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Old 11-01-2004, 10:12 PM
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Starfire's Memories.... and Tears....

CHAPTER 1

Starfire stared at the celing once again unable to sleep after the hundredth time of having that horrible dream. 'tomorrow i shall tell raven. perhaps she can help me.' then starfire looked at the clock. 3:23. 'oh.... it already is tomorrow....' She thought as she floated out of bed. she put on her boots and went into the living room and watched TV until she heard someone behind her. she turned and saw robin, yet again.

"starfire? are you okay? this is about the 12th time i found you out here really early in the morning," robin sais with concern writen all over his face.

"nothing is wrong! why would you.... oh.... i cannot hide any longer.... something is terribly wrong robin...." she said, finally putting away her fake smile.

robin sat beside her, "starfire, you know you can tell me anything."

starfire looked at him and started explaining about these repeating nightmares.........


~~~~ IN THE NIGHTMARE~~~~

starfire walks around gotham city and sees no one.... not a soul..... she stops at the pizza place and sees that it is closed. she kicks the door open and goes inside.... not to like what she finds... she finds Beast Boy dead on the floor and Cyborg near him, disabled, dead. she runs out of the pizza place and to raven's favorite getaway. once again, she finds no ne there, except raven's dead body. she then goes to the outskirts of town and sees terra's favorite getaway. she goes inside, and finds many dead bodies along w/ terra's. the tears are cascading down her face as she desperatly searches for robin. all of the ines that she had alredy found were in there favorite place..... but she had never known robin's favorite spot. she looked in his room to find nothing..... then she went to her room and found robin laying on her bed.... dead also.... she runs into the main room of the tower and goes to the security camera's recordings, maybe she could find ut who killed robin. she watches thew monitor of her room and sees robin walk in her room. he sits on the bed and a little later starfire walks in. robin smiles at her, but starfire stares blankly at him. then.... she kills him.... starfire stopped the tape.... she couldnt watch anymore, knowing that she had killed the oly people who ever really cared for her...........


~~~~BACK AT THE TOWER~~~~

"oh robin! what does this horrible vision mean???!!!" starfire said after she stopped crying.

robin seemed to be in deep thought and then said, "i dont know starfire. lets wait for raven to wake up, maybe she can help."

the waited patiently for her to awaken......

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Old 11-01-2004, 10:26 PM
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awesome! that would be such a freaky dream... what's up with Star? i wanna see more!


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Old 11-01-2004, 10:36 PM
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'Tis good.
One question--Gotham City?
Star's never even been to Gotham City. They live in Jump City, which is what I think you meant. It messed up the whole thing for me when I read Gotham, I pictured the red skies and the black, bleary buildings.

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Old 11-02-2004, 08:45 AM
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well, i dont remember where i found it, but teen titans takes place in gotham city b/c i remember robin saying east gotham city. you can ask star_fire_chick, i have short term memory loss.
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Old 11-03-2004, 09:40 PM
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CHAPTER 2

"hmmmm..." raven said after starfire finished explaining her dream, "it seems exactly like a premonition. but.... i could be wrong. now we might know that starfire wouldnt do anything like that, but there might be another physic out there. trying to mess with starfire's mind."

robin hit the table, "starfire cant know that."

"im afraid that if we dont tell her, then she'll start to believe that that's her destiny.... to destroy us. we must tell her," raven said staying calm.

"NO!" robin yelled standing up and tossing the table across the room, "WHEN I GIVE YOU AN ORDER YOU FOLLOW IT! YOU WILL NOT TELL STARFIRE!"

raven glared at him and then said, "control your self robin. anger is pointless."

"watever..." rabin said as he walked out of raven's room. starfire flew up to him and said, "robin! have you-"

but robin cut her off, "shut up."

starfire looked at robin as he walked to his room. Robin entered his room and as soon as he did he fell to the floor and clutched his head.

Robin: Leave me alone!

voice: no.

robin: what do you want? who are you?

voice: to destroy you and that pathetic little starfire. and my name is verno.

robin: i'll tell the titans who you are and you'll never get away w/ this!

verno: on the contrary robin. starfire wont be the one to kill the titans..... you will.

robin: *gasps* then why are you toying w/ starfire?

verno: b/c she has been a thorn in my side since the moment she was born. im tired of that petty princess. and since you are the one she has feelings for, YOU shall be the one to kill her.

robin: you wont get away w/ this!

verno: oh i think i will robin, b/c.... i already have 85% control of your body.... someones coming!

cyborg knocked on robins door, "robin? robin? you okay?"

robin opened the door and looked at him emotionless, "go away."

starfire knocked on the door, "robin? friend? please talk to me???"

robin opened the door and smiled evilly. [] "starfire, come in." starfire smiled nervously and entered robin's room as robin or shall we say verno thought, 'it will be the last thing you ever do.....*laughs maniacly*
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Ooo, interesting. This is unflolding in strange and mysterious ways...

Ha ha! I guess you must spend a lot of time on AOL.

verno: oh i think i will robin, b/c.... i already have...

b/c? In a story? that had me laughing
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That was awsome!!! I like the twist! please post more!
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well, i dont remember where i found it, but teen titans takes place in gotham city b/c i remember robin saying east gotham city. you can ask star_fire_chick, i have short term memory loss.
I know I used East Gotham City for where Crow grows up, but in the comics it's Jump City.

I love this fic! The unexpected twist is nice, but you said 85%...

Will Robin fight back? He better.

I just thought of something: She has been a thorn in my side since she was born. I'm tired of that pretty princess....

Everyone better watch out, I'm thinking hard.....
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Old 11-06-2004, 08:56 PM
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The story is interesting but you could've left vemo out of the picture for at least 1 more chapter. See, vemo would still have control over Robin, but no one would know this, and Robin would be doing things that he normally wouldn't do, so not only would his teammates be worried, but he would to.

Still, I need to congratulate you on a job well done......you're good at making people laugh . lol. That's funny, b/c, hahahahaha. *ahem* sorry 'bout that.
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Old 11-07-2004, 10:41 AM
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thanx! though i do enjoy making people laugh! im gunna try to get the next chapter out today. ttyl
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well at least you're working on it. it is a very interesting story. Can't wait for more.
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CHAPTER 3

"robin? are you feeling... of the okay?" starfire said as she looked at robin who had backed her against the wall.

"never felt better!" he said as he rasied his fist. he started to bring his hand down as the alarm went off.

"ROBIN, STAR! STOP MAKING OUT! ITS TIME TO GO!!!!!" they heard BB yell up the stairs.

Star sped out of there and down and stood beside raven, and stuck very close to her as they headed out.

~~~~AT THE CRIME SCENE~~~~

"YO!!!!!! WHAT ARE YOU TWO DOIN HERE???!!!" cyborg yelled as he saw Bumble Bee and Aqualad as he drove up.

"duh! BROTHER BLOOD!" Bumble Bee said as Jinx, Mammoth, and Gizmo came out of the building.

"well, look! if it isnt STONE!!!!!" jinx said as she first caught sight of cyborg, "AND the other trader, Bumble Bee!!!! TAKE THIS!" she fired her energy at the two.

"you guys take the other two, jinx is ours!" Bumble Bee and cyborg said at the exact same time.

star glanced nervously at robin who was smirking at her. raven immeaditly(sp) launched for gizmo and aqualad and BB took mammoth. 'uh-oh' star thought as robin ran at her. she flew up and floated there. he launched his bird a rang rope and pulled her back down to the ground.

robin ran over and was about to kick her when she flew up again, tears were streaming down her face, " robin!! you are NOT of the okay anymore!" and she fired starbolts at him, and he doged every one.

he jumped up, did a flip and landed under her and yelled at raven, "RAVEN! STAR'S GONE INSANE! SHES ATTACKING ME!"

raven had already defeated gizmo and had started to help BB and Aqualad.

raven looked up and then flew over. she stood there staring at star for awhile. then she looked at robin.... then back to starfire. then she looked up and unknown to starfire, she picked up a bunch of huge objects and hurled them at her. starfire was struck hard and she fell to the ground. she sat [] up and ran to raven, "please friend! you must believe me!!!! something is wrong with robin!!!!"

"i dont believe anyone who is being controlled," raven said, picking star up telekinatically and hurling her at the wall. it knocked her unconsious and the rest of the titans continued to fight. as raven was thinking, ' i know whos being controlled. and its not starfire, but robin.... or... verno.. has to trust me if my plan is to work.' robin was having yet another arguement with verno.

verno: oh come now robin, if you just quit fighting me, this would go alot quicker.

robin: please!!!! just.... GO AWAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

verno: im so sorry robin, but i havent even put a scratch on that pathetic little &*%$#@ princess, so, my job isnt NEAR DONE.

robin: i wont let you hurt starfire!

verno: oh robin.... robin, robin, robin. i may not have hurt her physically, but mentally, shes scarred all over. i already have you AND raven on my side, so things are looking up. if you would just stop fighting me, it would go by OH SO much faster.

robin: never.

verno: fine.... we'll do this the HARD way then......


~~~~BACK AT THE TOWER~~~~

there was a knock on star's door late that night, "who is there?" star said standing near the door.

"its me, raven and cyborg. we're here to help," rave said in a very low whisper.

star opened the door and let them in, "you wish to... help? so... you dont not believe robin's lies?"

"thats because its not robin doing this. its a mind controller, bent on destroying you starfire. his name is verno," raven said.

verno. that name brought back so many memories.

raven noticed that star wasnt going to say anything and looked at be deep in thought. she looked at cyborg and then said to both of them, "i have a plan to stop verno and help robin, and this is how it goes.................."

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great chapter! but do you really think raven would hurt starfire that much just to have robin/verno think she doesnt know? anyways post soon!
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Ugh, It's going by too fast. Slow down and describe what happened. Here's an example.

Gizmo was attacking Raven. Gizmo had just fired a ton of missiles at her but she brought up a shield of black, crackling energy, emerging unharmed. Then she threw bricks at Gizmo's metallic legs that he was using, and broke them. Then she used her powers to crush the machine on his back and sent him flying, to knock him unconcious.

"Raven, Star's gone completely insane!" Robin yelled, with a convincing tone of worry in his voice, "She's attacking me!"


Otherwise it was pretty good.
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CHAPTER 4

"but..... how do you know of verno?" starfire said after raven finished explaining.

"well, when robin called me over there i was scanning his mind, because normally..... robin doesnt want help. so, unknown to him, i found verno. and decided, that i needed to fool robin..... or verno.... sorry if i hurt you," raven said looking to the ground.

"it is..... of the okay..... now that i am in the undersatnding of your brilliant plan," star said platering a fake smile on her face.

"well..... star i know your upset already, but... you need to know that everything that robin says isnt truly robin because he will probably be saying things like 'i hate you' or 'im gunna kill you' and..... well...... verno may take you up on that offer...." cyborg said as he gave star a brotherly hug.

star tried not to cry. so she said, "please..... excuse my leaving.... i need.... some of this alone time that raven speaks so highly of." and she pushed them of her room. and bawled to her hearts content.

raven went off to talk to robin and cyborg stayed planted near star's door, becoming sadder and sadder as he listened to starfire cry.

"robin?" raven said as she knocked on the door, "can i come in?"

"sure," said robin's voice, almost as monotoned as hers.

raven opened the door and stepped inside, "i wanted to talk to you about starfire."

robin flinched at her name and raven resisted the urge to try to beat verno, mentally of course.

robin smirked and in a completely different voice said, "so, your raven the 'master of the mind' on the team? ha.... pathetic! well, lets see who was easier to take over... robin... or raven."

raven put up a mental barrier, as well as a physical barrier.

"im not going to attack you physically..... lets take this somewhere where we cant be heard OR helped," verno said as he held up his hand and as the room started to swirl away raven saw a mass of purple dart into the room......................

~~~~IN RAVEN + VERNO'S MINDS~~~~

"raven?????" said a voice as raven opened her eyes to see her sister sitting above her. raven jumped at the sight of her.

"what are you doing here?????!!!!" raven said staring at her older sister demona. she was cloaked in dark, DARK purple and smiling at raven, "well, i've been.... watching over you, and i thought you might need help, so i darted in."

"no, i have to solve this myself," raven said looking around for verno.

"tsk tsk.... raven, raven, raven..... thats why you have to meditate everyday..."

"you mean you don't?" raven said angrily pushing demona aside, and walking along the rocks that formed in front of her.

"no. i dont."

raven stopped dead in her tracks and turned to her sister, "how? our powers are out of control!"

"wrong little sister. just yours and the other sisters who haven learned to ask for help and to trust easily. and that little sister.... you havent learned. once you learn those things, you wont have to meditate everyday."

"awww.... touching," said verno's voiceas he stepped out of the shadows, "but raven was right. she has to do this on her own."

"not when im around! verno! UGH!!!!! you're the most hated demon on asrath! you were banned! so why are you messing with raven? huh? she didnt even have a choice in the matter as to if you got banned, she was to young! why are you messing with her?!"

"well, for one, shes the daughter of the one who banned me. and, two, shes friends with the stuck-up prude princess who's parents banned me from tamaran. then that little 'starfire' banned the love of my life from tamaran and THEN handed tamaran over to Galfore, my worst enemy!!!!! i hate starfire, i hate raven and i hate you demona!" verno said as he charged at them. raven studided the man. he had grey al,ost silver hair with a blood red spot in front and was well built.

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he lashed out on demona who dodged every single one of his attacks.

"HOLD STILL!" verno yelled.

"make me! " demona said smirking.

raven picked up a few HUGE rocks and threw them at verno, careful not to hurt demona.

verno turned his attack on raven who didnt expect it and was hit hard.

"RAVEN!!!!!" demona yelled.....

~~~~~AT THE TOWER~~~~~

"raven?????!!!!!!!" cyborg and starfire said as they searched the tower, they finally came to robin's room and went inside. they saw raven, robin, and a girl that looked like like raven only..... older, longer hair and everywhere that was blue on raven was DARK purple.

"what has happened to our friends?" starfire said, becoming very concerned.

cyborg looked at his arm after scanning them, "they seem to be in a trance. maybe raven and..... this girl.... went inside of robin's head to destroy verno."

"oh.... i wish to know that my friends are okay now..." starfire said laying raven's head in her lap.

"if my scanners are right, this girl is demona..... raven's WHAT????!!!! its... her..... sister............."


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Chapter 5

"RAVEN!!!!!!!!!!!" demona yelled as raven was hit and her body started to fade away, "okay.... THATS IT! IM SICK OF FIGHTING YOU AND YOUR KIND!!!!!" she lashed out on him, firing all the energy she had at him. he struggled to stand up and smirked at her.

"you're gunna have to do better than that if you plan on getting me out of robin's mind....." he said as he ran towards her.

she felt raven transferring her power to her. 'she must be trasferring it to my physical body....' she thought as she powered up to deliver the final blow to verno. verno tried to strike her but a barrier came up around her and starfire's voice echoed, "you shall not interfere!!" verno growled and tried again and again to strike demona, but the barrier held him back.

demona opened her eyes which were glowing black and then said, "im tired of you verno..... you gladly sent you're kind to my fathers aide, and as a result... asrath was destroyed. you, your people, and my father destroyed my home and killed my mother. now its time for you to feel the pain i felt..... GOOD BYE!!!!!! AND GOOD RIDDANCE!!!!!!!!" she finally delivered a huge blast of energy that engulfed verno and he was destroyed. demona stared at the place where he was and then closed her eyes as her soul slowly returned to her body....



~~~~AT THE TOWER~~~~

raven took her hands away from demona's head as demona opened her eyes. they all looked over at robin who opened his eyes and looked over at starfire. starfire went to the farhtest corner away from robin. robin stood up and walked out and demona followed him. raven stood up to follow her, but demona turned to her and said, "no. let me talk to him alone."


"okay....." raven said as she turned to see cyborg sitting with star who was crying...................
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CHAPTER 6

"robin?" demona said as she walked out onto the roof.

robin had positioned himself on the edge of the tower, swinging his feet back and forth like a little kid, "hey demona..... look....im not really good at this....but.....thanks."

demona smiled, "no problem." she sat down next to him and gazed out at gotham city. she glanced over at robin, whom was looking very angry, "robin...."

"ugh! i hate how i was so weak! i mean....i could talk to him....so why couldnt i stop him?" robin said as he stood up and kicked the air.

"because robin, you arent strong enough in your mental prowess. you may have physical strength, and you may be 'smart' but your mental powers arent even close to enough. it took all of mine and some of raven's powers to defeat verno. hes tough. not one to give up easily. i guess that runs in his culture" demona looked down to the ground, she had stood up and robin stopped kicking the air and looked over at her. one lone tear ran down her face and she wiped it away quickly.

"raven never told us exactly what happened....." robin said.

"thats because it was not meant to be spoken," she said as her hair went underneath her cloak and her hood went up. she only did this when she was bothered, and so she retreated into raven's room.....


~~~~STARFIRE'S ROOM~~~~~

"starfire, you HAVE to calm down, crying breaks my concentration and i cant help you if i cant concentrate," rave said as she stood up and turned to leave, "call me when you're done whimpering." she walked out and went to the living room, she found BB sitting there. she gasped. BB had NO idea what had been going on in titan's tower. he was gunna be hurt that they left him out.

she went over to the cabinets and got out the ingredientents for herbal tea. she knew that her sister was going to need it. BB looked up from the games as he heard the shuffling around.

"raven.... i feel like i've been.....out of the loop about something....." BB said and raven dropped the tea cups, she caught them before they made cantact with the floor, and she turned to BB.

"um...... well..... i cant lie to you," she started the tea, then sat down and told BB about everything that he had been left out of.

by the end, BB was sitting there, in absolute shock. as soon as raven finished he stood up and went to star's room. raven picked up the tea, and poured to cups and went up to her room, to find her sister near death on the floor, somone escaping through the huge hole in her wall.

~~~~~STAR'S ROOM~~~~~

BB ran into the room and star had almost stopped crying, he went over and comforted her, then they heard raven scream. they all got up and ran to her room, seeing raven sitting in her doorway, in total shock and they went inside and saw demona laying on the floor near death.......

robin ran in and looked at demona and almost started crying. but he recalled demona's words 'robin, you arent strong enough in your mental prowess. you may have physical strength, and you may be 'smart' but your mental powers arent even close to enough' and held them back, "come on team, we've gotta find who did this!"

cyborg, raven, and BB nodded. starfire stared at him and then flew off after the others. deciding against it and offering robin her hand.

robin looked shocked at her offer, "arent you mad at me?"

" i was..... but robin......we are.....of the greatest kind of friends......and as i have said before..... i cannot live in a world where we must fight...... so i offer you my hand of friendship, and hopefully we shall remain that way."

robin smiled and gave her his hand. not only of friendship....but his hand of love.

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Very good chapter!!! Please write more!!!!! You obviously can not be talking about your story when you say it is bad...no, your probably talking about the old milk that is stinking up your refridgerator.


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