Teen Titans (MH)

[Brendon45]

I love writting stories with drama in it or stories that triger your emotion. I'm writting a story about the teen titans.
It's called "Trigered Emotion". Part 1 is short just to warn you all.


~Titan Tower~ Part 1
[Teen titans are in their living room. The door suddenly opens.]
Beastboy: Terra?
[Terra is just standing there. She's not answering any of them.]
Beastboy: Why, why aren't you answering us Terra?
[She's still standing there. Suddenly, she runs away.]
Beastboy: Terra!
[The Teen titans run after her except Raven.]
Raven: Let her go
[Beastboy grabs Raven.]
Beastboy: Come on!
[Terra runs till' she gets to a dead end.]
Beastboy: What are you going to do Terra- please just answer us!
Terra: ...... I'm not Terra
[She runs away.]
Beastboy: TERRA!
Robin: Let her go. It's late we need to think abot this
~Next day~
Beastboy: Wake up everyone!!
[Everyone wakes up cranky.]
Raven: What do you want Beastboy
Starfire: Yeah you're disturbing my beauty sleep
Robin: Wait beastboy-
[Villain alarm goes off. The titans go to the monitor.]
Robin: It's the thing!
[The Teen titans rush out. Terra comes in.]
Terra: I'm not Terra!!
[She starts destroying things in the titan's tower. Meanwhile, the titans show up at the crime seen.]
Robin: Nobody is here
Beastboy: False alarm?
Starfire: Have we had any of those?
Raven: Oh well let's go back
[They all go back to the TTower and when they walk in....]
Beastboy: What happened in here
Starfire: It looks like what we have on our planet: a Glorfin-dwarf
Raven: In english?
Robin: Who cares? We have to find the perpertraitor
F/V: HmHmHmHmHmHm!
Robin: SLADE!
Slade: We meet again Robin
Robin: WHat do you want with me!!
Slade: Oh nothin I'm just here to provide you with some information
Robin: What information!
Slade: Why your little playpen looks like that
Beastboy: Tell us!!
Slade: Hmhmhmhmhmhmh!!!
Beastboy: Come ON!!
Slade: ASK ME WHAT YOU WANNA' KNOW!!
[Comes down with an arial attack.]
Robin: Who DID THIS!
Slade: Well let's review
Robin: Slade!!
Slade: Who did you last see, who chooses what and who they want to be, WHO COULDN'T CONTROLL THEIR POWERS AND HAD NO HELP FROM THEIR PIERS!!!!!
[Come down with another arial attack. And fights them. Starts thundering and lightning. The lighting stopped them all as they looked out the window and saw terra in the clouds as the lightning flickered. Slade disappeared.
The room was filled with complete qiuetness.]

[To be continued....]

I was tired when I wrote this. More will be added but for now tell me what you think.

[Tenku]

Uh...first off, this is the correct place to put Teen Titan fiction (http://forums.toonzone.net/forumdisplay.php?f=135).

Second, this doesn't exactly warrant a story, much less a part. I don't even know what's going on.

[Agent S7]

Uh...first off, this is the correct place to put Teen Titan fiction (http://forums.toonzone.net/forumdisplay.php?f=135).

Second, this doesn't exactly warrant a story, much less a part. I don't even know what's going on.

Hm. I agree that it belongs in Teen Titans fanfiction.

However, the story is interesting for me. It needs some serious fleshing-out. And it looks like the kind of story that should be in prose.

Example:

Raven: Beast Boy...
Beast Boy: Are you OK?
Raven kisses Beast Boy



Beast Boy walked into the door. Why did she call me here? What's going on? His mind was buzzing with confusion.
The door opened with a swoop. Raven sat on her bed, her hood over her head. "Beast Boy..." she muttured in a shaky, pained voice.
"Hey...are you okay?" Beast Boy asked. "Because--"
Raven suddenly locked lips with him, shocking Beast Boy. What was going on?


Therefore, I suggest doing some writing excercises. First, try to make what's happening more clear. Add some more description of the characters' emotions and actions. He punched...with rage. He said...with a look of guilt on his face. And most importantly, don't write in script format unless you feel it's necessary. Prose looks much more proffesional. Scripts are nice, but it's best to use them only when you feel it could only work as a script. This would, IMO, be better as a 3rd person story. Or a 1st.

Either way, this needs to be moved or reposted.

And BTW! Welcome to Toon Zone, buddy! :)

~s7

[SilverKnight]

This...yeah. This belongs in TT fanfic. Also, there needs to be more to this. Terra suddenly shows up, and...then what? It makes no sense. As Agent said, flesh it out some. Give us some more information, so the reader can digest exactly what's happening. I'll leave this open in the hopes I see some improvement.

[Brendon45]

Hey I know how you guys write I just choose not to but now that i see it's better then I'll write like that. I know my story wasn't the greatest but next one will be better.:brendon:

[Brendon45]

Here's part 2 of the teen titans!! After 3 long days of day dreaming and drawing I have a story for all! And I must say it's all worth it.

"Trigered Emotion" Part 2
Robin was confused at what was going on. They all were observing the clouds trying to understand what it all meant.

"Why-what does this all mean why do they look like-," Robin was interrupted.

" Terra?"answered Beastboy. "Why do the clouds look like Terra, you say?"said beastboy.

"Yes this is such a blurr,"said Starfire.

A voice appeared again. It was Slade. No one saw him either.

"It is because she's trying to tell you all something,"said Slade.

"What, WHAT IS IT," shouted Robin. Robin was eagered to find out what was going on.

"She's trying to tell you all that she's not TERRA ANYMORE!!"shrieked Slade.

Then there was no more noise. There was no thunder or lightning just qiuet. Then for a moment the lights when dead. The titans were afriad and had know idea what was going on.

"Listen NOW!"said a girl like voice. " I AM NOT WHO YOU THINK I AM! NOW STOP BUGGING AND BOTHERING ME FOR THERE WILL BE A GREAT COST OF PAIN AND SORROW!!"

"Terra we only want to help you or whatever your name is,"said Beastboy. Suddenly it was qiuet again.............then the vioce got louder in a devil like voice.

"I'M NOT TERRA ANYMORE!!" yelled the angry voice. Just then big huge boulders came from the sealing crushing items in the TTower. Raven used here special black powers to move boulders elsewhere incase it wouldn't fall on the Teen Titans.

"Please stop this whoever you are," said Robin fiercely.

"WHY SHOULD I?" asked the devilish voice.

"Because we don't want to hurt you!" replied Beastboy sadly with tears in his eyes. " Terra...... I know you are there....... please Terra PLEASE!"

"I'M NOT TERRA!!" said the girl like voice. The devilish voice went away as the person calmed down.

"YES YOU ARE TERRA YOUR IN THERE AND YOU KNOW IT COME OUT TERRA PLEASE WE WILL HELP YOU PLEASE," cried Beastboy. Suddenly Terra came down slowly with tears in her eyes as she watched Beastboy with tears in his eyes.

".....I'm not Terra..... I'm sorry Beastboy I don't remember you Beastboy I'm sorry," she said calmly. "Terra no longer exists, doesn't exist on Earth Beastboy and you need to understand that....good bye Beastboy." Suddenly she dropped into dust as he remembered this memory:Terra and Beast Boy Talk (http://teentitans.toonzone.net/tt/reviews/thingschange/03.mp3) ( --Brendon45
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I think this story was emotional because I even have Tears in my eyes. Oh and to see what pic. I was thinking about when I wrote this go to My book art (http://forums.toonzone.net/showthread.php?t=165649) for the drawing board thread on May 5, 2006!!!:)

[Anima]

hmm... I like the plot. I think it's an original idea. The only problem I have is that you seem to be rushing yourself a lot. It seems like all of this happens in not even a full 24 hours.

Developing the actions and events more will help the story seem not as impulsive. Ofcourse, you might be trying to type up a chapter in one sitting, in which case, writing and saving it to a word document, then coping and pasting would solve your problem.

[Brendon45]

From a month of practicing and day dreaming I have another story for you all. It is called:"Azurath part I." Enjoy!:)


Azurath, Part I

~Titans Tower~

It was an average afternoon with the Titans all in the main room just sitting doing their natural activties. Beast Boy and Cyborg were playing the video game. Robin was listening to some music on the huge blasting boom box. Starfire was painting her nails with all rainbowy colors.

But Raven didn't do anything of those. She wasn't listening to the outrages music, playing the video game or painting her nails with all rainbowy colors. She was reading her book while meditating. She was sitting in her cold dark room just meditating.

"Azurath Metronome Zinthose," she said, Azurath Metronome Zinthose."

She would repeat it on and on until she heard the city alarm. They rushed out except for Robin. He thought he forget someone so he rushed upstairs and searched all the rooms. Then he went to Ravens room but before he opened it, the TT locator beeped. It was Beastboy.

"Robin we need you," shouted Beastboy, "this one's bad!!"

"Ok I'm on my way," said Robin.

Then he closed the locator. He knocked on the door.

"Raven? Are you there?" asked Robin.

The answer was a dark devilish voice.

"Get away from me!! said the person inside.

Next Robin heard a crash which sounded like it jumped out the window. Robin kicked the door open.

"Raven?" said Robin.

The window was cracked with a large whole. Robin went the window.

"Raven?!!?" shouted Robin, "RAVEN!!!!"

Later that day everyone was in the main room. It got darker by the minute no one said anything soon it started to rain and thunder.

"Do you think she died- is she coming back?" asked Starfire.

"It's important not to think like that," said Cyborg.

"Cyborg is right," replied Beast Boy,"Com' on let's play a board game."

"Not now B," cyborg said.

The Titans were down. Suddenly the thunder got bolder and louder when lighting stroked the lights in the city would dim out and soon they were all out.

"What the heck is going on now?" asked Cyborg.

The Titans all looked outside and the lightning blind their eyes. The thunder was so loud it crushed the windows of the Tower pieces flew every where.

"Titans behind the counter!" commanded Robin.

They did just so.

"Could this be Raven's wrath?" asked Starfire.

"What do you mean star fire?" replied Robin.

"When you, Beastboy, and Cyborg were trapped in the souls
me and Raven studied each other sense we had no other choices," explained Starfire," I remember her saying that every so many years of using her powers one day she'd just stop what ever she was doing and became mad. I do not know the reason for such a cause but she said some thing about the beast being released on her making her extremely evil."

"O.k. is there a cure?" asked Beastboy.

"No I'm afraid not except......" said Starfire.

"What, what is it Star?" asked Robin.

"We must kill her in order to release the beast," replied Starfire.

The Titans thought it was a deeply decision rather to kill her or let her be evil and let her destroy.

"We can't let this happen there must be another way," said Cyborg.

"There is," says Starfire, "she can skip into time."

They all agreed that decision.

"We all must say these words: Azurath Metronome Zinthose," said Starfire.

The kept repeating it until a great shine was out side. It was the far future! The Tower was empty and was filled with dust.The Titans were no longer together!

Even though they were apart they had their locators. And as long as they had those they were going to try to solve this mystery as best as it could .....

[Brendon45]

Here's a piece that was deleted over the time when I wrote this story.
Enjoy:


Azurath, part I (deleted piece)

~Titan's Tower~

The Titans rushed out except for Robin because he thought there was someone missing. So he rushed up as quickly as he can passing searching through all of the doors.

Then he went to Raven's door but before he could open the door the locater beeped. It was Beastboy.

"What is it Beastboy?" asked Robin.

"Were at the crime scene and we're not doing so well-" Beastboy was interupted by a crashing truck. "Actually we're going down..... quick get here NOW!!"

Then he closed his locator and kicked the door open. When the door flew open he saw Raven's great evil side. She had four piercing red eyes with her blue cape being blown away.

"Raven?" said Robin.

"MOVE OUT MY WAY!!!" shouted Raven with her dark father's voice.

Suddenly Robin flew out the room as she went past him with her black powers overshadowing her. Robin got up and tried to run up next to her. Then she turned around.

"Leave me alone!!" yelled Raven.

She sent Robin flying through the back down the hallway Meanwhile at the crime scene it was silent. No residents or people around just fog and destruction. Heaps and heaps of building bricks and other substances like that were all over the place.

But the Titans were laying on the ground......dead. It seems as though they have lost the battle. If only Robin were to show up to provide some assitants the would had a better chances of winning the battle.

After a while Robin showed up and had dropped dead to the ground on his knees.

"What have I done..." cried Robin.

"Azurath metronome Zinthose," said Raven.

Things were starting to reappear correctly and buildings were easily be repaired at no time.

Once everything was repaired Raven flew away.

"Wait Raven?" asked Robin.

Raven pretended to act like she didn't hear him and continued to fly away.



This piece was deleted from the part where Robin first came upstairs.

[Brendon45]

After several months of inspiration I am ready to write and make everything better and more understanding!

Azurath, Part 2

It was a very snowy day. But it was very normal. Everyday citizens and children throwing snowballs. While that was taking place on the Earth the Teen Titans were sitting in the Titans Tower which had burnt mark, dents, and holes in it. They were very confused as to what they needed to do.

"What are we to do now? Don't you know Star? " asked Robin. Everyone looked down at the ground.

"Well yes but-" Starfire was interupted.

"TELL US PLEASE!!!" shouted Beastboy.

"Well we have to find the cities powerplant to stop Raven in the past," said Starfire.

"Okay that shouldn't be too hard, should it?" asked Raven.

"And why in the heck do we have to go into time to get a powerplant? We could go back and use the one we have back there!" said Cyborg.

"No we can't," said Starfire," there was never a power plant back then. They used Generators."

" Uhh isn't it the same as a Power plant?" asked Beastboy.

"And who's they?" asked Robin.

"Your citizens you call construction men?" asked Starfire.

Suddenly, there was an earthquake! They all looked out the window and saw a great big and black shadow bird come from up from the city.

"TITANS GO!" commanded Robin.

They all rushed out. Robin ran in an alley way and hopped on the walls back and forth until he was on the roof of an old shop. Starfire flew up to the large black bird and shot with her green starbolts along with Beastboy who flew up carrying Cyborg shooting with his blaster at the Beast. The Gigantic Bird screamed in horror.

Just then the large Crow had used it's hand and Grabbed Starfire and threw her down towards the ground which made a THUD. Robin drew out his stick and jumped off the building where the Big Bird was at and struck the bird in the head. It returned to normal stage when it used it's hand again to grab Robin and to throw him down to the ground where Starfire had landed.

A few moments later Beastboy and Cyborg hit the ground with a THUD!

"I am beginning to see a bit of Raven in that Creature!" said starfire.

"Thats because it IS RAVEN!" Robin said reconizing it.

" We must not attack her!" said Starfire.

"The result cound be disasterious!" said Cyborg.

"Well there's only one thing to do!" said Beastboy," get to the power plant."

"You know you're right Beastboy!" said Robin stunned. They all looked very suprised.

"YOU WERE RIGHT?!!?" they all said surprisingly.

After that they all went searching for a way to get underground. A few minutes later when it got darker they had found a way in by the sewer caps which were very heavy. So beast boy decided to turn into an Gorrila and had lifted it with no problem.

Under there it was very dark and very moist. It was infested with small rats the ran around them.

"We need some light Starfire," said Robin.

"Okay," said Starfire.

She used her green starbolt which she heald in her hand. The power plant was not tht far away. They walked and all they could here is machines moving back and forth. They found the switch and turned it off.

Suddenly there was an Earthquake again. Blinding lights began shinning in the titans faces. With in a minute they were all on the couch in the Titans Tower.

"OKay I thought the powerplant was suppose to stop Raven?" said Beastboy.

Just then the door opened and Raven came out stretching.

"Hey what happened to you guys?" asked Raven.

"We've been trying to find you and help you," said Robin," you just disappeared when I came in your room."

"Oh so that's what happen to my door," said Raven.

"Are you okay?" asked Starfire.

"Yes I am," said Raven.

Then they all hugged. But what really did the generator do? Why did Raven ask what happen to you guys if she was the one gone?

Then the mail arrived. It was for Slade.

"Ummm Slade gets mail......at our home?" asked Robin.

Then Raven replied in a ,"Oh don't you know while you guys were gone for 25 years Slade and I became great partners .........AND THERE'S NOTHING YOU TITANS WILL EVER DO ABOUT IT!"

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COMING SOON-ISH:
Pressure, Part 1: (not yet published)
Pressure, Part 2: (not yet published)

[The Guitar Slayer]

"Suddenly there was an earthquake!"

And the plot moved right along with absolutely no reaction or description of the shaking. Or any of the Titans' reactions or what they would do.

It's not fast paced, just confusing. You have improved, but keep working on it. You need to add in description, word painting, verbal illustration. Show us, don't just tell us. And don't skip over what may be the "boring parts." Boring parts are the meat and potatoes of stories -- it establishes normalcy and how this story is a remarkable change in events.

[Brendon45]

Thks G.S. I'll remember that in my next story!

[Brendon45]

......There was trouble in the city and the Titans rushed out the Tower with confusion and wonder. Raven and Slade stood there as it seem to be their duty! Beast Boy stopped to get Raven.

"Com' on Raven you're still a titan!" said Beast Boy.

"Naa, I think I'll stay here, I have a lot of work to do!" replied Raven.

"Slade isn't your friend he's your ENEMY!!" said Beast Boy.

"If she is not please to go then don't make her do it!" said Slade.

Beast Boy grew with anger. His face began to turn a bit pink-ish color. He's teeth grew to a meduim-large extent where they became fangs. He grew angrier and turned into a large Gorilla.

"I am not leaving this TOWER UNTIL I GET RAVEN TO COME WITH ME!" shouted Beast Boy.

Raven looked down as if she was the large blame and finally she flew to her room with tears flying down her face. Slade had shared the same evil looking face Beast Boy was holding.

"Now look what you down you pathetic fool,"said Slade,"you ran her off with you're selfishness and care."

"That's what friends are for!"said Beast Boy. Slade laughed hard as if what Beast Boy said was a bold face lie.

"She was never your friend, you dunce, you imature child," Slade teased.

"YOU DON'T KNOW WHAT YOU'RE TALKING ABOUT!!" Beast boy got angrier.

"25 YEARS OF INFORMATION AND HER FEELINGS TOWARD YOU!" Slade replied.

"25 YEARS NOTHING! SHE THINKS I'M FUNNY, CARING AND-" Beastboy was interrupted.

Slade continued off,"OBNOXIOUS, IMATURE, CHILDISH!"

Beastboy grew so angry that he charged at Slade. Slade stood there waiting for something to happen,to jump out at Beastboy.
And it did.

"STOP IT!!" shouted Raven. Raven came rushing into the room and used her black powers to send Beastboy Flying towards the bar table.

"I'm sorry Beastboy but all the stuff he's saying is....." Raven stopped as more tears ran down her face.

"True!" Slade finished once more.
Beastboy stared at Raven with confusion. Inside he was angry
and he felt that he wanted to hit her really hard.

"Why Raven, Why?" Beastboy said mildly.


Later that day the sun was setting. The sky was growing dark blue and the city was qiuet. Everyone in the city was qiuet.
In the Tower there was qiuet. The Titans were all in the main room except Slade and Raven. There was a great deal of pressure as to what they were suppose to do.

Either kill the good guy or tell Raven she was off the Team. The vote was to let Raven off the Team. No matter how hard it was they were going to do it.

When Raven and Slade walked through the door. Robin gets up and goes over to them with sadness.

"Raven this might be hard but we have to do it,"Robin said slowly,"Raven you're off the Teen Titans."

Raven was surprised when she heard the news. Slade watched as Raven looked at Robin furiously.

"Fine, but don't expect me to go away!" Raven sneered. Starfire shared a sad look with Robin and Cyborg.

Raven hovered away. Slade walked with her. Starfire had a deep secret that she didn't share with anyone up until this point.

Starfire forgot to tell them that this is what to happen in the future. This is her destiny. The Prophecy. And there was nothing anyone could do about it........

[Brendon45]

Well here's my final story for a while! Welcome and enjoy my new comic!!

Pressure, Part 2: The Final Event

It was a few days later. The day was very sad along with the flowers that coiled softly. The sun was partially gone and clouds over came the sun. The ground was moist and was brown like it should be. The moisture made the world sad on this very day.

It aslo made the Titans mild and calm. They were sitting in their rooms looking down at the floor. Starfire was trying to meditate like Raven but failed because of her thoughts of Raven and the good times they had. The way they shared each others memories and secrets.

Robin was listening to his boom box gloomy. He was also thinkging of Raven. How Slade was appearing to him and not the others and how she could see through his eyes and know what he was feeling.

Beastboy was in puppy formand had those big gloomy eyes. Thinking how she laughed at the things he said to her. All the fights she and him had as good friends.

Cyborg was charging himself as he thought of the great times he had with her even though they never had any conflict. Those two were the sensible ones along with Robin.

They all walked out of their rooms accordingly. It was Robin, then Starfire, next Beastboy, and finally Cyborg. They entered the living room as they sloped and moped around.

"Man what are we going to do?" asked Beastboy."I mean its been days since we last seen her!"

"It's her choice we can't do anything about it," replied Cyborg.

"NO, we must do something! We won't give up on her!" shouted Starfire fiercely. As she shouted her eyes lit up with green fiery lightning. Her teeth grew sharp and her mouth opened wide.

"Well Star what can we do?" asked Robin.

"WE WILL GO OUT THERE AND FIND HER!" said Starfire.

And she went out searching. She flew every where through streets and buildings. She looked in a sewer ad didn't find her. She grew with more anger with her wide teeth and her green fiery lightning.

Finally she gave up. It was darker. andthe city lights came on.
She arrived in the tower. It was Robin and Cyborg playing a board game.

"Hey Starfire have you seen Beastboy?" asked Robin.

"No why-is he missing?" she asked.

"Yeah he is," answered Cyborg,"he said something about Pressure on T.V. He said he was going to meet her."

"Pressure?Who is this Pressure?" asked Stafire.

Meanwhile in a dark alleyway it was Beastboy and a hooded girl. She seemed like she was very evil with her high advance high heels. She had in a black jacket with a black blouse. She had on dark-red lipstick. She had an evill grin able to see her sharp teeth.

"So your name is Beastboy is it?" asked the hooded girl.

"Yes it is, and I do have what you what," replied Beastboy.

"Can you turn into that cute little puppy dog for me cutie pie?" asked the hooded girl.

"Sure," said Beastboy. He quickly turned into the little green puppy dog the hooded girl requested. Then she step forward and snatched him up with a black cloth-like bag. He cryed but no one could hear him. On the back it said,"Legion".

Back at the tower Starfire was looking for Beastboy. Robin turned on the TV while Cyborg sat and watched. It was the news.

"Tonight we'll be discussing the death of a green human as the scientist label him and how he died," said the Reporter lady.

Everyone drops their mouth and shares a sad look. For this was Beastboy's destiny?
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COMING SOON
LEGION, Part 1 (COMING SOON)
LEGION, Part 2 (COMING SOON)

ALSO COMING SOON:
EVOLUTION (COMING SOON)
ETERNAL CURSE (COMING SOON)

[Brendon45]

Well here's my final story for a while! Welcome and enjoy my new comic!!

Pressure, Part 2: The Final Event

It was a few days later. The day was very sad along with the flowers that coiled softly. The sun was partially gone and clouds over came the sun. The ground was moist and was brown like it should be. The moisture made the world sad on this very day.

It aslo made the Titans mild and calm. They were sitting in their rooms looking down at the floor. Starfire was trying to meditate like Raven but failed because of her thoughts of Raven and the good times they had. The way they shared each others memories and secrets.

Robin was listening to his boom box gloomy. He was also thinkging of Raven. How Slade was appearing to him and not the others and how she could see through his eyes and know what he was feeling.

Beastboy was in puppy formand had those big gloomy eyes. Thinking how she laughed at the things he said to her. All the fights she and him had as good friends.

Cyborg was charging himself as he thought of the great times he had with her even though they never had any conflict. Those two were the sensible ones along with Robin.

They all walked out of their rooms accordingly. It was Robin, then Starfire, next Beastboy, and finally Cyborg. They entered the living room as they sloped and moped around.

"Man what are we going to do?" asked Beastboy."I mean its been days since we last seen her!"

"It's her choice we can't do anything about it," replied Cyborg.

"NO, we must do something! We won't give up on her!" shouted Starfire fiercely. As she shouted her eyes lit up with green fiery lightning. Her teeth grew sharp and her mouth opened wide.

"Well Star what can we do?" asked Robin.

"WE WILL GO OUT THERE AND FIND HER!" said Starfire.

And she went out searching. She flew every where through streets and buildings. She looked in a sewer ad didn't find her. She grew with more anger with her wide teeth and her green fiery lightning.

Finally she gave up. It was darker. andthe city lights came on.
She arrived in the tower. It was Robin and Cyborg playing a board game.

"Hey Starfire have you seen Beastboy?" asked Robin.

"No why-is he missing?" she asked.

"Yeah he is," answered Cyborg,"he said something about Pressure on T.V. He said he was going to meet her."

"Pressure?Who is this Pressure?" asked Stafire.

Meanwhile in a dark alleyway it was Beastboy and a hooded girl. She seemed like she was very evil with her high advance high heels. She had in a black jacket with a black blouse. She had on dark-red lipstick. She had an evill grin able to see her sharp teeth.

"So your name is Beastboy is it?" asked the hooded girl.

"Yes it is, and I do have what you what," replied Beastboy.

"Can you turn into that cute little puppy dog for me cutie pie?" asked the hooded girl.

"Sure," said Beastboy. He quickly turned into the little green puppy dog the hooded girl requested. Then she step forward and snatched him up with a black cloth-like bag. He cryed but no one could hear him. On the back it said,"Legion".

Back at the tower Starfire was looking for Beastboy. Robin turned on the TV while Cyborg sat and watched. It was the news.

"Tonight we'll be discussing the death of a green human as the scientist label him and how he died," said the Reporter lady.

Everyone drops their mouth and shares a sad look. For this was Beastboy's destiny?
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COMING SOON
LEGION, Part 1 (COMING SOON)
LEGION, Part 2 (COMING SOON)

ALSO COMING SOON:
EVOLUTION (COMING SOON)
ETERNAL CURSE (COMING SOON)

[Brendon45]

Please tell me how I did?

[paranoidguy103]

I like it. This story has a good plot line, and an original idea. Keep it up.
Peace,
Paranoidguy103

[ElliotBacote]

Hey, thanks PG! :D

[paranoidguy103]

No prob dude:cool: . You should definately stick with it. Like I said before your idea is good and has plenty of potential.
Peace,
Paranoidguy103

[ElliotBacote]

Come Back for more next week!:D