful font for your story.

As long as the letters don't carry knives, I'm cool with the font.

But I was a little confused, so feel free to clear up stuff.

[Starrysky]

She did change the font from the original.

Just clearing things up...