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Titan X-mas
Ok so this is my first fan fic. It is kinda short but whatever. I can't spell for my life so if like every other word is spelled wrong I very sorry!
Well this kinda sucks so please tell me if you like it and if I should keep writing.Chapter 1 Star fire woke up to see snow falling out of her window. She smiled and got out of bed. She soon found it very freezing and rapped herself up in a warm blanket. She flew down towards the kitchen, on her way there she saw an asortment of green reefs and pretty red bows hanging up against the walls. Once she got to the kitchen she saw that the other titans were already there. She sat down beside Robin at the table and watched Beast Boy and Cyborg put up decorations. "Why does Beast Boy and Cyborg hang those green plants up around our home?" She asked Robin curiously "It's Christmas Star." He answered her. She looked confused. Robin noticed that his alian friend had no clue what he was talking about. "It's a holiday." "It's only the best holiday ever!"Cyborg intrueded their conversation. "Ya! It's where this old, jolly, fat guy called Santa Claws, comes on a sled with flying raindeer and go every kids house, going down their fire places delivering toys and stuff made by little elfs in the North Pole. But if your bad you get a lump of coal." Beast Boy explained. "I wonder how many lumps of coal you have?" Raven said lifting her head from her book. "Why do you have to be so grumpy? Lighten up, it's the holidays you know, and if you don't you'll be the only one getting coal here!" Beast Boy didn't want Raven's attitude bring everyone else down especialy at Christmas. "I hate th holidays. It's a waste of time, and every year I get a..."sniff"..cold. Besides there is no such thing as Santa Claws." "WHAT?!?! You dare not belive in Santa!? Santa is so real and you too belive in him! You just don't want to say cuse you want to be little miss darkness!" Raven just ignored him. "Um, sorry to intrupt but I still don't understand. How can a larg man fit down such a small place and how can he visit every childs house in just one night? How can raindeer fly and what are elfs?" Star took a deep breath "I just do not unserstand how all of this can be." "That's the magic of Christmas! You don't have to get it, just belive!" Star still was confused but decided she got enoughf of it celebrate the holiday with her friends. Then she notcied a small strang plant that Beast Boy was hanging above the doorway. "What is that?" She asked him. "This?" He looked up and smiled "This is a mistletoe. When two people stand under it they have to kiss. I think Robin could explain it a little better to you." Robin looked up and gave Beast Boy a look "Why could Robin explain it better? Robin?" She looked to him for the answers. Star fire was completly culess to the situation Beast Boy had just put the boy wonder in "Um...well......" Just then the alarm when off, Thank God Robin thought to himself as all the titans rushed to see what was the trouble. Well thats the first Chapter! Tell me what you guys think!
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"And in the end the love you take is equall to the love you make"- The Beatles " I am not afraid of death, but dying is truly my worst fear" - me!! Please check out my fic Broken Wings Can't Fly to Heaven. The Price of Immortality(with a little TT)
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Yay! Another Christmas story!
I'm writing one too. It's pretty good, exept when you spell Starfire the first time you spelt it like Star fire. It flows pretty well, if a little fast. Other than that, it's wonderful! I'm a critic, sorry if I might be a little harsh.Yay1 First post! *dances*
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Hey, This is a good start! i actually really like this! Please finish this soon! but about the spelling.....
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You should send it to someone for help with your grammer if you want. and this story does NOT suck, please post more soon!
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Oh my gosh!! I'm sooo happy you guse think that!!! I hope to post more of the story soon!
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"And in the end the love you take is equall to the love you make"- The Beatles " I am not afraid of death, but dying is truly my worst fear" - me!! Please check out my fic Broken Wings Can't Fly to Heaven. The Price of Immortality(with a little TT)
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THis is great! Everybody do the Mexican Hat Dance in celebration!
Duh nuh, duh nuh, duh nuh nuh nuh duh nuh! Hazzah! Sorry. But this is great, just use spell check. Welcome to high society Decka! (Funny, I have a friend named Becka....) Ah well.
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By the way I read What is love? It is really good! and you weren't harsh at all!! Thanks I know I need to work on my spelling Im Dyslexic so thats really hard for me to do. Anyway it's not an excusse but that's kinda the reson why I have trouble but I do try! Do you know how hard it is to be in high school and not know how to spell maybe without takeing the time to think about it? Anyways I like to get off topic alot. So I'll try and check my spelling next chapter!
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"And in the end the love you take is equall to the love you make"- The Beatles " I am not afraid of death, but dying is truly my worst fear" - me!! Please check out my fic Broken Wings Can't Fly to Heaven. The Price of Immortality(with a little TT)
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Yeah, you better post more.
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Guy 1: Hello? Guy 2: Greetings, this is an anonymous message... from Ernest... Fics: II: The Color Wheel III: Teen Titans: Evaporation
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OOOO!!! more christmas spirit! Wilkommen to the forum, Decka. This is a good first attempt! A bit more description and you'll have a nice fanficcy on your hands... which, of course, tends to bring rabid fans... Don't worry, though, they only bite when posts are few and far between. If spelling isn't one of your strong points, don't hesitate to PM what you write to somebody. They'll give it the once-over. I'd be happy to, if you choose that route. |
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what do you mean PM
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"And in the end the love you take is equall to the love you make"- The Beatles " I am not afraid of death, but dying is truly my worst fear" - me!! Please check out my fic Broken Wings Can't Fly to Heaven. The Price of Immortality(with a little TT)
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word and spell check keep people knowing what's going on in my fics. i have horrible spelling too.
nuther X-mas story YAY!!! keep going this seems intersting. and funny, especially Star's cluelessness. MORE!!! PMing is like e-Mailing cept it's through the site. PM stands for private message. look under PMs in User CP and click send messags. sinch when you get the hang of it.
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"I'll repeat what I've said so often before, that what seems the easy way out is usually the most dangerous." ~Kuruma Yuskue: "You're a strange guy, even for a demon. I was all hepped up and angry, ready to take it out on my next opponent but now..." Jin: "I'm a new foe, and it's a new match. Going in mad just takes the fun outta it. And that's no way to live -or die." SBM The chapter has arrived. |
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cool! So who whats me to pm them my story????
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"And in the end the love you take is equall to the love you make"- The Beatles " I am not afraid of death, but dying is truly my worst fear" - me!! Please check out my fic Broken Wings Can't Fly to Heaven. The Price of Immortality(with a little TT)
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greatr job so far keep on work with the spelling dont worry i cant spell ether
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Starfire + Blackfire Sisters forever!!!! You've got some major Winx girl!! ~StElLa~ tRaPpEd In A boX!!!! |
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Hey!!! sorry I'm taking so long to post I just finished ch.2 and I need raven54 to help me with my spelling.
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"And in the end the love you take is equall to the love you make"- The Beatles " I am not afraid of death, but dying is truly my worst fear" - me!! Please check out my fic Broken Wings Can't Fly to Heaven. The Price of Immortality(with a little TT)
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raven54 where are you with my chapter????????
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"And in the end the love you take is equall to the love you make"- The Beatles " I am not afraid of death, but dying is truly my worst fear" - me!! Please check out my fic Broken Wings Can't Fly to Heaven. The Price of Immortality(with a little TT)
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sorry dude, just got on. Though if ya leave a bit more time is between chappies, ya get more responses. Not a lot of time, mind, just say... post everyday you can at like 5-ish. When there's loads of ppl on. no one'll get bored, trust me.
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Chaper 2
"It's a bank robbery." Robin anounced as they all gathered aroung the screen. "It shouldn't be to bad. Titans, Go!" He yelled his catch phrase. "You'd think he would have thought of something new by now," Beast Boy whispered softly to Cyborg. The Teen Titans arived at the bank with just as the robbers were leaving. "Where do you think you're going?" The robbers froze "Titans GO!" Robin shouted. The criminals tried to run out the back door but were stopped by a blast of starbolts. Starfire stood before them ready to fight. One of them pulled out a gun and started shooting at Starfire. She dodged all the bullets before the gun was whipped out of the man's hands by a bird-a-rang. The robber turned around to see Robin's fist coming towards his face. He was knocked out cold. The men looked around for a way out but all exits were blocked. The scared men started to panic. Raven then picked them up with her powers and turned them upside down. There they waited until police came to pick them up. "Well that was quick! And with just enough time to buy a Christmas tree!" Beast Boy said happily as he walked into a coveniently-placed tree shop. "What's a Christmas tree?" Star asked. Robin pulled her aside to explain. ************************************************** ************************************************** ******************************************** At the Titans Tower all the Christmas decorations were done on the inside. Beast Boy had gotten tangled up in a mess of lights that were supposed to be for the outside, but it didn't look too hopeful. It didn't really matter; Cyborg had already made a huge mechanical Santa Claus. Beast Boy had made a runway for Santa's sled on the roof. The Tower was completely ready for Christmas inside and out. Raven sat in a big chair with a box of tissues. "I hate the cold." Raven said, then sneezed into a tissue and threw it in the garbage. "It does seem cooler to me." Robin observed his surroundings and then went back to him work. "The heater's at the same place it was before." Cyborg checked just to make sure it hadn't dropped. It did seem a lot colder than before. Beast Boy had managed to untangle himself from the lights. He sat up and looked at the clock. "Well it seems that we have enough time left tonight to do a little shopping!" Beast Boy walked to the door. The Titans got up slowly and followed him to the door. "Raven, do you not wish to accompany us on our journey to the mall of shopping?" Starfire asked with concern. "Not really." Raven then saw the sadness that came over her friend. "It's just I *sniff* feel sick." Raven hugged the blanket around her. "Are you sure?" asked Robin. He didn't want her to go if she wasn't feeling well, but he also didn't want her to feel like she wasn't wanted. "No, no, I'll be just fine," Raven replied. She really wasn't in the mood to go shopping; actually, she wasn't really ever in the mood to shop. Anyways she really didn't feel well and thought it better to get some rest instead. ************************************************** ************************************************** ******************************************** At the mall the Titans split up. It was Beast Boy's idea; he didn't want anyone to know what anyone else was getting from him. Star was somewhat worried about this plan. She really didn't know her way around the mall. Once she and her friends had gone their own ways she thought of what she would buy her friends. She pondered this about it for awhile. She would head over to the video game shop to get Beast boy and Cyborg's presents. She always saw them playing thoses kind of games; however, as many times as her friends tried, she just couldn't get th hang of playing them. Star then passed by the book store. She went in, Raven is always reading thoses sad books, she began to look for a book for her friend. She all of a sudden felt cold shiver go down her back. It scared her. She wrapped her coat around her tightly. She bought a book called Poetry for the Tormented Soul and left the store. It seemed colder than before. Allright, I have Beast Boy, Cyborg, and Raven down. Now what would Robin want? She really didn't know. She wanted to get him nice. He had always been there for her He deserves something wonderful, she thought to herself. Cyborg and Robin had found each other and decided to search together. "So, who do you have left to get presents for?" Cyborg asked. "Just Star." Robin was obviously deep in thought. " I really don't know what to buy for her. I want to be really special." Cyborg gave Robin a look. "Something special, eh?" "It's her first Christmas and I want her to remember it." Cyborg grinned at his friend. He knew that Robin really cared for the girl, so he knew this must really be important for him. Cyborg checked his watch. "It's almost 9:00, we better go home." He annouced. "Right." Robin pulled out his communicator, "Beast Boy, Star, it's late. We're going to go home now." Robin put his communicator back in his pocket as he and Cyborg went to meet with their other friends. __________________ sorry that the fighting seen was so short. I hope you guys like this chapter. And many thanxs to raven54!!!
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"And in the end the love you take is equall to the love you make"- The Beatles " I am not afraid of death, but dying is truly my worst fear" - me!! Please check out my fic Broken Wings Can't Fly to Heaven. The Price of Immortality(with a little TT)
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More More More!
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Starfire + Blackfire Sisters forever!!!! You've got some major Winx girl!! ~StElLa~ tRaPpEd In A boX!!!! |
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i love it please do write more
and once again with the robin starfire thing thats always fun
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oh! this is good.
i love how you did the Robin/Star thing a different way than other people. in this fic it's kina growing and in others it's already established.(no offence ) the idea of Robin andStar needing to get each other something specal was good too. lovin it keep going!!!
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"I'll repeat what I've said so often before, that what seems the easy way out is usually the most dangerous." ~Kuruma Yuskue: "You're a strange guy, even for a demon. I was all hepped up and angry, ready to take it out on my next opponent but now..." Jin: "I'm a new foe, and it's a new match. Going in mad just takes the fun outta it. And that's no way to live -or die." SBM The chapter has arrived. |
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I like this story alot! please post another chapter soon!
(well, what else is there to say?)
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*************(¨`·.·´¨)************ *******(¨`·.·´¨)`·.¸.·´(¨`·.·´¨)******* **(¨`·.·´¨`·. ¸.·´*`·.¸.·´`·.¸.·´¨`·.·´¨)** ** `·.¸.·´*`·.¸.Sprox 083·.¸.·´*`·.¸.·´** **********(¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨)******** ***********`·.¸(¨`·.·´¨)..·´********* ***************`·.¸.·´************ Can anyone fill me in on why i can't log off my account here?? |
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