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Allen CARR
12-03-2004, 08:07 AM
To catch a Thief

Gotham Knights



heres my story part one, please read and reply.


Prologue

Its Christmas in Gotham city and Red-X has come to town. With a new source of Power, Red-X has plans for a big heist at Wayne Enterprises. He is also seeking to test his skills against the Batman as well. In will turn out to be a night, Red-x soon won’t forget.



chapter 1-Breaking and entering



It’s a mid December Night in Gotham, a huge Christmas tree sits in the middle of Gotham central Park. It looks more like a prop then a tree; weary gothamites jog and walk past the unlit Tree. High above the tree and streets, a strange figure leaps from rooftop to rooftop. Moving with near ease, the figures movements are precise. The figure stops atop a dirty roof, Red X is the figure. He looks up upon, a slightly taller Wayne Enterprises building.

Red-X-"So this is the Wayne Enterprises building, i like." he confidelty states.

X then leaps off the roof, to the lower area of the building. he sneaks passed the outisde security. Mins later, he is inside the buidling, he reaches a security net, cameras triped alarms the works. He leaps over the alarms, with the ease of a gymnast. Doing spins and back flips in the air, he lands near motion sensors. he opens up his hands, and releases a strange gas, that clouds the sensors detectors. He then leaps over them, to the next area. he reaches a dark room, with a huge microchip surrounded by light.http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/masks/12.jpg


X-"Finally, the power chip." He steers at the glowing chip. "With this, no more recharges for the suit." he begins to carefully remove the chip.


As he does, an alarm goes, and huge machines enter the area. Red-X peprepares to quickly grab the chip, but a black Batrang hits his hand. It sends the chip to the ground, and Red-X snaps around ready to fight!
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/masks/25.jpg

He sees the Batman standing there.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/thebatman/episodes/06catbat/09.jpg

Batman-"Let me guess, you got lost." he says a creepy tone.

Allen CARR
12-03-2004, 08:52 AM
so people honest opinons on my first part are gladly welcomed.

rrarbecy
12-03-2004, 01:33 PM
ooooohhhh. Tasty.

Crowgirl
12-03-2004, 03:51 PM
Rrarbecy, define 'tasty'.

But it seems good! Yet again I love your use of pictures, just don't base the story on whatever pics you can find.

rrarbecy
12-03-2004, 04:41 PM
Rrarbecy, define 'tasty'.

But it seems good! Yet again I love your use of pictures, just don't base the story on whatever pics you can find.
tasty means...AWESOME! I just didn't feel like writing awesome.

raven54
12-03-2004, 06:13 PM
are you SURE you weren't chewing on it or something? JK:p

I, too, love the way you use pictures. Excellent idea, a Batman v.s. Red X fic. Red X is my favorite villain (not counting Slade)... though i like Jinx too. He actually had substance, which is a little rare for a TT villain. post more!

rrarbecy
12-03-2004, 06:15 PM
are you SURE you weren't chewing on it or something? JK:p
Hardy har har.

raven54
12-03-2004, 06:19 PM
yeah, i know. I have the same type of humour as Reid

oneeyemonkeypie
12-03-2004, 06:41 PM
It's known as dry wit, an aquired taste.

Sup Drae, how you'se doin'?

Neways, Rrarbecy, you craaaazy!
(You know I won't stop saying that, right?)


Good story, the same criticisms I made on days of thunder applies here.


*Song of the moment: I wish you were here by Incubus*

raven54
12-03-2004, 06:47 PM
ooo! i LOVE that song!!

Allen CARR
12-03-2004, 07:49 PM
heres the next part, like it or not here its.nad give me some time, im have 2 other fics on this board im working updates for.



Part 2- Catch me if you can


Red-X and Batman steer eacth other down, neither one makeing the first move. The Sercurity Machines, began to circle Red-X.



X-Stands back up normally "The Batman, ive heard about you. They say you have no mercy for crooks." X says while backeing up.



Batman slowly begins walking towards Red-X, his cape flowing along the metal floor. Batman doesn't respond to Red-X, and X begins to look around at the robots and Batman.


X-sighs "I have the chip, so....im gone!" leaps in the air.



X leaps in the air, as the robots began firieng upon him. Batman watches this, X then tosses a smoke bomb behind the Batman. Then comes kicking back down at Batman. Batman dodges his first kicks, then catches his right leg, and throws him into the smoke.Batman runs into the smoke, but X is no where to be found.

.............................................



moments later, back outside, X runs out of the building. X grapples a roof top, and climbs to the top of it. Red-x stands on top of the roof, thinking he has eluded the Batman.



Red-X-Laughs "I thought he would be more of a challenge. I guess im not always right." laughs again.



As X turns to leave, Batman stands thier, and delivers a powerful Punch! it sends X flying off the roof, and into an alley below. Red-X awakens, and sees Batman comeing towards him in the shadows of the alley.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/thebatman/episodes/04manbebat/21.jpg




X-slowly gets up "Your good....Batman, alittle to persistent though." He states.



Again Batman doesn't answer, and slowly moves towards Red-X. X jumps up, and climbs up into an old window. Batman leaps up after him, the window leads to an old apartment, X dashes for the door. Batman quickly gives chase, X runs through hall ways. He looks back, and sees Batman slowly but surely following him.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/thebatman/episodes/08qanda/20.jpg



X ducks into another apartment, he kicks the old door down. Inside a family sits playing cards.


X-"Sorry, but im in a rush."


X momentarily stops, to look back, Batman slowy moves into the room. X then then bows, then leaps out the window, to another rooftop. He then, begins leaping from roof to roof. alittle beat, Red-X stops, and looks back to see if he is being followed.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/thebatman/episodes/09bigdummy/Pan06.jpg

The Batman crouches perched ontop a roof.



X-Extends arms out. "Your not gonna give up then, so maybe this will change your mind!" fires Red Beams at Batman.



The beams hit the the tower, and sends Batman falling to .X looks down, as a fire breaks out due to the blast, the building blazes with intense heat.



Red-X-"I warned you Batman." he angrily says.



As X stands thier, the rest of the building begins to fall in! It sends X, falling to the firey Building insides. X slowly rises to his feet, the building insides are covered with fire. From across the firery room, a figure moves closer to Red-X.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/thebatman/episodes/05bigchill/15.jpg


Red-X-"I knocked you out, you fell to the streets!" he franticly states.


Red-X looks around for an exit, as Batman creeps ever closer. He sees a door, still not fully covered buy fire. X leaps over the fire, to the door, he punches it down. and Escapes to another alley, he turns around, and blasts the door shut behind him.
.........................................

Moments later, Red-X alittle hurt begins moving from rooftop to rooftop, again. His movemnets, not as precise as before, his suit nearly drained of power. He gets to Gotham slums area, and sits on a wall buy a church.


Red-X-Breatheing heavily "I did it, i eluded the Bat, and got the power chip. Im better then i thought." He laughs loudly.



X slowly removes his face mask, his face is hidden buy the dark night. He takes out a small container, from his pocket, and drinks from it. He places his Mask back on, and gets up again.



X-"Thats better, now i gotta get home." He happily says.


As X prepares to grapple a building, He looks up. and Batman is soaring down from atop a tall building.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/thebatman/episodes/03cobblepot/04.jpg
end of part 2

Allen CARR
12-04-2004, 07:29 AM
what ya guys think

rrarbecy
12-04-2004, 09:52 AM
I love the way you do this with the pictures. I love it. I can't wait to see the whuppin' Batsy gives out to X. He should.

rrarbecy
12-04-2004, 10:16 AM
It's known as dry wit, an aquired taste.

Sup Drae, how you'se doin'?

Neways, Rrarbecy, you craaaazy!
(You know I won't stop saying that, right?)


Good story, the same criticisms I made on days of thunder applies here.


*Song of the moment: I wish you were here by Incubus*
What have I gotten myself into...?

Allen CARR
12-05-2004, 12:18 AM
Heres my last Chapter



Part 3- Red-X Forever



As X sees Batman comeing down at him, he takes off into the streets. he runs across a carless road stumbling. He looks Back, and sees the Batman once again, following him.



Red-X-Turns back "Leave me alone, you won't catch me!" he screams.



X useing all his strength grapples a rooftop, and slowly heads upward. X reaches the rooftop, and looks around to see if hes been followed. The Batman then apears atop the roof, Red-x is in disbelief.


Red-X-Shakes head "I never thought, you were this good." begins backeing up.

X backs up, all the way to edge of the roof. He looks up at Batman, who has stopped moving. X removes a canister from his belt, and holds it faceing the streets below.
http://titanstower.com/assets/animated/episodes/X/X36.jpg


Red-X- "Im sorry, i didn't want it to come to this. I have no choice now, let me go, and i won't drop this Xenothium canister. and I know, you know what Xenothium can do." holds up canister.



Batman looks at X, then at the canister.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/thebatman/episodes/04manbebat/24.jpg


Batman-Grunts "Listen kid, don't cross that line. The line, between thief, and murderer. Thats one line, you don't want to cross." he says in a angry tone.



X-"So the Batman talks again, i was getting tired of the grim silence. I gave you a warning though, let me go thats all man."


Batman-Shakes head "I can not do that kid, that chip you stole is very important." starts moveing towards X.



X-sighs "Sorry then, i have to." drops canister.


Batman-"No!!" he screams while leaping off the roof.


Batman leaps off the roof, he then grapples the little canister! The Batman goes falling into a dumpster, with the canister in hand! He looks up, and sees Red-X wavieng at him.


Red-X-"Good bye Batman, till we meet again. You will always remeber this night, the night you ALMOST...caught Red-X!" bows then runs off.

...........................................

Hours have passed, and the sun has come up in Gotham. Red-X sneaks into an apartment complex, and opens up a room with a key! He enters room 222, and then heads into a dark room, with a computer. X goes to the computer, and sits down, and logs online.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/masks/19.jpg


X begins talking to a man named Ghoul, they talk for an hour. As X finshes his convo, his apartment door opens up. in the next room, a little brown haired girl comes inside.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/thebatman/episodes/04manbebat/03.jpg


Girl-"Jason are you here?" she says with joy.


She walks into another room, and when she enters. sees Jason, a Redish brown haired short Teen, with green eyes and handsome face. His cheek bones nearly perfect. He is wearing a black and light brown Karate uniform.
http://www.dccomics.com/secret_files/images/dc/pic_medkaratekid.jpg

Jason is doing Karate moves, then sees the little girl. He smiles at her and walks over.


Jason-Hugs girl "Kim, i thought you were at a friends house?" he says with a smile.


Kim-Laughs "I missed you, so i asked for a ride home."


Jason-ruffles up kims hair "Sure whatever, you probably missed you game system." he smiles at her again.


Then someone buzzes the Apartment from downstairs. Jason runs over to the buzzer.


Jason-Presses buzzer "Who is it?"


Voice-"Yea i got a package, for a MR. Jason Todd."


Jason-"Hold on, i will be right down thier."


Jason heads down the dirty Apartment steps, he heads to the main lobby, then looks at the entrance and sees the Batman.
http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/thebatman/episodes/08qanda/18.jpg


Jason-Shakes head "No impossible!" he yells out.



The doors behind Batman open up, and police began storming the building. they pin down Jason Todd, as commisoner Gordan walks up to the Batman.



Gordan-looks at Batman "Thanks for the tip."


Batman-"My pleasure" he coldy says.


Gordan-"So according to the files, Jason and his sister are orphans. Hes 19, and has been looking after her for years. I guess we know now, where the money came from." looks at Batman then walks over to Jason.



Jason sister kim, comes running down the stairs. She sees her brother in handcuffs, and then sees the Batman.


Kim-runs to brother "No Jason, dun go, i will be alone!" She sadly pleads.



Jason looks down at her, and the police breifly let him loose.



Jason-smiles at kim "Sorry sis, im a thief, im sorry. The Batman caught me,but remeber what i taught you. Remeber to work on your martial arts, and where ever i am, we will always be together." He kisses her on the cheek.



The police then begin takeing him outside. On his way out, he stops, and looks at the Batman.



Jason-Smiles "How, how did you get me?" glares at Batman.


Batman-"Like this." removes Bat tracer from Jasons neck.


The police take Jason outside, while kim walks up to the Batman.



Kim-Looks up at Batman "One day, you will pay for this. I may be 11 now, but you will pay one day Batman." she runs back upstairs.



Later, the police searched for Kim but could not find her. The X suit was not found as well.


THE POLICE ARE STILL SEARCHING FOR KIM AND THE SUIT.

END

Allen CARR
12-05-2004, 10:17 AM
what do you guys think of the end?

rrarbecy
12-05-2004, 01:31 PM
You want to know what I think? You. Rock. That was great. THE OMNISCIENCE OF BATMAN IS APARENT! I also like how you take things from different shows and put them together. Where did the pic of Kim come from? And the pic of Jason for that matter.

Allen CARR
12-05-2004, 04:14 PM
oh the pic of kim came from "the batman" tv show, and the pick of Jason came from a DC comics site.

Red X Unmasked
12-05-2004, 04:18 PM
Just wondering, why wasn't the REAL Jason Todd's picture used for the story? That pic that you used (though I know you must be aware) was a pic of the Legion of Superheroes team member Karate Kid.

Allen CARR
12-05-2004, 04:35 PM
i thoughtKaratekid better suited my interprtation of Jason Todd in the animated universe. i liked the picture to, by the way when is the first chapter of your young justice story comeing?

Red X Unmasked
12-05-2004, 05:02 PM
Oh okay. And Young justice will either be up tongiht or tomorrow.

Kregor8
01-11-2005, 07:19 PM
Ok. This one is already done. I like this story. A few jerks, same old complaints, but it's better than some of your others. And I need to know - what is signifigant about Room 222 and the name Ghoul? (Not that they relate to each other). Better answer on the thread that lists all your stories, cause I will not be checking back here.
A few words on Red X. X is a thief - not a murderer (sp). Good job there. He's the best thief too. Very cool character. The way I've always pictured him, he's out just for himself - never never never anyone else (ok, maybe once or twice). You did something different, and it worked. I'd like to see the Kim-X sometime, but not till you finish all your other fics.
7<regor
Ps. Check out the TT RPG to see me do Red X!