Alone

[Aquagirl15]

Well hi. Many of you don't know me but please read my thread and tell me if it's any good!


She sits waiting for a friend to come
alone,alone, alone
A masked stranger comes and befriends her but behind the mask is a traitor
alone,alone,alone
Her heart is crushed, sole beaten once again
alone,alone,alone
Behind her unfeeling,behind the wall that blocks others is a sadden girl
alone,alone,alone
No one understands,no one knows
this is .....Raven

[Sproxie]

that was nice, is this going to be a song thread?

[Raven37]

nice.....very.....post your fan fic too!

[Raven37]

just so ya know, you spelled "sight" wrong in your title, and "schooled" wrong in your sig.;)

[Raven37]

Katie realized you spelled "Unite" wrong in your sig too!:rolleyes:

[Aquagirl15]

no this is not a song thread, it is like a poem.

[raven54]

ack! TRIPLE POST!!! it burns...

song thread, right? didja base it off a particular song or is it one you made up

[Sproxie]

she just said it wasn't a song thread.... :rolleyes: :D
what is a triple post?

[raven54]

when the same person posts three times in a row. it annoying... this is what the 'edit' button is for.

[nevermore]

It's when you post three times in a row.

As far as poems go, I wrote one in my free time at school, but I wrote it in an alphabet that I made up so noone would know what it says. If my parents read it, they might think that they need to spend more time with me, and that's the last thing I want.

[raven54]

yeah.. my rents are always worrying about me and don't think i do enough w/ my friends. it sucks...

[nevermore]

yeah, they never know when to leave you alone. It gets very annoying. The want me to have my friends over but I don't want to.....What are they going to do? My parents are strict about everything. This is the only thing that is fun to do around here.

[Sproxie]

yeah, they never know when to leave you alone. It gets very annoying. The want me to have my friends over but I don't want to.....What are they going to do? My parents are strict about everything. This is the only thing that is fun to do around here.my words EXACTLY.

but i'm gonna stop posting here now, it's ruining the thread, sorry aquagirl15! :sweat:

[Aquagirl15]

no prob. Sprox. do you think i should do one of these for every titan? :confused: i've been thinking of ones for robin and terra not so sure where they would go :sweat:

[RavenBlackfire3]

If my parents read it, they might think that they need to spend more time with me, and that's the last thing I want.couldnt have said it better myself!

oh, by the way! great poem!!!
ad also, i know toy didnt ask me, but i think you should make one for every titan. that would be awesome!

[Sproxie]

no prob. Sprox. do you think i should do one of these for every titan? :confused: i've been thinking of ones for robin and terra not so sure where they would go :sweat:
yea.

[nevermore]

Wow! People quote me alot.

Yeah, nice poem, I enjoyed it.

[Aquagirl15]

this is another poem-type thing you will probably guess who it is before the end.


She needs some one to help her,to care for her,to love her.
She finds some friends,some wonderful friends and love......
Can't control powers needs help runs to betrayl
SLADE....
At a price to pay she almost kills the ones that matter most.
A turn around as she saves the city and many lives
She is still loved,still befriended
Will this girl ever come back to the ones that care for her?
Terra...... the titans need you

[Sproxie]

this is a nice poem!
whos your next character?

[Aquagirl15]

probably robin...:shrug:

[rrarbecy]

The first one confused me. You describe Terra, but at the end, you say it's Raven.
Aside from that, I like them. You should do more.

[Aquagirl15]

really? i thought it described raven.:shrug: the 'masked stranger' was supposed to be Malchor. if you haven't seen Spellbound that would explain a lot.

[rrarbecy]

I took the masked stranger as Slade. Oh well. Spellbound was awesome, by the way.

[nevermore]

If you're talking about the first poem, the masked person could have been that Malchion dude. I don't know, I didn't get to see spellbound.....It's not fair.

[rrarbecy]

I just reread it, and I now see that it's Raven. You were right, I was wrong.

[nevermore]

duh. ya think

[oneeyemonkeypie]

ouch...if that was a joke, you should clarify with something like :sweat:


If it wasn't, you should apologize. Poor Rrarbecy, picked on just cause he's a little slow.;) (see, that was a joke!)

[Aquagirl15]

true i should have explained the 'masked stranger' better but terra isn't unfeeling and she doesn't block others from knowing about her. plus i wasn't talking about a real mask. more like malchor was hidding his true self from raven.

[Raven37]

Sorry 'bout the triple post!!!.....And At first, on the first poem I thought it was about Terra, Then about Raven and Terra, then Aquagirl15 finally told me how dimwitted I was and that it's about Raven and Malchior.:sweat:

[rrarbecy]

Hey, I'm quicker than all of you;) Yes, that was a bad joke.

[Aquagirl15]

yes you are quick rrarbecy. and now for my robin thread: OH! wait just a little thing before that. this title doesn't really have anything to do with my thread. but it was hard to find a title for this at all. :shrug:


He seems crazy and insane at times
But really he is suffering from anger
No one understands his so called obsession
Why he gets so out of control when dealing with this madman who knows?
If only he could catch Slade and kill him
Why are the boy's dreams disturbed with this evil man?
And now the greatest question of all: is Slade really gone?
Robin will push himself to find out

how'd you like it?

[Raven37]

very good, but you should try writing one that rhymes too, see how it goes;)

[nevermore]

Rhyming is hard (Oh yeah, rrarbecy, I was joking. I'm not that brutal.....or am I:evil: )

[Sproxie]

hey that was good, but yea, try one that rhymes. (yea rhyming is HARD, well, i thinks so anyway.)
you guys think rrarbecy is slowPsh, I'M slow! well not always but i can sometimes be so slow it's be pathetiq at times.

[Aquagirl15]

ryming simple words is easy. but to get the full statement out it's eaiser to not ryme. you guys know what? i just figured that theses are more like riddles. since i don't tell you who it is(although you can tell on some) until the end. who would you guys want next? if you'd like i could also do some villans. i've been thinking for starfire but nothin' good so far :shrug:

PS: you 'thinks so' or typo?

[Sproxie]

typo

[RavenBlackfire3]

the one for terra was amazingly good! (thats scary.... i just sounded like star..... *washes tongue* EWWWW!!!! STAR GERMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!! sorry, i hate starfire, and the nly reason im making a thread about her is for my friend. okay?????) anyways.... both of them are great, but i like terra, shes my fave character!!! :anime:

[Raven37]

hey, I like you sig. RavenBlackfire:anime:

[Aquagirl15]

thanks RavenBlackfire! i'm also going to make a terra song fic. i have the perfect song for it! :D i like terra too. raven is my fave. but then it's terra.

[RavenBlackfire3]

i already have a song thread for terra! it was so fun to make!!!! but....im not tryin to brag or anything!!!:sweat: good luck on your song thread!!!!! if your wondering what mine is, its called Predictable Terra :D

[RavenBlackfire3]

hey, I like you sig. RavenBlackfire:anime:thank you!!!:D

[Aquagirl15]

i knew that you song thread was Predictable Terra and you have a good reason to brag because it is very good!

i have three pages now! i'm so happy!*weaps with joy* no not really!

[Aquagirl15]

well you people probably forgot i have this thread but i'm posting a song fic. i didn't want to open a new thread so this is where i decided to post! for the people who know this song, i changed a few things just to let you know. anyway this is Figure 09 by Linkin Park an awesome rock band. at least i think so.



FIGURE 09


Nothing ever stops all these thoughts and pain attached to them, sometimes I wonder why this is happening.

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/betrayal/28.jpg

It’s like nothing I could do, would distract me when I think of how I shot myself in the back again. ‘Cause from the infinite words I could say, I put all the pain you gave to me on display but didn’t realize instead of setting it free I took what I hated and made it a part of me.

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/aftershockpt1/09.jpg

Never goes away… never goes away.


And now you’ve become a part of me, you’ll always be right here. You’ve become a part of me you’ll always be my fear.

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/aftershockpt1/08.jpg


I can’t separate myself from what I’ve done. Giving up a part of me, I’ve let myself become you…

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/aftershockpt1/02.jpg




Hearing your name the memories come back again. I remember when it started happening. I’d see you in every thought I had and then, the thoughts slowly found words attached to them.

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/terra/25.jpg


And I knew as they escaped away I was committing myself to ‘em and every day I regret saying those things ‘cause now I see that I took what I hated and made it a part of me.

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/aftershockpt2/01.jpg


Never goes away… never goes away…



And now you’ve become a part of me, you’ll always be right here. You’ve become a part of me; you’ll always be my fear.

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/terra/27.jpg


I can’t separate myself from what I’ve done. Giving up a part of me; I’ve let myself become you.


http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/aftershockpt1/05.jpg


Never goes away… never goes away… never goes away… never goes away!





Get away from me, gimme my space back you gotta just go! Everything comes down to memories of you!

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/terra/26.jpg


I’ve kept it in but now I’m letting you know, I’ve let you go! So get away from me!

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/aftershockpt2/21.jpg


I’ve let myself become you. I’ve let myself become you. I’ve let myself become lost inside these thoughts of you. Giving up a part of me I’ve let myself become you.

http://wf.toonzone.net/WF/teentitans/episodes/aftershockpt2/03.jpg


well i thought this could work for Terra or Robin but there were more and better pics for Terra. i'm not quite sure how good i did on picking the pictures for the words but i'll let you guys be the judges. :sweat:

[Lord Welshi]

Ok, late reply to this, but here goes, i shall do it in stages:

1) Absolutely brilliant. Personally, i found this rather haunting. Not creepy, but something that sits in your mind as you ponder it. A mark of a good poet is that he/she has the ability to make you think: well odne with this. I think it described Raven rather well: personally, though the masked traitor is Malchior (i havent see spellbound yet), i thought it could also refer to Terra: hermask of friendliness and friendship, before betraying the titans: perhaps this is a reflection of Raven's insecurities as a whole towards new people, not just the individual Malchior? I'm thinking again: excellent.

2) Not as good as the first, but not bad. Didn't feel as much like a poem as Raven's, this seemed closer to a cross between a poem and prose. Still, quite a nice effect: it shows just how twisted and confused terra's mind is. pretty good.

3)Well....i won't say it's bad, cos it isn't. Again, doesn't quite feel like a true poem, but it has it's charms. A good representation of Robin, though that oneline is waaaay to long to fit into a poem format! Still, pretty good.

Overall, the first poem for Raven was great, and the other two were alright. The Raven one worked so well because of the imagery and it's ability tomake you think: Terra's because it reflected her mind; Robin's was ok, but didn't quite have the same impact. This may be too traditional, but try using a set stanza format, with 10 sylables per line or something. Don;t take this as harsh, i did like these poems! I hope you write more of them.

Lord Welshi

[Aquagirl15]

well i totaly take all that as compliments cause my friends were a lot more critcial. so thanks! it seems all my first poem type things are better than all my others. :shrug: i don't know why but oh well... BTW here are some ment to be poems that do ryme and kinda have pome set up. i didn't really mean for the other things here to be poems some just turned out like ones. again the first one is better.

Dark

Have you ever been thrown into the darkness?
With no one to hold you when you were scared?
Is your life a giant mess?
Have you ever felt like no one cared?

And you cry out at night,
All alone in your bed,
But the morning's first light,
Is just another thing to dread.

You live life as a shadow,
No one ever comes near you,
Life is very low.
So wht is there to do?

Hide in the darkness, it is your only friend.

Light

Life hands you everything you want,
You never had to suffer,
But it's time for you to be taught,
One day your life could be tougher.

Don't get used to this,
Happiness doesn't last forever
It is one thing you will miss,
As you fall into Never Never.

Light is supposed to be happy,
But life will always be dark,
So you must see,
Sadness will always leave it's mark.

Don't search for the light, get used to the dark.

BTW again, i need to explain to those who don't know what i mean, ahem... Never Never is like death. there is a video game that i liked to watch my dad play and the was one level where you had to cross train tracks floating in the air. there was black all around them so if you fell, you would die, and my dad called it Never Never. so that's what i mean.

[Raven37]

anyway this is Figure 09 by Linkin Park an awesome rock band. at least i think so.
Awesome is sooooo an understatement!!!:rolleyes: They're an........hmm. They're too good for words. There, that's pretty good statement about them: too good for words. But I still feel it's an understatement..... lol.

Anyways, nice job! The pictures you chose were pretty good. Most of them went well. There were a couple of places of where a different picture would've been better, but it was still really, really, good.:DAltho I think ou might have wanted to start a new thread if you plan on doing several of these. Or, if you just plan on doing like 1 or 2, posting it on here's a good idea.;)

-Raven37

[Aquagirl15]

i'm only planning to do a few, it's time consumming and i don't know when i'll have time to do the next song i was thinking about doing. :shrug: plus i need to update on my story. so yeah not sure when my next song fic will be out but hey, it's good to know that i'm trying. :D