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Eve
05-02-2001, 07:20 PM
I feel a bit nervous putting this here mainly because I have gave a pretty negative view to how rational batman's real intentions are, i have been playing with the idea of making batman a different type of insanity then his rogue gallery but all the same he is insane. This will be (hopefully) a weird experiment that challenges lots of ways people thought about batman. Hope you like it ~EvE~


SHADOW OF THE BAT
Part one: Shadow of the night

"I am alone, ever since that morbid day i have been alone ever since they were taken from me,...father mother. Pearls lay where my blooded hands have been hugging the corpse of my mother. I remeber her hands were not even cold, they felt as if she would suddenly move them and laugh about playing dead. Bruce looks at his hands "I killed them", it was my hands that led them out of the cinema , my father who told me to i had made a fool out of him infront of all those people, ...my hatred that led him to the criminal "i killed him", and now i sit with a fortune under my belt bruce thinks to him self, it is as if i am possesed by that image i saw in the cave. that bat of revenge blood firsty revenge. How am i going to fight these dark shadows that are inside my dark and evil heart. Bruce looks at of the manor window which is situated in his main office of work, he thinks to him self more about how he can cope with this depression, this meaningful self pitty , this sorrow.

Later that day Bruce Wayne would lose his mind, his sanity.
The terror of seeing the avenging image in the cave one more time, makes bruce fall to his knees , he looks at all the wine bottles which glimmer directing thier light onto him, he see's his kind , the dark hellbound avengers , the bats of the night except him into their world, a world of terror , insanity and the night, the night reborn into the batman, bruce awakes a 4:32 in the morning to see his tired worn face in the reflection of the timid bottles, he then see's infront of him a dark mess of emotions all made to produce his shadow , his suit is of a bat. His soul is of a bat.
He walks desperatly to stop the voices in his head , he stops by the cave entrence and hears a snatching of golds and pearl, the echoing rip and the departure of his fathers watch and this is swiftly followed by two gun shots , two shots for both his parents , two shots for his soul to need redeeming.

And that night bruce did become batman, that night hasn't been mentioned by Bruce Wayne for along time.
But much time has past since that night, many more maniacs for the bat to stalk.

And now batman is reserrected from a boy of 10's soul, Bruce is born again
He waits at the roof top silent , his long night in gotham is over , he needs to hunt some more, his blood fettish is far from over, and then suddenly a sound alerts the preditor bat. His sleek shadow appears from the darkness , he as if the night took a shape of vengence. The bat see's with his red blood glare, how much he wants to taste their blood, taste justice.....Real justice. One of the prey holds a gun towards a person, a human, its a female,....She is about to scream before real fear hits her eyes, she see's the living shadow , the sleak vengence of the night. Then the bats eyes turn drowned in red, his prey start to shoot, but even a bullet tearing through this body fades into the darkness of justice. The demon cape surrounds all who he kills, dragging the first of the prey in and taking a bite out of his left arm, the criminal screams in pain as the bat thrusts his throat making him choke on his own blood. The other animal tries to run but the shadow of the bat is beneath his feet taking him onto the ground and into the bats feeding frenzie, bruce you have to control it, the bat doesn't listen to Wayne but suddenly Wayne takes control,.........He has brutilated two men tonight just as he has every night , his hunt is finnished.

Bruce watches the Tv with a hugh sense of mystery did he commit this or was it Batman?, he thinks to him self maybe a bit to much, has these unholy acts of brutality been from his hands. He knows the answer is yes as he watches unsurprised of what the head line is again. "Yes the gotham bat has struck again, this time on two young teenagers which were involved in crime related incidences before the boys were brutaly attacked and bitten to death by the gotham bat", he looks to the picture of Summer Gleason's distrote face. "eh,.......News just in,. she shuffles with the papers she has just been handed and start to read out the story "The Joker, escaped out of Arkham Asylum just a few hours ago ladies and gentlemen""we have an interview with Commisoner Gordon who is at the crime scene" , the Commisioners tired , worn face consumes the screen "Two hours ago, while you the general public have been safely in your nice homes of Gotham were unaware that The Joker , who is a highly dangerous murderer escaped out of Arkham Asylum by turning all who worked for him into laughing corpses , we believe he is a very influencial person and could easily trick and general citizen if he isn't wearing his fancy dress costume, he has also took an Arkham worker as hostage, we can confrim that she is Harleen Quinnzel, Ms. Quinnzel was The Joker's councilor for the last 6 months , there are also rumours that she might of let him out of his cell, we are looking into all of these accounts and will tell the press what we know as soon as we find out, please please remeber stay in your home if you live near Arkham , i cant stress that please stay in, thank you".

Part two: Life's a Joke (TO BE CONTINUED)
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Daughterof_Evil
05-02-2001, 07:28 PM
Good, but it's widely accepted that Bruce's parents died when he was eight. A promising story overall, you just need to work on basic spacing and grammar, a little on punctuation. Thanks for posting it, though. I'm really looking forward to the way you make Bruce go nuts.

Eve
05-02-2001, 07:31 PM
:) cool you gave a reply, yeah thanks for letting me know what you thought i am going to write the next part more seriously next time instead of a rushed job. Also thanks for telling me it was when he was eight, i guess you guys reading will just have to pretend it say eight :)

Daughterof_Evil
05-02-2001, 07:56 PM
Hey, no problem. We fanfic writers gotta stick together, ya know? There's some really talented people here, so we'd like to see you back! Ja ne!

Eve
05-05-2001, 08:25 PM
Part two: Life's a Joke

The Joker stayed glazing at the sweet beam of the television, his face with not a smile to be seen.
His head a maze of unspeakable horrors, all with a comical side, such evil in such a normal man. He looks over to the battered and abused Harleen Quinnzel and starts to laugh and as he smiles , her smile slowly lifts to the laughter and before she knows it she is laughing with the joker trapped in his mindless maze.
"Hello im Summer Gleason, The news just in" on the television of the early morning wayne residence Bruce watches it with fear, it seems each day something bad is happening , something bad is always there making it's presence known in this city. Bruce turns his sight back to the Tv as the reporter continues "he demands that each of the workers will be set free , his condition in doing so is only if they make him laugh, The Joker escaping yesterday has already alerted police of his intention of killing every one in the Gotham stock exchange on the grounds of them needing to take a Joke. Commisioner Gordon declined to speak of the matter". At the Gotham stock exchange a tiresom Joker marches up and down the corridor of the main hall and takes in the view of how many people are there huddled up afraid for their halirious life. He thinks to him self when he see's a young man crying for his life , but soon they wont have to worry about a thing , soon the constant strain of life will be taken out of them, soon they will be in fits of enjoyment till their death, this is justified for life is so long and a constant pest, in some ways he is setting them free , giving them the most enjoyment for the last laugh of their pittyful lifes. "Harley!!!" he screams to a girl dressed in a red and black jester suit. Who is finnishing of what seems to be a bomb "How long are you going to take pumpkin" shouts Joker. Harley turns to face him but not before fixing the connection circuits of the bomb "done mist'a J".Joker puts his hands in his pockets and reveals a gun from the right pocket. He points it at Harley's head. "Well so long Harley it's been fun and all, lots of laughs but i really dont like your mother so i guess this is good bye, his finger pulls down on the trigger of the small hand gun. Harley closes her eye's in fear "Im sorry mister J, i only wanted to help, please dont kill me" , Joker looks at her meanfully "Help women help, your as much help as that nimwit Gordon, no Harley sorry dont take it personally" He continues to pull on the trigger, harley can image and now start to see the chamber slightly move and the Joker's finger comes down on the trigger to reveal a bang flag come out of the gun. Joke start to go into fits of laughter and Harley starts to laugh with him "oh mist'a J i really thought you were going to shoot me, that was fun" she proclaimed while rolling on the floor with laughter. Joker turned to face her again and with a pause of laughter fired. Harley lay on the ground , the hostages stare in bleak horror , Joker here's whispering people questioning if he killed her or not. Joker then looks to Harley and makes his hand into a frame shape, to see if it is worthy of a photo. Now with his camara out he zooms into focus on harley's body and as he goes to snap his glorious art , he hears a whimper of laughter coming from the body of harleen quinzel, with this soon follows her getting up from her injured condition and looking into those ever so angry eyes of the camara. "ow, you really hurt me J" she shows the Joker her bullet wound which is situated on upper arm, "arn't you even going to kiss it better" Harley glares at Joker while making her sympathy speech, Joker feels a hugh sense of embarrasement. His head becomes full of paranoia , has he lost his touch? he thinks about how the old days he would have never been seen near a girl never mind kissing their arm, but something about her makes him reconsider , i mean who cares these people will be dead soon......real soon.

Harley J
08-05-2001, 10:52 PM
Oh gee this place sure has grown up compared to last time I saw it

Panther
08-06-2001, 12:30 PM
Ah, a new face! We always love to see feash talent here. Welcome!!

Now, the story. The critical side of me wishes to point out to you that the grammer errors are distracting to the overall story and putting in paragraph bracks between speakers and sceanes would be helpful.

On the flipside its an excellent idea. Its always good to remind fans the Batman universe is one of insanity (it somehow keps getting piulled into teh realms of campy - a whole other dorm of lunancy) neway - I liked how you handled the Joker - but are sure you want to write harly out so soon - or will time heal all wounds?

must go

later

Harley J
09-02-2001, 07:05 PM
It was just a concept idea kinda a rough sketch
Harley Quinn is the last person you would think of J killing
but at the same time he is more likely to kill her than any one else right.

This story is over as im going to work on a better thing