teen titan fic

[K-dog]

woah, i made a new thread, cool. well this is gonna be a teen titan fic i guess and if any of you have advice that would be nice cause this is my first ever teen titan fic:D

[decka]

Oh yay! You r doing a fic! My adivice would be to space out your chapters so they arn't all cluddered. And skip a space between the quotes. Umm add detail! I had a problem with that when I first started. Also make sure you have good spelling and grammer. These people get to upset when you don't. I can['t like of anything else right now. Good Luck on writing your fic! I am sure that you are going to do great!:anime:

[K-dog]

well thx for the advice decka and as for the fic..here goes nothing



it was late at the titans tower. Robin and Beastboy where watching T.V, Raven was in here room medatating, Cyborg was in the traning room, and Starfire was making dinner. Beastboy looked over the couch and notest that Starfire was cooking "dude, are you sure you should let Starfire cook?" Beastboy whisperd in Robins ear. Robin shrugged "well you might be right but give her a chance ok" Beastboy shrudderd when he rememberd the last time he gave Starfire a chance. There was a shout from the kitchin "glorious the food is done" Starfire had yelled. Robin started to get up when Beastboy pulled him down "dude, where are you doing?" he asked Robin. "im going to go eat" Robin said pointing to the kitchen. Raven and Cyborg where already there when Robin got to the table. "Yo" Cyborg said out loud "what is this?" he said pointing to the brown lump sitting on his plate "it is an old tamaranian favrite" Starfire said while she gobbled it down. then there was a flash of light and the next thing they knew the titans where in this dark room, then a deep voice echoed from the sky "welcome my friends" Beastboy was backed into a wall then he asked "where are we?" Cyborg shrugged "i dont know, but i dont like it eather...




how do you like it so far??

[TerraWHRobin4]

good! but follow decka's advice!

[Raven13]

Hey I like this story alot. Very detail and it is good for your first Fan Fic. (Or at least I think it is)

Well the only thing that I suggest is that when some one is talking try to make that it's own line. (Some people here started out with that problem to)
Also try to make paragrahs. It might have been short but you might have been able to make 2 paragraphs out of that.

Anyway I like it alot. Very detail and the plot is starting out well. Continue writting!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D :) :p

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[K-dog]

umm this might be a wearrd question but how far can i go when it comes to gore? im just wondering cause the past storys (witch were filled to the limit with gore) wernt so liked:( so im just wondering

[Raven13]

umm this might be a wearrd question but how far can i go when it comes to gore? im just wondering cause the past storys (witch were filled to the limit with gore) wernt so liked:( so im just wondering
Uhhhhh I dont know if they do have a limit, but personly I like it. Tough it depends how gorey it is, i do know that some peopel here hate it sooo much. Personly, I like.:)

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[T.T.Raven4]

There is no limit that I am aware of, but if you are going to make this very bloody, and very violent please make a headline in your first post that clearly states Rated R or what not. Just make sure it's a "Read at your own risk" experience.

Okay, Now the criticism.

I'll say spacing first cause it goes in with my next ordeal. When someone starts talking, skip a line. EX:


Beastboy looked over the couch and notest that Starfire was cooking

"dude, are you sure you should let Starfire cook?" Beastboy whisperd in Robins ear. Robin shrugged

"well you might be right but give her a chance ok"

Beastboy shrudderd when he rememberd the last time he gave Starfire a chance.

End of Example

At least that's how I do it.

Capitalization. Everything in Blue was stuff you missed (In that paragraph). Not too much, but a few here and theres.

Spelling, and grammar. Common mistakes. Use Microsoft Word or some kind of spell check. Word is bad at correcting grammar, so I understand that part no matter what.

Don't squeeze it all into one paragraph. Space it out.

That says it all there. Good start, but everyone makes those mistakes, almost everyone, regardless of how good they are today. This seems like it could be a very promising fic. I'll make sure I check back.

~TTR4~

[Crowgirl]

I'm going to build off of what TTR4 said. He is completely right with what he said. Here is my list of thingamabobs:

Capitalization. It's important because capitals tell us where a sentence starts, or if a name isn't just a wierd word.
Paragraphs. One huge paragraph is hard on the eyes, and the basic rules for paragraphs are a new one for every new speaker.
Grammar, like TTR4 said, it's a common mistake, but it's not hard to fix it. If you're not sure, check on a website or ask somebody.
Spelling, just make sure you use spell check on Word. If you don't use word and just type the chapters on the reply thing, use Word. It helps a lot.
Dialouge. I already told you about the new paragraph for a new speaker rule, but make sure your dialouge is not choppy and forced. Type it the way you speak normally, and add variety to the length of the sentences.
Introductions and speed. Jumping into action is not always the best way to start a fic. You should give a larger introduction, about the characters, even though we already know who they are. Also, slow things down a little bit.
Other than that, it was great. I love where this is going and the detail. This looks like it has a lot of potential.

Crowgirl

[Matt A]

Yep, all that's about my opinion too.

This is probably more direct than you'd like, but I feel that I need to give you a more obvious example of what we're all talking about. In other words, if you were to re-write that last chapter according to our advice, it would probably look something like this...

It was late at the Titans Tower. Robin and Beast Boy were watching TV, Raven was in her room meditating, Cyborg was in the training room, and Starfire was making dinner. Beast Boy looked over the couch and noticed that Starfire was cooking.

"Dude, are you sure you should let Starfire cook?" Beast Boy whispered in Robin's ear.

Robin shrugged. "Well...you might be right, but give her a chance, okay?"

Beast Boy shudderd, remembering the last time he gave Starfire a chance.

There was a shout from the kitchien. "Glorious! The food is done!" Starfire had yelled. Robin started to get up when Beast Boy pulled him down.

"Dude, where are you going?" he asked Robin.

"I'm going to go eat" Robin said, pointing to the kitchen. Raven and Cyborg where already there when Robin got to the table.

"Yo!" Cyborg said out loud. "What is this?" he said, pointing to the brown lump sitting on his plate.

"It is an old Tamaranian favourite." Starfire said while she gobbled it down.

Then there was a flash of light, and the next thing they knew the Titans where in this dark room.

A deep voice echoed from the sky. "Welcome my friends."

Beast Boy backed into a wall. "Where are we?" he asked.

Cyborg shrugged. "I don't know, but I don't like it either..."Notice the difference? Sure you do.

Anyway, enough with the negativity and treading on your toes. I'll end off by saying that if you follow our advice then this will easily be one of the best fics on the forum. And I'm not kidding.

PS: Like TT said, there's no real limit to what kind of gore you put on here, providing you warn us first. However, as I've learnt the hard way, swearing is remarkably objectionable...

[Crowgirl]

Sorry, I just thought of something.

You don't have a title, do ya?

[K-dog]

well thx for everything guys:D this chaptor wil not be gory ok. heres the 2nd chaptor













The titans looked around trying to find out where the voice was heard. Robin took a step forth "who are you" he said. no responce, Robin reapeted what he said but again there was no responce Raven sighed and looked down. Everyone was to busy looking around to hear Raven but surprisingly Cyborg did. He walked up to her and lifted her chin "whats the mater Rae?" he asked smiling.

Raven sighed "i seen this in a dream before but in this particular dream all of you went missing"

Beastboy got up from his corner and was thinking of how to say what he wanted to say without Raven tearing his head off "uhhh..Raven, in this dream of yours did you kill us?" everyone turned to look at him "what?" he said taking a step back

Starfire put her hand on Beastboys sholder "Raven will not do us such harm"-she then looked at raven worried-"would you?" Raven gave Starfire a look that said "your crazy". Starfire must have knew what Raven was thinking cause she changed the subject "where must we go to find the exit of such place?" she said looking around. Robin looked at her and shrugged "i dont know Star" suddenly there was a thick cloud of black smoke and everyone was coughing and choking. When the smoke cleard Robin was missing. "Where has Robin gone?" Starfire asked

Raven looked up worried "i dont know but he was the first one to dissapear"

Beastboy was back in his corner in a second

When Robin finnaly came to he was surrounded by a ton of slades robots "wh-where am i" he said "your in my obstical corse" said the same voice that welcomed them before "if you ever want to leave then you must first pass my tests" Robin looked around to try to find the person that was saying that "this is no test" robin said "this is crazy"

"no" the voice said "this is crazy" just than a light appeard in front of then showing the other titans in chains "if you ever want to see them again" the voice reapeted "then you wil half to pass my test". Robin pulled out his bo-staff and with an evil grin he said "whos first?".....







how was THAT chaptor???

[K-dog]

Sorry, I just thought of something.

You don't have a title, do ya?no.........i dont:D

[Raven13]

I like it alot. Good Job! THe only thing that I still see is that when people are talking try to have there words be there own sentence. (Example would be Welshie's Mate's examle or TTR4. Aanyway I like it alot!!!!!! Keep writting!:D

(O and you spelled chapter like this....chaptor)

Keep Writting, we need more soon!

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[starfire0639]

rey.............................-nods head back and forth-rey rey rey rey rey tsk tsk but you must remember the spaces and such and with the names capitalization on proper nouns member that k!sigh*such horrid writing from a newbie as for the gore and stuff oh ya and you should have fallowed deckas advie in the first place(sigh)as for the chapter in its own the only thing i want to ask is are the chapters going to get longer or stay at the short lenght that they are now? there real time savors cus as soon as you get into the chapter it ends which is also kinda like a cliffhanger but otherwise write more youll probably get better-if god gives help then maybe you have a chnace

[K-dog]

im sorry the chapters are so short, (hey i spelt chapters right yay) its just i have school and i practice the violin and i also have drum practice but somehow i make time for this lol but again sry for the short chaptors (ahh)

[Raven13]

im sorry the chapters are so short, (hey i spelt chapters right yay) its just i have school and i practice the violin and i also have drum practice but somehow i make time for this lol but again sry for the short chaptors (ahh)
WOW you have alot going on, actually I dont care how long the chapters are. I know some people like long ones and some short ones. Sometimes though they can get a bit to long. I say contiune writting though!!!!!!!!!!!!

Yea....chapters:anime:

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[Matt A]

Okay, that chapter was loads better! The assault course thing should be great fun...

[Crowgirl]

My thoughts exactly.

Can't wait for more!!

Crowgirl

[K-dog]

ok before i write the 3rd chaptor ima tell you right now that this chaptor might be extreme gore i dont know for a fact tho so this is a "read at your own risk" chapter ok

[K-dog]

well...here is what you’ve been waiting for.....the 3rd chapter







Robin jumped up and swung his staff at one of the robots but missed by a mile. Robin missing left a wide open shot for his rib and when he notest it he was too late one of the robots punched him in the side hard. He bared his teeth and let out a short cry. He immediatly dropped the staff and clung to his side "is that it?" said the voice Robin tried to get up but was punched in the gut forcing blood out of his mouth. He spit in one of the robots and kicked him into another knocking them down then as quickly as he could he picked up his staff but right when he looked back up a foot was in his face knocking him back a few feet causing a bloody nose

Robin hopped on his feet and was using his fists to fight them. robin maneged to destroy a robot and some of them backed away but that wasnt enough to make them all stop. One of the robots made a big gash on Robins cheek and that made him angry he tried once again to pick up his staff but was cut off by a robot robin quickly tripped it and picked it up by its feet and threw it into a group of them giving him a chance for Robin to get his bo-staff. Robin wiped away the blood off of his face but the gash made it worse the robots knew where the gash was so they kept on going for it at one point a robot got hold of his staff and rammed it into his stomach making him spit more blood. By this time the staff was coverd in red but Robin kept his best at fighting. A robot got hold of Robins arms and held hip up agenst the wall meanwhile the others punched and kicked him making blood go everywhere

Robin was exausted but kept on fighting. He got hold of an explosive from his utillity belt but it only made it worse. When he threw the explosive at a group of robots the impact of the bomb made him fly into the glass that his friends where in

"guys ill let you out" said robin nearly crying

"they wount obey you" said the voice, it sounded close by

"why not" said Robin leaning agest a wall to catch his breath

"because they are not really your friends, they are mire holograms" said the voice laughing

when robin tryed to touch one of what it looked like to be his friends Beastboy his arm just went through. he glared at the hologram and with anger and power he rammed his fist into the wall but to his surprise diddnt feel anything. He looked at his hand that was cut up and bleeding then through the corner of his eye he saw a door and with the rest of the energy he had ran to it but was cut off by another robot. This time robin diddnt care he jump kicked the robot but then he could hear a slight tearing noise from his foot when he reached the door he run inside it and slam it shut then looked down to where he heard the tear but what he found was his shoe covered with blood but then the voice was heard again

"welcome to your second obstical",.. Robin sighed

[Raven13]

Alright that was really COOL!!!!!!!!!! I thnk I have any idea who the voice is... but I wont say. Still a few grammer probles but htey can be fixed. Anyway I loved the action....... and the "second opstical" O NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:eek: I thought he was going to die in just the first 1

Great job!!!!!!

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[K-dog]

Alright that was really COOL!!!!!!!!!! I thnk I have any idea who the voice is... but I wont say. Still a few grammer probles but htey can be fixed. Anyway I loved the action....... and the "second opstical" O NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:eek: I thought he was going to die in just the first 1

Great job!!!!!!

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~im glad you liked it:D altho some people here dont like gore*cough*ashley*cough* others do:D, .and as for the voice please dont tell. well, you might be wrong about it but keep the opinion to yourself ok i dont want ppl runing the fun i love making ppl wait:D :evil:

[Matt A]

Shorter sentences is usually good for a fight scene, but apart from that one tiny problem that chapter was pretty cool. Having Robin get his butt kicked so easily was quite a nice idea, as was the whole hologram thing: both mean that our hero is going to be in for quite a tough time, which is a great way of ratcheting up the tension...

i love making ppl waitYou...sadist!:p

[T.T.Raven4]

Shorter sentences is usually good for a fight scene, but apart from that one tiny problem that chapter was pretty cool. Having Robin get his butt kicked so easily was quite a nice idea, as was the whole hologram thing: both mean that our hero is going to be in for quite a tough time, which is a great way of ratcheting up the tension...

You...sadist!:p
All so very true. Nothing else to say, but very good, very actiony (Is that a word? I seriously doubt it) very interesting.

[Crowgirl]

Shorter sentences is usually good for a fight scene, but apart from that one tiny problem that chapter was pretty cool. Having Robin get his butt kicked so easily was quite a nice idea, as was the whole hologram thing: both mean that our hero is going to be in for quite a tough time, which is a great way of ratcheting up the tension...

You...sadist!:p
He most of the time agrees with me, so this time I'll agree with him. Great! Just please make sure you don't have very long paragraphs, they make my eyes hurt (especially when they're in a small font).

CG

[K-dog]

He most of the time agrees with me, so this time I'll agree with him. Great! Just please make sure you don't have very long paragraphs, they make my eyes hurt (especially when they're in a small font).

CGsry bout the paragraphs being long:( but i need to tell you all something that got me upset, i had to write chapter2 three times lol the first time i was halfway done with the chapter (i have dial-up) and someone called, the second i wrote the chapter offline on microsoftr word and when i got done i ment to push "copy" but i pressed "paist" witch got me mad, and the 3rd time was a success. like they say, 3 is a charm. but not when it comes to baseball

[K-dog]

this chapter will not be as gory as the last..ohh and cowgirl i found out a name for this story it is now known as "bloodsport"



here it is...the fourth chapter







Robin looked around the second room where the next obstical was at. He was nearly blined from the savage attack that was laid on him in the other room, he wa still bleeding like mad. The room was empty and the door was about 100 feet away from him and there was nothing to stop him but he knew better than to walk to the door just like that

"its quiet" he said to himself "too quiet".

he heard his titan beeper go off and he answerd it

"DUDE WHERE ARE YOU?!?!?!?" it was Beastboy

Robin replied with a cracked voice "im in an obstical corse"

"dude you dont sound so good, are you ok?" said Beastboy

Cyborg broke in the conversation "of course hes ok hes Robin" Cyborg said slapping Beastboy

"what was that for?" Beastboy said taking Cyborgs arm off and slapping him back

there was a slapping fewd between them. Raven sighed and slapped both boys upside the head then Beastboy made the mistake of attempting to slap Raven

Ravens eyes turned black "if you touch me you will not live to see the age of 17" she said with a snarl

Beastboy shrunk with terror and ran behind Starfire who was busy looking around. Beastboy, the jokester who sometimes took his jokes too far playfully slapped Starfire, Guessing that Robin heard the slap he said with a beat up voice

"if i see a scrach on Starfires face you will not life to saee the age of 16"

Again Beastboy eeped but this time he hid behind Cyborg and thought "why does everyone hate me?"

"Robin" someone said on the tellocomunacator, it was Raven "dont go to the door its a trap, there will be fire, spikes, and giant rolling pins so be carefull but there is a way to get past it easy you just need to take the......" only static was heard

"Raven? Raven do you hear me?" Robin said nearly shaking from fear. Robin put the titan communacator in his belt and looked around, in a dark corner Robin saw a little movement. He took out his bo-staff and limped to where he saw the body. The foot that was torn on robins leg was nearly broken and his face was still coverd in blood and the falling rocks diddnt makes his cuts and bruses any better, when they fell they stung him like crazy.

Robin was shocked to see that the limp body that was coverd in blood was Speedy.

"Speedy can you hear me?" robin said giving the limp body a soft shake

"ughhhhh" Speedys eyes were shut but he replied with a quivering voice "Robin?"

Robin picked Speedy up not knowing that he asked his name and put him over his sholder and ran on. As Raven predected there were spikes comming out of the wall and fire lit the ground. The only thing that Robin had in mind was escaping with Speedy and himself. he jumped over the flaming floor nearly burning his feet. the smell of burning flesh filled the air as Robin tried to put his shoe that was on fire out. He did but after the fire it only got worse. the giant rolling pins were going in a line that Robin had to cross. He took a deep sigh and started running but halfway there he heard a SNAP and fell dropping Speedy beside him. he looked at his broken foot that was coverd in ash when it caugh on fire. A giant rolling pin was about to run them over but then Robin heard a high pitched whisle then an explosion. he turned to find a blown up rolling pin and Speedy holding his bow and arrow, Speedy smiled and turned to look at Robin.

"you almosed got ran over there" Speedy said grinning he tried to get up but nearly fell on Robin

"thanks Speedy" Robin said also grinning

"diddnt i tell you you wernt cut out for this kind of work" Speedy said getting up

He was holding his side where there was a big bloch of blood. he then took a banbage to wrap himself up then he put a bandage on Robins foot

"oww" said Robin trying to turn away

"aww come on Robin dont be such a baby" he said grabbing Robins foot and putting the bandage on him

"im not a baby. shut up" Robin said bearing his teeth cause the pain hurt so much

Speedy picked Robin and placed him over his sholder the way robin had done to him and they ran to the other side of the door and Speedy put Robin down

"hows your leg Robin?" Speedy asked with concern

"i...i dont know" said Robin looking down at his foot

"who cares we need to get out of here" said Speedy pulling Robin to his feet "if we bump into trouble we can handle it together" said Speedy grinning

they ran on to where the next room was but what they saw were little floating bits of land with fire below them

"dont fall" said the deep voice..

[Raven13]

I loved this chapter alot!!!!!!!! O I knew that those darn communicater's were no good!:D *Throwa communicater down on ground then smashes with a hammer*:p Anyway I liked sence with Speedy and Robin, very cool. Ok I knoow you don't want to hear this but, GRAMMER!!!!!! Well it was better than the first time but I have picked up on the "I love grammer thing". (only in my storys)
Anyway I saw alot of sentances that started with a lower case and when people talk, you have to capitize the first letter. Anyway great job i loved ur story!!!!:D :anime: :)

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[Matt A]

This is getting to be pretty cool. The slapping "joke" was a work of genius.

I'm guessing that you've got a gladiatorial competition going on here...

[K-dog]

This is getting to be pretty cool. The slapping "joke" was a work of genius.

I'm guessing that you've got a gladiatorial competition going on here...nice guess, belive it or not your right mate lol someone finnaly fugured it out:D i give you credet mate:) good job lol, oh and a note to all i will be going to be gone for this weekend but dont forget about me. ill try to fit one last chapter in before i go ok

[K-dog]

i love to write alot of storys and stuff (as you know:D) and this is a question i ask alot
what was your favrite part of the story so far
and what diddnt you like about it?

[Matt A]

My Favourite Part: Robin's first bout, it really made you think that he could actually get capped...

What I Don't Like: The chapters are too short!

[K-dog]

well.. after 2 days of not writing (sorry) ill contunue it, so heres what you all have been waiting for, the 5th chapter, oh and nice sigg, ash lol















Looking down at the fire Robin shrudderd thinking what would happen to him if he fell. Speedy looked at Robin and laughed

"Dont tell me your scared" said Speedy laughing

"No i just dont want to fall" said Robin with a crack in his voice

Speedy laughed "never let a baby do a mans job

Robin galred at him "Shut up" he said pushing him into one of the floating islands

Speedy hopped from land piece to land piece

"Come on Robin" said Speedy already halfway there

".......Robin....can you hear me?....." Robins communacator rang. it was Raven

".......Robin its a trap some of the islands are rigged to fall but the easy path..."-static-"...........from there on its safe" Robin sighed then he called out to Speedy

"SPEEDY SOME OF THE ISLANDS ARE RIGGED TO FALL BE CAREFULL!!!!!"

Robin looked around for Speedy but couldnt find him

"hmm maybe he ran to the other room" thought Robin

he hopped on a land piece and almosed tripped. He hopped onto another land piece and as Raven predected, was rigged. he fell and hit his head on a rock but grabbed it holding it as tight as he could.

"Speedy!!" he yelled as loud as he could "where are you?"

there was no answer and his grip on the rock was slipping. he thought to himself

" so this is it, this is how it all ends. there goes my life"

he closed his eyes and expected the end to come but then he thought about one thing, Starfire. and witht he thought breaking into his mind he grew angry. He tried his best to climb on the rock but then at that moment he fell. He reached in his utillity belt and pulled out his grappeling hook and shot it at the furthest rock he could near the door to the next room and with sucsess he got to the next rock near the door but again the rock was rigged and it blew the rock to ashes but lucky for Robin he was near the cliff where the door stood so he took out his bo-staff and stabbed the wall with it and it stuck in he held on for his life than with his luck his communacator rang and he picked it up and threw it in the fire

"things worthless anyway" he said under his breath.

He got hold of two birdmarangs and he stuck the first one in the wall. The blade of the birdmarang cut deep in his skin. then he stuck in the other birdmarang in the wall and that one also cutting him deep. he diddnt care tho. he kept on climbing. the thought of Starfire gave him the strenth and will to climb. after about two minutes of climbing and cutting himself he made it to the top then he looked at his hands. They were torn open to the point where you could see the bone. Robin gaged and gripped his fists together. then a thought broke into his mind.

"why diddnt Speedy fall? why did he make it out safe?" he wondered to himself

"Dude come on" said Speedy comming out of the shadows. "it took you long enough" said Speedy pulling Robin into the next door. In this room there was a little cat. Robin laughed as he walked closer to the little kitten. Robin picked the cat up and he looked into his eyes, they were black with the look of evil. Robin dropped the cat and stepped next to speedy then pulled out his bo-staff, and Speedy pulled out his bow and arrow, they looked at eatchother and smiles then



Speedy said "the dynamic duo again isnt it Robin"

Robin smiled and nodded and together they rushed tored the cat..

[Raven13]

HAHA I loved this chapter alot. You just keep thinking up some of the coolest opsticla corses for these 2! O gosh a cat, I can't wait to see this!!:D

~ Wonderful Job ~

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[K-dog]

HAHA I loved this chapter alot. You just keep thinking up some of the coolest opsticla corses for these 2! O gosh a cat, I can't wait to see this!!:D

~ Wonderful Job ~

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~its not easy thinking of obstical corses when you get sidetracked easy, *plays with hair* i thought ppl wouldnt like the obsticals but you like them and all so yeah and to make things better ima try to make the 6th chapter today ..ahh i got writers block

[Matt A]

Ha, evil dropping-rock-island puzzle! It rules!

I wonder what's up with the cat...:)

[Starrysky]

Pretty good story so far. :D Longer chapters and a tad bit more description would be nice. Anyways, I look forward to the next chapter! :anime:

[K-dog]

Robin swung at the cat with his bo-staff but the cat jumped out of the way then Speedy tried to shoot it but the cat jumped over it.

the cat let out a short chuckle then at that point Robin and Speedy knew the cat wasnt a cat, but something else

"dude?" Speedy asked Robin while attacking the cat "what is this? this isnt a cat but what is it?" Speedy said while he got scrached in the face making him bleed a little

Robin did nothing but shrugged, his gash on his cheek had swollen up and caused Robin to become mute

"Robin talk dude" said Speedy while shooting arrows at the cat

Robin only pointed to his mouth and coughed

"dude Robin help me out and stop pointing at your mouth" said Speedy trying to get the cat off of him

Robin swung the cat off of Speedy but when he looked at the staff the end of it was blue, Robin tilted his head and tried to tell Speedy

"hmmhmmhmmphmm" mumbled Robin as the cat ran tored him with razor sharp claws

Speedy couldnt help but laugh "dude in english" Speedy said while shooting the cat with a heat seeking arrow but it only shot straight at the wall blowing it into pieces.

Robin looked at speedy and sighed and as soon as he turned to look at the cat one of its claws had gone deep in his cheek where it got swollen. Robin grasped his cheek falling to the floor. blood was spewing out like crazy and when Robin diddnt move Speedy thought he was dead. He ran up to Robin dodging the cats razor-like claws. He shrunk to Robins side and help his head up.

"Robin. can you hear me? get up bro we need to fight this cat thing" Speedy said

the cat jumped at Speedy but Speedy was mad. he turned and swung at the cats stomach as hard as he could making it fly into a wall, then with quick reflecses he took out his bow and arrow and shot the wall before the cat could even touch it making the cat fly to Speedy. then Speedy swiftly gave the cat a roundhouse kick.

the cat got up coughing and choking. The cat then coughed up a bloody furball and just as he coughed it up Robin manneged to get up but the first thing he saw was the bloody furball in his face

The cat wiped the blood from his mouth and crackeled then he spoke with a light voice

"you think this is the end? well guess again" said the cat

The cat ran to the door but before he entered it he bekoned Robin and Speedy to follow then he ran in the next room

Speedy tried his best to get Robin to his feet but Robin fell from his wound

"dude Robin this isnt funny any more, get up" said speedy

and when Robin diddnt get up he said "ill be in the next room. Ill get you when im done with the cat"



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"DUDE WHERE ARE WE CYBORG?!?!?!?" yelled Beastboy out loud

"we are inside what apeared to be my dream i had a couple nights ago" said Raven

"and where has my beloved Robipoo gone?" asked Starfire with worry in her voice

Cyborg and Beastboy looked at eachother and grinned so wide tthat you could see there dimples "ROBIPOO" they said at the same time and houled with laughter

Even Raven had to grin. The titans had never heard Starfire call Robin "Robipoo"

"so i see our friends are worried" said the deep voice that has been talking to them

"yo man i dont know where you are or who you are but when i see you im going to kick your butt" said Cyborg

"well my friend, there will be many butts to kick soon just enter the next room" the deep voice said

Beastboy was the first in the room he looked around but before the other titans could get in there the door slammed shut and in the room it was only Beastboy by himself

he grabbed his communacator and contacted Raven "uhhh Raven? whats gonna happen to me?"

"You will be surrounded by alot of slades robots and will be..........." like before the transmission of the signal was lost then at that point alot of slades robots fell from the black sky then Beastboy looked around scared to death





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Robin woke up from his daze he looked around and saw that there was blood on him and cuts on his arm and a knife in his hand

"what happend?" Robin asked himself getting up. at that point Robin realised someone cut him and made his arms weak then he stepped in the next room and saw Speedy on the floor half dead with blood covering his body.

"Speedy can you hear me?" he nugged Speedy "Speedy get up"

at that point the ground started shaking. and Robin looked around and thought

"theres only one person i know who has earth powers" he said taking out his bo-staff with his arms still hurting.....









was that good??:p

[K-dog]

i just hope there arnt huge bloody furballs in the next chapter *haha i wrote the bloody furball part just for you ash hehehe

[Matt A]

Right...

Anyway, that chapter was cool. So, it's about to be Beast Boy vs. Robot Army and Robin vs. Terra: can't wait!:D !

[K-dog]

like the last chapter this chapter will be skipping around diffrent charicters points of views but this will have much more of it..........and ashley, i know i fluffed but not this much.....lama?

[K-dog]

sry guys there isnt gonna be a 7th chapter untill tommarow night ok, if i can ill finish quick but im still writing and ive been writing for 2 and a half hours im going to sleep goodnight

[starfire0639]

ha sorry to tick you off!not! hate you...............:mad:

[Raven13]

haha Starfire#### (forget the numbers and cityofdarkness haha i love to see u guys fight on here it is soo funny. Anyway I loved this chapter!!!!!!!! YEa opstical corses are hard to make up. (trust me i had to do a few) haha keep writting i love this story!!!!:D

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[K-dog]

i have no idea how many times i have been called "cityofdarkness" its "cityofdarkages" "AGES" NOT "NESS" lol sry i get picky but as for the chapter idk why but i only wrote so much and only got to half the chapter so ill give you what i have

[K-dog]

the other chapters had some action but this chapter (i asure you) will be long and have more action than the other chapters(maybe not put together idk...hopefully) so heres what you all been waiting for is the 7TH CHAPTER (ive been saying that alot havnt I? oh well hehe........read on

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Comming out of the shadows was a little blond girl with her long hair covering half her face and only at the age of 15, her name was Terra

"how did you get turned back to human again?" Robin said holding the staff in one hand and his badly hurt arm in the other


"wouldnt you like to know" she sneered crossing her arms

Robin glared at her "as a matter of fact yes i do want to know" he said with his voice rising

"you will soon enough" she said and with that she hurled a huge bolder at him



Robin moved fast bit the bolder caught him on the side of his leg. He smiled getting up as if the rock diddnt hit him

"Is that all you got Terra?" Robin asked chuckling

He then ran up to her swinging at her face and cliped her nose. She turned her body so her back was to Robin. she wiped the blood off her face and turned around fast enough to swwing at his face. He caught her arm and bent it around her body and slammed her agenst a wall.

"give up Terra you cant win" Robin said struggeling to keep her pinned to the wall

she just smiled and sent a rock crashing down on his head knocking him out cold. She knelled down to check if he was dead but at that point Speedy came running up behind her and jump kicked her to the floor then he helped Robin up

"you ok bro?" Speedy asked Robin

"yeah im ok" Robin replied holding his head that was swelled

Terra looked at Speedy and Robin and said

"two agenst one aint fair. so ill make it even" she whisled and the cat that attacked Speedy and Robin came and jumped into Terras arms

"good kitty" she said laughing at Speedy and Robin. She knew that they couldnt beat her. Let alone the cat itself

"dude! what do we do?" asked Speedy

Robin smiled and said "just follow my lead"

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Bestboy was all alone in the room with Slades robots he tried his best to fight them all off with his gorilla form. He punched one of the robots but little did he know that it was filled with a vaccine to elemanate the power that he had.

"dude! why aint i an animal?" Beastboy asked knowing that the voice would reply

"you just hit a robot that had some stuff that took all your powers away" the deep voice said

Beastboy did his first ever sigh. Knowing that he was useless without his power. He balled up his fists and glared at the robots then said

"come get some"

and with that Beastboy ran into a group of robots punching the living daylights out of them but also cutting his hands. Beastboy mainly relied on his power to help him out but he was stuck with only a few weapons. His hands, and his feet he jump kicked one of the robots but fell on his back not used to doing stuff like Robin.

H jumped up but the robots had him down in a second they were punching and kicking him. he was never used to this kind of pain and by the beating he was getting never will be. he maneged to get up but he was smarting and aching like crazy

He ran to a corner and hid behind a rock. Beastboy had never been this scared in his life

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"Yo Beastboy! you ok in there?" yelled Cyborg while banging on the door

there was no reply. Then Starfire said

"i do belive our green friend is ok" she said with her happy-go-lucky voice that never changed

Everyone looked at her then Raven said

"in my dream Beastboy doesnt come out of that room" she said

It was Ravens turn to be looked at

"Where does he go?" asked Cyborg

Raven only shrugged "I never found out"

Raven looked up and sighed but just at that point Robin, Speedy and Terra came crashing down on the other titans. Raven, Cyborg and starfire watched in horror as they saw Terra continuesly punching Robin in his face and Speedy shooting arrows at the cat. but then Speedy pushed Terra into Starfire who was watching but then Terra turned around and nailed Starfire across the face hitting her hard on the nose making it bleed.

There was complete scilence. Nobody talked but everyone looked at Terra who was blushing blood red from being nervous. Even the cat stopped,. Speedy looked at Terra and then turned to Robin who was getting up from his beating. Speedy ran to Starfire and asked her

"are you alright?"

Starfire was holding her nose but her top was smotherd in blood. she looked at speedy with big sad watery eyes. She looked like she was about to cry.

Robin turned to look at the other titans wondering why it was so quiet. then he saw Starfire. her top was now red, not blue. Her face was sad, not happy. He walked up to her and put his arm around her and asked

"who did this to you?" said Robin in a tone of voice that he had never used before, Raven notest this too for she was giving him a weard look. Starfire pointed to Terra who was running away then Robin grew so angry that his face was red. Speedy ran in front of Robin trying to calm him down but Robin tried to push past him with everything he had then eventually he did. He bolted to where Terra was heading the only thing he had on his mind was

"im gonna get her back for what she did to Starfire, she will pay"

he took a left, then a right, then another left then soon after he realised that he was lost. But just then he heard some light footsteps so he ran to where the footsteps were but they came to a doorway and Robin heard two people talking, one had a deep voice the other had a light voice

"i think Robins gonna kill me" said the light voice. Robin knew it was Terra, it had to be since she was the one that he was after

"dont worry we will have Robins head, this is an easy task that even i can achive" said the deep voice "he will half to come, since you lured the green titan into our trap now we can threaten him untill he surrenders to us"

Robin heard laughter after that then more footsteps then with no hesatation Robin broke in the door but to his surprise it was empty exept for one robot, Robin had no trouble. he threw an exploseve at it then it fell. Thinking it was dead he pounded on the walls thinking that one of them might be a secret passage

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Beastboy finally came to his sences after being knocked out by one of the robots. He looked around and tried to morph himself into a rat so he could slip out of the chanes but then he rememberd his powers were bounded. he struggeled to get out but couldnt. he was strapped tight to a wall but then saw a pair of keys sitting on the table. He smiled and tried to reach for them but he couldnt. He knew Terra would be comming soon to tourture him. He took a deep breath and streched his body to were the keys were. Him doing this made his body cramp. He bared his teeth and streched once more and with luck he got hold of the keys with his teeth. He tried to unlock his arms but he droped the key. By this time Beastboy was fusterated but then Terra came in slamming and locking the door behind her. She picked up the keys and freed Beastboy. He looked at her with confusion and asked

"Terra why did you free me?" Beastboy asked

Terra sighed and replied "i know i wanted to get you guys back but this is too much" she said panting "they want to kill you and the rest of the Titans" she said wide eyed in shock "i dont want you to get hurt, not this much"

Beastboy glared at her not knowing what to belive but just then Terra got hold of his head and gave him a long kiss on the lips. Beastboy stood there wide eyed while Terra, Slades ex-apprentice was kissing him. He had nothing to do but to kiss back. after a minute of kissing Terra started crying and she pointed to a back door

"Beastboy go you cant be here no more" she said

Beastboy tried to cheer her up and trying to put an arm around her then he startedto say something but Terra pushed him to the floor

"I SAID GO!!!" she screamed

Beastboy got up "Terra come with me i dont even know my way around here, i dont even know how we got here"

Terra gave him a map and tossed him outside the room

Beastboy tried to open the door once again but then he heard Terra say

"why did i let him go? now boods gonna kill me"

Beastboy knew what she was talking about. Right then he went in the door but Terra was nowhere to be found.

"Terra" yelled Beastboy "Where are you?"

he looked once more to see if Terra was around but she wasnt he turned back around to leave but he bumped into Robin

"dude! i cant find Terra" said Beastboy getting ready to cry

Robin looked at him and then to the floor "i know" he said in a deep voice "brother bloods got her. I heard him say if he cant get the titans to push up the daisies he will make Terra"

Beastboy looked at Robin in horror "no" he said grabbing Robin by his shirt collar "YOUR LYING, DONT LIE ABOUT THIS KIND OF STUFF!!!!" Beastboy screamed. He knew what Robin was saying was true, he just diddnt want to belive it. Beastboy let go of Robins shirt and sunk to his knees

"its my fault, i should have stayed in there with her" he said

"its not your fault Beastboy" Robin said trying to cheer him up "its my fault for chasing her if i wouldnt have chased her she would have still might be fighting us" Robin said helping Beastboy to his feet "dont worry we will get Brother Blood for his wrong doing" Beastboy and Robin walked to where the map pointed to the exit but Beastboy and Robin realised that the map only pointed to the exit and not to where Brother Blood was hiding or to where the other titans were

"dude where do we go to find the other titans?" asked Beastboy

Robin shrugged "i dont know Beastboy" he said

then they came to two seprate tunnels. Robin and beastboy looked at eachother

"witch way" they both said at the same time

"i think its that way" they said at the same time again and pointed to seprate tunnels

"well" said Robin "you go that way"-he pointed to the left tunnel-"and ill go this way"

they both agreed and walked into the tunnels but then before they enterd the tunnels they were surrounded by Slades robots

"dont thise guys know when to quit?" sighed Robin but then Beastboy looked at Robin

"dude! if thise are Slades robots what is Brother Blood doing with them?"

before Robin could answer he was attacked by a robot. He swung with his staff destroying it and Beastboy still diddnt have his powers

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"ROBIN, BEASTBOY WHERE ARE YOU?!?!?!?!?" called Cyborg

"you moron they cant hear us, my titan communacater says there two miles away from us" said Raven

Cyborg shrugged and pucked up his titan communacator and called Beastboy but there was no answer. Then he tried to call Robin.. It picked up

"Yo Robin where are you?" yelled Cyborg into the communacator

"uhh yeah im Robin" replied the voice on the other side

Cyborg gave his comunacator a weard look "Yo Robin are you ok? it doesnt sould like you man"

"uhhhh i got to go but before i go can you tell me where you guys are at please?"

"i dont know were in like a place where theres big pokey things that look like the hurt if you fell on one of them"

"oh uhh see you soon then"

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........ill make a part2 to this chapter i dont think the page can hold this much ok but yeah ill continue this chaper later

[Matt A]

Yep, that was cool. I don't know all that much about either Terra or Brother Blood, so this should be pretty interesting for me. But who has the communicator? A good question indeed...:)

[starfire0639]

haha Starfire#### (forget the numbers and cityofdarkness haha i love to see u guys fight on here it is soo funny.

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~first of al its 0639! dont forget it!

[Starrysky]

Nice. :cool: I've never seen an episode with Brother Blood in it so this should be interesting... anyways, this story is very good so far, and you update very quickly. :D

[K-dog]

as you know i have mady things i must do before i can write but this time my cousins from madera came over and i need to spend time with them so im sorry if the 2nd part of the 7th chapter takes long to come

like i said, i love making people wait heeheehee:evil:
but not this long

[K-dog]

well..here is the second part of the 7th chapter enjoy.....oh and mate to help you find out more about terra watch the episodes "Terra", "Titan Uprising" ,"Betrayel" ,"Aftershock pt.1", "Aftershock pt.2" there you will have the info about Terra. and nor i have that much info about Brother Blood but the episode to see him is on "Wavelenth" (i think thats how you spell it) oh sry got distracted again, Back to the story





After about an hour of waiting for Robin the titans went on a serch of there own but then came across a dead cat, Raven looked at it and gaged, Cyborg ran behind a rock and barfed.

Starfire picked the dead cat up and said

"This looks very familiar does it not?" she said examining it

Raven picked the cat up with her powers and hauled it to a tall cliff.

"Starfire, you shouldnt touch that thing. You dont know where its been" said Raven

Starfire shrugged and the titans walked on. Cyborg started humming and Raven looked at him

"can you stop thats getting very annoying" she said

"dude i cant its boring not doing nothing"

"well, go bug Speedy not me"

Cyborg shrugged then ran to Speedy but Speedy was awear of what Cyborg was planning to do cause he said

"dount but me or else you will have no arms"

Cyborg thought to himself "why are me and Beastboy the hated ones?"

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"ROBIN HELP ME!!!!!!" yelled Beastboy while he was being trampeld on

Robin jumped on one of the robots then smashed his staff into its head then jumped to help Beastboy. Robin stabbed his staff into one of the robots making it explode then a robot was about to attack Robin from behind him but beastboy ran and punched the robot forcing Beastboy cutting his hand.

Beastboy griped his hand tight in a fist and punched another one of the robots. RObin backed away from a robot after it pulled out a butcher knife but backing away making him notice Beastboy was not himself. he was more madder than he had ever seen him in awhile he was beating the robot even after it was destroyed

"Beastboy what are you doing" he asked Beastboy after he saw him strangeling a robot

Beastboy looked at him and glared. He put down the robot to walk to Robin with his hands still gripped into fists. A robot was comming from behind Beastboy but as soon as it got to him Beastboy swung around and punched it hard across the face making its head fly off, lucky for them it was the last robot there. Beastboy contunues his way to where Robin was standing. When he got there Beastboy grabbed his shirt collar

"im this way because Brother Blood took Terra" he said glaring into Robins eyes "if i ever see Blood he will die" Beastboy let go of his collar and walked on. Robin gave Beastboy a weard face then followed him. A few times Robin asked Beastboy where he thought Terra was or why he still wanted to be with Terra after she betraied them but he only replied with "I dont know"



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"gahh let go of me" screamed Terra while she was being help up agenst a wall by her neck

"you little brat! you let our only hope of destroying the teen titans go WHY?!?" Brother Blood yelled as he threw her down on the floor

Terra was on her hands and knees trying to get up when she said "cause i love him" she said nearly crying

Blood looked at her like she was out of her mind

"you fool, you hated him before, now you love him?" he said kicking her in the gut while she was down.



There was a tiny spot of blood where Brother Blood had kicked her. Terra was crying, it was a mistake to do in front of Brother Blood. He walked up to her giving her an evil grin. She was agenst a wall then she fell to her knees.

"Blood, please stop your hurting me" Terra said holding her stomach

Brother Blood looked bored "naw Terra its supposed to tickle" he said while jump kicking her across the face making bloodshed appear on the wall.

Terras eyes glew green then she glared at Brother Blood

"I...SAID...STOP!!!" she said as she lifted huge bolders and threw them at Blood but he wasnt amused, he simply jumped over them with no hesatation

he looked at what appeared to be his watch

"are you done yet?" he asked

Scared, Terra ran to the exit and into the maze of tunnels. Brother Blood thought to himself

"ill give her half an hour to run, then ill kill her" then there was a wild laughter

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Walking around made Beastboy bored. He was no longer angry but worried. He still diddnt know what he was doing there, how he got there and why Terra was involved. He diddnt want her to be involved he diddnt want anyone to be invoved this made him more worried and Robin notest this because he kept telling Beastboy that ‘everything will be ok’.

Just at that point Terra ran into Robin who was leaning on him so she could catch her breath

"TERRA" Beastboy said in a loud and cheerful voice then hugged her

she pushed him back and said "Robin i need your help"

"for what?" Robin asked her crossing his arms

"Brother Bloods gonna kill me thats why!"

Robin stopped and thunk "should i help her or not?" .........









im sorry the 2nd half of the chapter was so short i truly am:sad:

[Raven13]

OOOOOO I like it alot!!!!!! Very cool!!!! Again I love the fight secenes and all the action!!!! There is really not alot to say but......

~ WONDERFUL ~
:) :anime: :D ;) :p :) :anime: :D ;) :p :) :anime: :D ;) :p :) :anime: :D ;) :p :) :anime: :D ;) :p
(that should explain all my happiness about this chapter)

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[Crowgirl]

mate to help you find out more about terra watch the episodes "Terra", "Titan Uprising" ,"Betrayel" ,"Aftershock pt.1", "Aftershock pt.2" there you will have the info about Terra. and nor i have that much info about Brother Blood but the episode to see him is on "Wavelength"
Actually, you don't need to watch them to know about the characters. If you go to the World's Finest Homepage (I think I've told you about this before) and click on the Teen Titans logo, you are able to get bios on everyone who's been in the show, episode reviews, media clips, and if you go back to the page and click on downloads, you can get Teen Titans avatars perfect for here. That page helped me find this forum, and helped me join.

That was a great chapter. I can tell this is gonna be a total mind-masher, and it is. Brother Blood is one of my favorite villians in the entire series (And he's gonna get his butt kicked tonight!!! Go BumbleBee!!!!!). I cannot wait for more!!

[K-dog]

hmm i never knew that CG thx for telling me it *glares at ashley* well anyway the next capter might not come tonight or tommarow night and since its the weekend ima work extra hard for the next chapter i know the 2nd half wasnt all that good but this chapter will be a "must read" type of chapter there will be action around every corner....no there really will be action around every corner, if you dont belive me you will just wait to find the truth and if its not good you can throw eggs at me:D

[Crowgirl]

hmm i never knew that CG thx for telling me it
No problem. That website is great, it deserves to be shared....

[Matt A]

More Terra and Brother Blood stuff! Yay! This villain's set to be a real nasty piece of work...:D

Actually, you don't need to watch them to know about the characters. If you go to the World's Finest Homepage (I think I've told you about this before) and click on the Teen Titans logo, you are able to get bios on everyone who's been in the show, episode reviews, media clips, and if you go back to the page and click on downloads, you can get Teen Titans avatars perfect for here. That page helped me find this forum, and helped me join.Done that months ago. It's just that I don't have any of the channels that show Teen Titans, so I've only seen one episode and that was one that Welshie downloaded from somewhere. It didn't have either Terra or Brother Blood in it, just so's you know.

[Crowgirl]

Oh.....

:sweat:

[starfire0639]

hmm i never knew that CG thx for telling me it *glares at ashley* the truth and if its not good you can throw eggs at me:Dgah1hwta did i do!nothing thats what i did nothing evil to you so stop staring i know im beautiful........................um.ya dont know where that came from oh and i have even better stuff to throw at you eggs are no good there to easy to wash out of hair as for your chapter its awsome...........stop glaring at me!.............-hides-

[K-dog]

i know its been 3 days since i havnt wrote anything im sorry for that and the other thing im sorry for is that you will have to wait more cause i went to my cousins house and i forgot my password to login:( i know i know, you guys have been waiting but i swear this time it will be done by tommarow night,.,.,.,.,.

ive heard alot about welshie, i read his fics and there awsome and i know this is my first fic i ever wrote but i think im confident enough to challenge welshie to a teen titan fic-off but meanwhile ill wright the 8th chapter....sry again

[Matt A]

Warning: challenging Welshie to a write-off would be suicide. Even I don't have the guts to try it!

[K-dog]

Warning: challenging Welshie to a write-off would be suicide. Even I don't have the guts to try it!hmm.....your right. the story "vanishing act" did get me hooked on and it was his first story made ill give that to him, yeah i know its suicide but theres always a first time for everything right?
guts dont have anything to do with challenging people, they might have a little bit of things to do with it but its mainly about the skill and you cant say im wrong, people have challenged me to many things and i won most of them but they were mainly psysical stuff. never write offs. the past storys (witch i told you in the past that they were filled with gore) wernt really what i put my work into. i was just bored when i wrote them but this is one of those storys that i put my real work into, maybe not all but most and if i ever get the chance to challenge welshie to a write-off i would be honerd and that would be really neat cause i never challenged anyone to a write-off before

[Matt A]

A you vs. Welshie contest would be fun to watch.

What's a write-off, anyway?

[K-dog]

hmm..good question. a write-off is when two people (me and welshie in this case) write a story and there are judges to judge the storys and whoever story gets more votes wins....:D......*cough*

i need someone to ask welshie to make a new thread or if he even wants to challenge me or what-not.....gahh..you might be thinking "well why doesnt he ask welshie" the reson is that i get cold feet and i rarly challenge people...

[Matt A]

In that case, I shall deliver your challenge to him. And I'm not kidding.

[Lord Welshi]

You wish to challenge me to a write-off, huh? Well then, I accept. Name your terms, and i shall meet you on the field of honour at dawn! Well, whatever, but yeah, this ought to be fun.

Lord Welshi, preparing for battle

[K-dog]

hello welshie nice to meet you,
the terms will be this, each of us will write a short story and post it on a thread that i will be making ok if you want to make any changes you must reply within 24 hours but i will be making the tread today and i will give you the address of it ok.

http://forums.toonzone.net/showthread.php?p=1590763#post1590763

may the best writer win

[Raven13]

hmm..good question. a write-off is when two people (me and welshie in this case) write a story and there are judges to judge the storys and whoever story gets more votes wins....:D......*cough*
Hey Can I be a judge???

~ ~ Raven13 ~ ~

[K-dog]

of corse you can be a judge but there cant be so much

[Kregor8]

Ok, I've read through chapter 6 and a little bit of chapter 7.
You still have grammar and capitalization to work on. You must do that. Since you've challenge L. Welshi, you must put everything into it. Everything. 'Cause if I'm judging, and I am, mistakes like that are going to be major. Plot is good. I love plot, and a story without plot is no good. You have good plot. But plot without grammar is rot. So, don't slack off.
Also, I don't mind blood. I laughed about the bloody hairball.
My advice. Stop kissing your girlfriend and read Strunk and White's Elements of Style. That book will turn you around. Believe me. It's small...about 100 pages, and only the first 30 are really importaint. So buy it or borrow it and read it. That's my advice, and I offer it to anyone who will listen.
7<regor

[K-dog]

just for making you wait, there will be four parts to this chapter so read and enjoy and prepare for action:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

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"Robin please you’ve got to help me" said Terra. Tears swelled up in her eyes

"why should I help you after you and the cat tried to kill me and Speedy?"

Terra sunk to her knees "Brother Blood made us try and kill you, you have got to believe me"

Beastboy was giving Terra the akward eye cause she asked Robin for help not him, hes the one who tried to save her, hes the one who loves her, hes the one who kissed her. He turned around and started to walk away but he bumped into a robot, when he looked up he saw alot of them

"uhhhh......Robin"

Robin turned to look at what Beastboy wanted "what is it Beastboy"

Beastboy pointed to the robots and Robin took out his bo-staff but just then Terra took hold of it

"Terra what are you doing" asked Robin

Terra looked at the robots and gave then a cold stare then she said to Robin without taking her eyes off the robots "this fight is mine" she said

Robin knew she was trying to help but he diddnt forget what she had done to Starfire

Robin shook his head "no its not Terra its mine"

Robin took hold of the bo-staff but Terra had a good grip on it so they fought over the staff

Beastboy sighed and took a step tored the robots "well.." said Beastboy "I guess its up to me"

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Starfire walked next to Speedy. He kept checking her nose cause it was still kind of bleeding

"I do wish of this redness to stop" said Starfire. Her tone of voice changed, she was no longer the happy-go-lucky Tamaran that she was. That punch on her nose changed her into something different. she was angry inside. she would get Terra for her wrongdoing. that what she told Raven

"aww c’mon" said Speedy "its just a punch, nothing serious"

Starfire shot a cold hard glare at Speedy almost making him step back "I am not of the happiness no longer" she told him with green eyes





Speedy took a step back. He never expected Starfire to say something like that. He always thought of her as the ‘never get angry’ type. What Robin did not know though is that Speedy always liked Starfire and like Robin he hated to see her get angry, so Speedy walked next to Starfire

"theres no need to get upset Star"

When he tried to put an arm around her she blasted him with a starbolt

"do not try the hit with me" she said with a hand out in front of her

Everyone looked at Starfire and backed away. she looked at them back and walked on. Cyborg walked up to Speedy and whispered in his ear

"you got told" said Cyborg then laughed

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Beastboy was taking on the robots by himself. When Terra and Robin asked him if he needed help he always shook his head. Robin knew he was trying to impress Terra but he diddnt want Beastboy to get hurt in the process and Terra still held his bo-staff so im a split second Robin pulled the staff from Terras grip and ran in to help Beastboy with the robots. Robin jumped in the way of a robot taking a hit that Beastboy was supposed to get.

"Robin" said Beastboy running to help Robin up "are you ok"

Robin was back up in a second wiping the dust off his sholders then he looked at Beastboy and laughed. Beastboy guessed that he diddnt get hurt since he was running and beating the robots down bad. Terra felt lonely cause she too was helping Robin and Beastboy with the robots. She lifted a rock and hurled it tored a group of them but one of the robots got hold of her hair and threw her into a wall. Rocks from the celling were falling on her and making her hurt. some of them had sharp edges that cut into her skin and stayed there. She tried to pull the rocks out but it made her hurt and one of them had her pinned down to the ground.

when Beastboy noticed this he was being trampled on by 4 robots

"Terra.....-"



Beastboy diddnt get a chance to finish what he was gonna say. One of the robots had got him in a sleeper hold and Robin was to busy fighting his own battle to see Beastboy..the next thing that Beastboy knew is he got put to sleep.

Robin took out his birdmarange to slice one of the robots but it caught the birdmarange and pulled its hardest making the blade cut deep in Robins skin and in the same spot where it had cut him before.

Robin yelled loud in spite of the pain. He looked to where Terra was and she was in a concussion. Then he looked to where Beastboy was but he was asleep. then Robin felt someone tap him on the sholder. the coldness of the hand that tapped him made him turn around. what he thought was Brother Blood was not really him but before he had a clear view of the full mask he passed out

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it passed ten minutes since Robin, Terra and Beastboy went missing and Cyborg was still laughing at Speedy for getting yelled at by Starfire

Raven turned and looked at Cyborg with a face that made him shrudder "if you dont shut up ill make you shut up" she said with black energy surrounding her body. At that point Cyborg make no noise besides the sound of his breathing. Raven chuckled then walked on.

Starfire, who was busy minding her own bisness turned to Speedy

"i am sorry for doing harm to you" she said with a voice that almosed mached her normal voice but was off by a little.

Speedy looked at her like it was nothing "its ok Star" he said in cheerful voice

"Are you sure it is ok?" she asked Speedy looking at him

Speedy nodded and walked on

The other titans were aware of what Speedy was trying to pull and they got a little bit angry.

"Im starting not to like that guy" said Cyborg.

"Neather am i" said Raven

The titans knew that Robin had more than heart for Starfire and Speedy was attempting to take it away. and Starfire knew this two.......















this 1st out of 4 parts was weak i know but the others will be good

[Matt A]

Unexpected? Yes. Dramatic? Yes. Bu weak? Most certainly not!

Like Kregor said, your grammar and spelling still need work, but for the time being I'm willing to let that slide.

If the other three (!) parts are going to be better than this, then life should get very interesting indeed...

:D

[Crowgirl]

I have to agree with everything Welshie's Mate just said. Strong, unexcepted, brilliant all together. Just remember to use spell check on word, and if you could make the font a little bigger, that'd be swell.

BumbleBee strikes tonight! Huzzah! :anime:

[K-dog]

since i challenged weshie the chapters will not be comming in early and sry for making you wait along time for this part






cityofdarkages
A.K.A coda(gawd i love that name i can say it again and again and again i can think of an assasin with the codename coda "this is coda reporting for duty" soo frikin shweet oh sry got off subject)

[starfire0639]

ok one-kregor that is so not right man!he barely kisses me anyway
2-good luck my darling i do only hope that your fingers arnt bleeding and can still think straight by the end of all of this
ok guess thats all
peace love ya!
edit-you are so not my darling...why the hell did i write that!?and love you....eww

[K-dog]

ok one-kregor that is so not right man!he barely kisses me anyway
2-good luck my darling i do only hope that your fingers arnt bleeding and can still think straight by the end of all of this
ok guess thats all
peace love ya!who said im the one kissing her? *wink*

[starfire0639]

who said im the one kissing her? *wink*................what the hell is that supposed to mean!

[K-dog]

you know im kidding ash

[K-dog]

after a week of not writing (it could have been more..i lost count) heres the 2 part to the 8th chapter







Robin woke up in a daze not knowing where he was. He looking around the area of where he was strapped. at this point Robin knew that it wasnt Brother Blood working on his own but he still diddnt know who was behind this besides Brother Blood. He tried to move but he saw his feet chained to the wall but his arms were free to go as they please. The place he was in was a small cave with not much of room

"Cramped are we?" said a voice comming out from the shadows of the right corner

"Who......who are you" said Robin. He knew the voice that he was hearing diddnt come close to sounding like Brother Blood for this voice was much deeper in tone and sounded more like Ravens voice

"that does not matter Robin but what does matter is if you can trust Speedy or not" said the deep voice

Robin took a deep breath "why do i half to worry about Speedy? hes never done nothing wrong to me, me and Speedy are friends"

"So are Starfire and Speedy"

"Wha....what do you mean?"

"You will learn soon enough but back to bisness"

"Busness?"

"Yes bisness. what are the other titans doing here?"

Robin smiled revealing blood on his upper lip "thats something you should be able to answer"

"Dont smart mouth with me Robin"

Robin smirked "why not? no good comebacks?"

"ENOUGH" yelled the voice nearly shaking the tower. Some rocks fell on Robins head where he had been hit earlyer.

The voice reapeted itself "What are the other titans doing here?"

Robin shook his head trying to get some of the tiny rocks out of his head "i...i dont know, your the one who sent them all here"

"no we diddnt Robin. we only sent for you, the other titans are obsolete they must become out of the picture for good"

"no" said Robin trying to get out of the chains "you wount hurt my friends. When i get out im going to kill you whoever you are"

"thats if you can find me" said the voice. Then there was an opening of a door then it slammed shut

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Terra woke up from her concussion to see that she was liying on an operation table with Brother Blood filling a needle with a substance she did not know about

"what is that" asked Terra in a quivering breath

Brother Blood turned to look at her then glared at her "if the trator wants to become a titan again she can become a stone again"

"no...NO I CANT GO THROUGH THAT AGAIN" Terra started squrming to get free she picked razor sharp rocks to cut the leather that held her to the table. She cut the rope and got loose. She tried to run to the door but Blood out ran her and grabbed her by the shoulders. He gave his hand that held Terras arm pressure making it go numb. He pulled the cap off the needle but Terra moved her free arm and stabbed the needle into Brother Bloods lower gum she then pushed the blue substance inside his body making it go through his veins

"you little brat" he yelled slapping her knocking her down on the ground "look what you did"

Terra knocked her free hand loose and ran out the door.

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Beastboy awoke from his long nap. He rubbed his head with his hand making sure he diddnt have any rocks in his head he then looked around to see where he was. What he saw amazed him he jumped up im amusement and licked his lips seeing a truckload of tofu fifty feet from where he was standing.

"TOFU" he screamed in exitment then ran to where the tofu was. Suddenly a wall slammed shut in front of him blocking off the tofu and making a slight cut on the tip of his nose

"im sorry Beastboy but you cannot get your hands on the food unless you make a deal with me. Also if you meet my demands you will leave here with the tofu, your powers back and in one piece"

Beastboy looked around to where the voice was deing heard then he thought to himself

"where is this voice keep on comming from?"

He looked up and what he saw was a monitor with a big picture of Slade on it

"No way am i making a deal with you" said beastboy crossing his arms and looking for a way out

"your mistake Beastboy" said Slade "you only have ten minutes to decide weather you live with your power and food or you parish"

The monitor then shut off. The way Slade warned him sent tingles down Beastboys back. He shrudderd thinking of what Slade might do to him. he tried to morph into a rat so he could dig into the gravle and escape but he failed. He diddnt want to work for Slade after what he did to Terra but then again it was Terra who was falling for Robin not him and this made him angry. he thought hard for an escape root but he thought again that if he did escape he would have to pass Brother Blood and that was a hard task seeing as Blood could see and hear everything and if he got caught by Blood he would hate to see what he would do to him.

Beastboy finnaly made his plot. He would pretend to work for slade and when he had the chance he would run but he thought over the concequesces over and over but he decided to do it anyway

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Starfires nose got better and her cloths were there usal color again but Speedy kept checking her over and over. Cyborg kept keeping an eye on Speedy thinking on weather they should ditch him or not. Speedy was a good friend but he was attempting to backstab Robin after what Robin did for him. Raven kept on glaring at Speedy and Speedy kept on looking at Starfire and Starfire kept glancing at Speedy wondering why he always looked at her. Finnaly Starfire turned to Speedy

"why must you keep looking at me? have i done harm in some mannor that i did not know about" she asked wwith concern

Speedy stood there dumbstruck not knowing what to say

"uhhh well..i just want to make sure that your still ok" he said trying his best to keep a straight face

Raven smirked "tell the truth Speedy. We all know you like starfire as much as Robin does so just admit it so we can get on with our lives" she said turning back around bumping into Cyborg

"harsh" said Cyborg

Starfire was wide eyed. She diddnt know that Speedy liked her and speedy was blushing blood red from the embarisment

"is what Raven saying the truth" asked Starfire

Speedy studdered a bit but he fillany got what he was trying to say out of his mouth

"yes Starfire i like you, i liked you from when i first saw you"

Cyborg and Raven looked at each other like they were off there rocker. They were guessing that Speedy was trying to make starfire forget about Robin cause he forgot to mention that Robin introduced him to Starfire

"you must have of the love to me correct?" she asked him

Speedy nodded

"well i am truly sorry but i do not have the same feeling for you" and with that she walked off

Speedy felt really stupid at that point. Cyborg and Raven were grinning, proud of what starfire said but Speedy wasnt amused in any way. he stormed off after that and after he was out of sight she jumped up and down in exitment happy of what she said.............















i know this part diddnt have action but ill put alot soon

[Matt A]

Don't worry about that. Dialogue and emotion scenes are still cool, as that chapter also was.:D

Can Speedy be trusted? What is going to happen to Brother Blood? Is Slade really the co-organiser of this contest? Why did they only want Robin? Will Beast Boy's highly dodgy plan succeed? I'm sure we'll find out the answers soon enough...

...that's a hint, by the way.:p

[K-dog]

i know i asked this but i want all of your oppinions.,.,.,.what can and what cant i wrote fics about? do they half to stay in the DC comics area? can i write a MGS fic or not?

[K-dog]

mates right, action isnt always exicting and thats one of the many flaws in my story but ill try to put more of everything in the story ok:D so here it is the 3rd part to the 8th chapter







Cyborg walked up to Starfire and patted her on the back

"good job Star"

Raven also grinned with joy, she smiled at Starfire "good going Star"

Starfire was happy yet sad, she diddnt know that would get Speedy mad enough for him to walk off like he did, she sighed and ran to where Speedy was headed. She caught to his side

"i am sorry if i caused you harm i truly am"

Cyborg and Raven watched from a distance

"hmph" said Speedy crossing his arms

Raven and Cyborg looked at eachother "Speedy has no right to get angry" Raven whisperd to Cyborg "if anything Starfire should be the one getting mad"


Cyborg nodded "but you know how Starfire is" said Cyborg to Raven "she always has to be happy with everyone the majority of times, you know she doesnt get mad often" said Cyborg

Raven had to agree.

"oh please Speedy, do not get upset i was just trying to tell you i have the heart for.." she looked down and rubbed her upper arm

"well?" said Speedy

"i must go" said starfire walking away

Cyborg looked at Raven and they got behind the rock they were hiding behind

"what is she doing?" asked Cyborg "if i were her i woulda knocked the living daylights outta him

Starfire came around the coner where Raven and Cyborg were, Cyborg gave her the aqkward eye

"why must you stare at me with such hatred?" asked Starfire

Cyborg laughed "im not looking at you weard cause i hate you, im looking at you weard cause i was thinking of what Speedys face would look like if you belted him"

Raven sighed "are you just going to let Speedy walk out on you after what he just did?"

Starfire tilted her head "what wrongdoing did he cause?"

Raven shook her head "its nothing Star. Forget i said anything"

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"Beastboy?" said Slade "Did you make up your mind?"

Beastboy nodded paying no attention to Slade but to the year supply of tofu that lay before him

"Good" said slade grinning "now vow to me that you will be loyal and obay every command that you are orderd"

Again Beastboy nodded without looking at Slade

Slade pushed a button opening the wall to where the tofu lay

"YAAY" yelled Beastboy in exitment, he ran and dove into the tofu but just as soon as he was about to land in the stuff Slade pushed another button making his beloved tofu dissapear also making him crash into the wall

"So pathetic" started Slade "do you really think i would spend countless hours watching a fool eat tofu? follow me apprentice"

Just then a door flew open with Slade standing right behind it

"follow me apprentice" he said walking into a room

Beastboy shurgged and followed but he diddnt get to close. Where slade led him was into a room where there was a type of suit that was simmaler to the one that Robin wore when he was his apprentice but this one was black at the bottom with silver around the knee caps and a silver top with black sleves and the letter "S" in the same spot where it had the "S" when Robin wore his.





im going to take a pause right here cause i need a little break from life right now

[Matt A]

Damn you! Why leave us with such a cliffhanger?! Why?!:crying: :mad: :evil: :sweat:

[Pookey]

damn cliffy...I love this fic. I've been wanting to read someting new and I got it! WOOT! way to go...

[starfire0639]

stop faking and tell them the truth

[Matt A]

I already heard on his other thread, but I'll just say it again. I, along with everuone else, wishes him - and you - the very best of luck. We all hope that everything turns out okay in the end.

[Crowgirl]

Ditto. :crying:

[Pookey]

GET BETTER SOON REY!! Your in my prayers!!

[K-dog]

sry about the cliffhanger, i was upset about something,.,. well anyway back to the story





When Beastly put on the outfit he looked at himself in a mirror then he grinned

"Dude! this is so cool" he said with delight

Slade sighed "You must change your attitude and voice before we proceed any further"

Beastboy looked at him

‘what do you mean?"

"I mean you need to rid of the childish voice and become one with your new look"

Beastboy looked at his suit and remembered how Terra couldnt get his off

"Do not freight apprentice for this is not the same as Terras outfit but different im many ways"

The way Slade said that made Beastboy shrudder. He diddnt want to think what kind of this were in this suit but the look and feel of the suit made him think different

"come apprentice, I will teach you of how the suit works, you see the suit is tracked over by a nurlnet processor that is activated by satellite waves that control your every move when you are in the heed of danger"

Beastboy raised an eyebrow "so uhh how does this suit work?"

Again Slade sighed "i will explain the the next room"

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Terra ran in complete curcles. she was lost and diddnt know what to do but when she leaned on a big rock to catch her breath she fell through a secret passage she looked through the dark hallway that was only lit by very dim lights. She thought of walking into the hall but was scared. Terra then looked behind her and heard the deep footsteps of Brother Blood closing in on her. She had no choice so she ran into the hallway and for about one minute saw pitch black but when she took a few more steps she saw a very dim light that made her porceed more into the tunnel. Finding the end she ran into a room.

"Where am I?" she asked herself looking around.

"Whose there?" a voice was heard in the room next to the one Terra was in

"Terra" she replied slowly walking into the next room

"Terra!? help me gey out of here, its me Robin" he called

Terra turned the corner and saw the restrained Robin chained to a wall

"get the key Terra its right there on the table" said Robin looking at the key

Terra slowly walked over to where the key was sitting. She picked it up and looked at it, then at Robin. Terra then put the key in her pocket then started to walk out of the room

"Terra! what are you doing? is this some kind of sick joke?" said Robin as he shook violently to get free

"im sorry" said Terra leaving the room

[Matt A]

Unexpected? Yes.

Weird? Yes.

Good? Most definitely!:D :D :D :D :D

[K-dog]

umm...i made some spelling errors diddnt I? stupid microsoft word doesnt help, damn, sry it was so short but more can and will come soon



P.S is mate the only one reading this fic?

[Pookey]

cityofdarkages
umm...i made some spelling errors diddnt I? stupid microsoft word doesnt help, damn, sry it was so short but more can and will come soon



P.S is mate the only one reading this fic?

Yeah, but who doesnt't? I know i always have spelling errors after i post, but never before....*sweatdrop*

Oh and Rey....*smakes head* you know what that was for...

[TerraWHRobin4]

*smacks you in the head too* just cause we don't get to reply doesn't mean that we aren't reading it!

[Matt A]

P.S is mate the only one reading this fic?
From the looks of it, no. I simply make it a habit to comment on every chapter of every story that I read. Hence why it seems like I get about so much.;)


Ta,
Matt A

PS[To Erin]: Another user of my satirical sig! Woohoo!:D :D :D :D :D

[K-dog]

im just happy that mate diddnt smack me...*glares at pookey and erin* grrr i will so get you back for this, you will see....but anyway, i have a very important question to all


remember when i challenged L. welshie? remmeber how i said i had the fic ready and all of that? do you think i should post it on this thread then continue going back on my story? its up to you guys.....and girls ..idk..


P.S. i will get pookey and erin back on this

cityofdarkages
A.K.A CODA

[Matt A]

Personally, I say go ahead post your new story, but do it on a new thread. It'll make it seem more like its own thing that way.

Ta,
Matt A

[K-dog]

your right but its more of a 1 post story, its not long at all, ...its about the size of my longest chapter on here,

[Matt A]

And your point is what?:p

[K-dog]

damn, cant argue, but if i get in trouble for posting a VERY short story ITS YOUR FAULT

[Matt A]

damn, cant argue, but if i get in trouble for posting a VERY short story ITS YOUR FAULTOkay, I accept full responsibility...

[crosses fingers behind back]

...now.

;)

[Pookey]

what would be wrong w/ a short fic? Looka t all the one-shots...whats so bad about a really short fic...*shrugs shoulders*

*smirks* sure Rey, your gonna get me *rolls eyes* I would so love to see that

[K-dog]

the fic is done pookey:D and as for mate *hugs him* THANK YOU SOOOO MUCH FOR CHOOSING A BETTER TITLE:D:D:D:D i am forever in your debt.

No More is made:D


P.S *fwaps pookey and erin* you know what that was for *fwaps erin again* and that




cityofdarkages
A.K.A CODA

[Pookey]

....wait, this is over? but...I know No More is over, but this one??? I AM SO CONFUSED!!! *hits head on desk*

*sees Rey hug W.M.* umm..ill be over here *steps away*

*kicks Rey* You deserve it, now stop *glares* Dont make me phyco on you

[rrarbecy]

the fic is done pookey:D and as for mate *hugs him* THANK YOU SOOOO MUCH FOR CHOOSING A BETTER TITLE:D:D:D:D i am forever in your debt.

No More is made:D


P.S *fwaps pookey and erin* you know what that was for *fwaps erin again* and that




cityofdarkages
A.K.A CODA
Why don't you pick on somebody your own size and isn't angry at... Oh wait, scratch that. I am too. I wonder if you ever virtually hit guys. Mr. Bully.

[K-dog]

nope rrarbecy, i dont hit guys. *takes out shotgun* i shoot em'
I am completely brain dead on this fic so if i take along time to post dont yell at me *puppy face*

again i would like to thanks W.M:D *fwaps pookey* you know what that was for *fwaps pookey again* thats for thinking the wrong idea when i give higs *fwaps pookey again* that was for not beliving i could do the fic(i think it was you that said something like that) *fwaps pookey again* and that was for fun:D


cityofdarkages
A.K.A CODA


P.S lots of people are reading my fic YAY, *cough* well, back to this story, i need a posative answer, do you know what is going on in the story? i dont want you guys to be left behind. so lemme know if you guys need backtracking help

[Pookey]

Oh God..hes brought out the gun *sighs and roll eyes* Now hes gonna have WAY too much fun....jk

*confused* Why am I getting hit? You deserve it, not me....*glares* You knew i was kidding!....*smakes Reys head* I said you COULD write!!....*stares ahead* what a day....*smakes back of your head* Just for fun :p

your stuck..hmmm*sits and thinks* I got nothing..BUT leaving us w/ cliffhangers isn't good you know that...just warning you before the excitment takes over...what am i saying?! I think im just gonna sit over here *walks and sits on a rock* And wait till you post before my big mouth gets me in trouble...

[rrarbecy]

A gun? That's only dangerous if you can aim.:rolleyes: I, however...*fires M9 at Coda, hitting him in the shoulder* That's for Pookey.

[K-dog]

i diddnt leave youy with a cliffy i finished the chapter that left a huge cliffhanger so you cant get mad at me *looks at shoulder with big hole in i* thats my good arm too *takes out mauser and shoots rrarbecy in the groin* haha *looks at pookey on the rock then takes out a switch poushing the button making the rock explode* hahaha *cough* well anyway, sry if i am leaving cliffys cept that i dont know when to finish the chapter. i usaly finish it before something big is about to happen. or when i wrote too much(that is a cliffhanger isnt it???) but ya the chap will come or my name isnt forrest gump :sweat:

[rrarbecy]

AND THAT'S MY GOOD-... ... ... YOU KNOW!!! that's not cool... And how did you rig the rock to explode? THAT'S JUST CRAZY!!!!!! I'll get you for this! after I have a good whimper...

[Matt A]

Um, you can guys stop with the psychoness please? You're scaring the children.:p

[K-dog]

*cough*hypocrite*cough* *pokes pookeys dead body* yay, now she cant get mad if a call her........FAT AHHAHAHAHHA, lol but N E wayz ....wait...nvm that all iwanted to do.....





cityofdarkages
A.K.A CODA


P.S, this is so spamming but we have nothing else to do ...FAT, er...i mean.....ttyl

[Pookey]

*has deranged smile on face* be nice, be nice, be nice....*grabs daggers* ...be nice, be nice....*resists urge to kill Rey* be nice, be nice, be nice *tries REALLY hard to not kill Rey* be nice, be nice......

*turns to rrarbecy and hands him ice* Should i kill him now, or wait for him to not notice?

So this isn't total spamming, I'm gonna ask you to work on your fic, PLEASE!!!!

[starfire0639]

STOP FREAKN THREATENING AND SHOOTING PEOPKLE I DONT APROVE OF IT HERE OR IN REAL LIFE SO STOP THREATENING MY BUDS!GOD FOR GOD DAM......-UGH-anyway good job with the fic keep writing cliffys are bad very very bad!just ask pooky she should know-smile-as for you-walks over to pooky-are you ok i see that rey hit you alot-glares at rey-and becy you ok dude?-kisses your boo boos and smiles-hehehe i hope the boo boos are in viewable areas-hahahahhaha so ok write more and perhaps ill read it.............ha i made myself laugh

[K-dog]

ash??????? *stars for 2 minutes then drops guns* im sorry...BUT HE STARTED IT *points to becy*
glad to see your still posting on my threads hehe. good to have you back




cityofdarkages
A.K.A CODA

P.S yes i am well known as coda now and theres nothing you can do to stop me BWAHAHAHAHA

[rrarbecy]

Way to be a man, dude. Passing the blame on thome was REALLY mature of you.

[K-dog]

your right. ive been living like a kid for way to long, ash it was my fault, it was all me. i take the blame for everything. and im sorry, if i knew you diddnt like guns in the first place i wouldnt have put that. im sorry. and sorry for blaming you rrarbecy, i acted like a real jerk and i admit i will in the future but i promise i will not act like a jerk on here. so can all of you forgive me? *looks at rrarbecy* im sorry *looks at ash* im also sorry *looks at pookeys dead
body* ........er....um....sorry? ...but yeah, im sorry for everything guys and gals.



cityofdarkages
A.K.A CODA

[rrarbecy]

... Now that WAS manly. I forgive you.

[starfire0639]

your right. ive been living like a kid for way to long, ash it was my fault, it was all me. i take the blame for everything. and im sorry, if i knew you diddnt like guns in the first place i wouldnt have put that. im sorry. and sorry for blaming you rrarbecy, i acted like a real jerk and i admit i will in the future but i promise i will not act like a jerk on here. so can all of you forgive me? *looks at rrarbecy* im sorry *looks at ash* im also sorry *looks at pookeys dead
body* ........er....um....sorry? ...but yeah, im sorry for everything guys and gals.



cityofdarkages
A.K.A CODAjust cus of soemthing that happened in my personel life wont stop me from critiscing your fic!the thing that happened just fuels my ever energetic need to be hurtful and mean...in other words you just wont know if ya get the nice ash or the mean one and nooone likes the mean one-smiles with halo over head-but okokok i forgive ya bout the guns dont you ever do that again you understand me or believe me when i say nice ash will leave the building and she wont return for a long long time but other than that im ok with your apoligy...for now:evil:

[rrarbecy]

*inches away slowly* erm...hehehe...I'm not sure if that was the mean Ash, but I know it was the SCARY Ash.

[K-dog]

im sure that was the nice ash. the mean one would have acted more mean than that....i should knowhehehe *sweatdrop* well anyway. the chapter should come shortly

[Pookey]

Okay, warm fuzzies all around...

[K-dog]

the one you love is hard to loose
but between trusting and loving witch would you choose
i was dumb and i choose wrong
and now the one i love is forever gone
all i have is memories but that is all they are
i took things strong and took them to far
what i did was wrong and that i say is true
when we saw eachother our friendship grew
it lasted for a period of days and weeks
i remember your smile, and rosy red cheeks
but all that to us is only a blur
sry to keep you waiting so here is the next chapter

[K-dog]

Cyborg, Starfire and Raven walked on in the endless hallways of the cave.

"Where are they?" asked Cyborg

"you moron" sighed Raven "you asked that for the past ten minutes"

Cyborg shrugged "im just worried about them thats all"

Starfire turned to look at Cyborg "do you not think that we are all worried?"

Cyborg nodded "i know that you and Raven are worried too but i just want to meet up with everyone again and wheres Speedy?"

Raven glared remembering what Speedy tried to pull. Raven cared too much for Robin and Starfires relationship to let anyone interfear with it. she knew she had no feeling for Robin but she did not want to see him hurt if Speedys plan did work.

Cyborg took out his titan communicator and called Robin

"Yo Robin, where are you man?" yelled Cyborg in the communicator near Ravens ear

Raven grouled at Cyborg making him step away from her.

"Robin is not in right now" said a voice comming from the communicator.

"Terra! wheres Robin?" asked Cyborg gripping his communator tighter

"lets just say i saved his life" she replied and shut of the signal

Cyborg threw his communicator on the ground

Raven looked at him. "whats your problom" she asked

"Its Terra, she has Robin"

"i do belive that she said she saved his life?" said Starfire

Cyborg walked in front of Starfire "do you really think Terra is helping Robin?" he asked glaring at her "we need to get Robin back"

Starfire only looked and nodded

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Beastboy walked out of the room where Slade had taught him how the sute worked. He was brainwashed from remembering that he was a member of the teen titans. He looked around in the cave trying to find the other titans but he couldnt. He then heard a low moan come from the other room.

"whos there?" snarled Beastboy walking closer to the voice

"Beastboy?" it was Robin "Hey Beastboy get me outta here" Beastboy walked in the room Robin was at. Robins hands were bleeding due to him trying to get loose by scraping the chains agenst eachother. Beastboy looked at Robin

"Why should i help you?" asked Beastboy. Robin looked at him horrified

"Beastboy? is that really you? what happened?". asked Robin

"something, why do you ask?"

"Beastboy snap out of it, its me Robin"

"i dont care who you are" Beastboy walked away throwing some dirt at Robin.

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Terra walked to the other caves hoping to find someone

"BEASTBOY!? STARFIRE!? ANYONE?" she yelled hoping to hear a reply but all she got was an echo of her voice bouncing off the walls. She thought it was hopless untill she turned around to find Beastboy.

"Beastboy" she said grinning and running to hug him but he pushed her off.

"what do you think your doing?" asked Beastboy. Terra looked at him strangly "dont think i still dont remember when i tried to hug you" said Beastboy

"look" said Terra walking closer to him "i was dumb ok, i wasnt thinking"

"you never think Terra" Beastboy was starting to sound like Slade "thats the problome with you"

"Beastboy?" she waved her hands in front of him "whoohoo its me Terra remember?"

Beastboy pushed her away "i know its you Terra i just dont want to remember"

[Pookey]

:eek: <--my expression after reading the ch

that was a beautiful poem, did you write that? it was very good!

[RavenofAzerath~]

yes yes yes, very nice words, and very nice poems, and very nice story, BUT U NEED TO WRITE BIGGER I CANT EVEN GET IN HALF OF THIS STUFF!!! Still, K eep writing.....:evil:

[Matt A]

Well, that was an interesting development...but where will you go from here?

That's a hint, by the way...;)

Ta,
Matt A

[K-dog]

this story is old and some of you might not want to read it anymore but for those of you that do i've decided to continue it, read on






Terra sobbed a bit "im so sorry Beastboy, please"

Beastboy glared at Terra "you think i would give you a chance after what you did to me?"

Terra looked down knowing BEastboy was right. she has treated him pretty bad and she had no excuse for it.

"Beastboy. please forgive me, i said i was sorry" said Terra hoping for forgiveness

Beastboy just looked and sneered and says "yeah, im trying to get with my friends leader by useing you. please forgive me" said Beasboy mimicing Terra. Terra pushed Beastboy

"you dont have to be a jerk about it" said Terra. Beastboy pushed Terra back.

"Im the jerk?" replied Beastboy. The new sute was changing the way he acted. he was more of slades apprentice "stupid child" said Beastboy looking down. Beastboy turned wide eyed. He couldnt belive that he just said that.

"Terra" said BEastboy "its not me thats being mean to you, its the sute"

Terra crossed her arms and threw her hair back "you think im going to help you after you said ‘no’ to my forgiveness?"

Beastboy blushed knowing how stupid he was acting "yes" he replied

"Guess again" said Terra walking away. Beastboy ran to her.

"Terra, what can i do to make this up to you?" he asked

"hrrm" thought Terra "NOTHING" she said walking away

Beastboy stood there wide eyed. Terra never backed down for Beastboy but now she did? Beastboy knew that it was his fault in the first place. He should have never yelled at her. It was Slades sute that was doing this to him and he wanted it off. Beastboy ran back to the room where he walked out of. He diddnt see Slade anywhere so he looked around a bit then he went to the other room where his so called ‘tofu’ was. he diddnt see him in there either but just as soon as he was going to walk out of the room the door slammed nearly choping off his foot but Beastboy pulled it back in time.

"Woah!?" exclamed Beastboy. He looked around to see what caused the door to slam and then as soon as he looked up there was the hologram of slade looking back at him.

"and you say Terra is the stupid child" said Slade grinning looking down at him from the top window

[Crowgirl]

I am reading this, just so you know.

And it is good! *Stands up and applauds*

[Matt A]

[applauds too]

This fic is back in style!:anime: :anime: :anime:

Ta,
Matt A

[Pookey]

woho! right on!! and you put a cliffy.....ya.....great ch!!